Scholarship / Proposed leadership activity Monash university Applied linguistic [3]

Hello everyone, please kindly give feedback to my scolarship essay, i am open to any kind of criticism, i would love to hear something about my essay from another perspective.

Please summarise, in words that can be understood by a person outside your field, details of your proposed leadership activity, why you chose your proposed host organisation and what your proposed leadership activity is intended to achieve. Also provide details, including proposed dates and locations of any proposed fieldwork and/or internships.

Enhancing my contribution

My name is Haekal, i graduated from Brawijaya University majoring in English education. With my current degree i am able to teach English as a second language to people around me, especially student from elementary school up to senior high school.

However instead of putting a sole focus on getting the best job in the market like most fresh graduate usually do, I intend to take master degree of applied linguistic in Monash University. Monash became my first choice because it is the top-ranked university in Australia in linguistics and applied linguistics, in the Excellence Research for Australia (ERA) Report (2012) Monash achieved a rating of "above world standard".

The reason why I chose applied linguistic as my future study, some courses I took during my previous study such as Pragmatics, Semantics, and Phonology can be a useful basic knowledge for my future study. My future thesis will also be related to my undergraduate thesis which is about finding a correlation between a speaking and listening skill in higher education students, a course like second language acquisition will be very valuable for my future research.

In addition, currently I am working as teaching volunteer in junior high school, and in the future I would like to develop my family's institution which consist of kindergarten, elementary, and junior high school by putting emphasize in English, this is where master degree in applied linguistic would play a vital role.

Finally, after two years studying in Monash university Clayton campus, starting from 29 July 2019 until 30 June 2021 I will be able to:
1.Contribute to my community
2.Capable of being a lecturer
3.A researcher focusing in the field of foreign language acquisition
4.Developing my family's institution, creating curriculum policy emphasizing in English as second language.

Scholarship / Improving the capacity of Australia's education through language proficiency [2]

Hi everyone, i would love if someone can review my essay about improving the capacity of Australia's education.

australia and indonesian language proficiency

Explain how the proposed activity will enhance collaborative partnerships with key institutions in countries of strategic policy; see (Appendix A in Program Guidelines.)
Describe how these partnerships will strengthen the capacity of Australia's education, training and research sectors
Outline any anticipated educational, social, economic or other benefits

(Maximum 300 words)

Along with United Kingdom, German, and Japan, Australia is one of the most notable country in Indonesia in term of education quality. According to Department of Education and Training the number of international students in Australia reached up to 800 thousands. The same data also states that most of those students are students in higher education level, and Indonesia contributes more than 19.000 students,

I seek to increase this number by improving Indonesian students' English proficiency. In my opinion as an Indonesian student, this number is somehow low, Indonesian students has so many potential to continue their study in country like Australia where education is one of the country's top service exports. The main problem for Indonesian students who want to continue their study abroad is their language proficiency, let alone IELTS, even TOEFL is considered a nightmare here.

In my experience there are too many students with high achievements and capability who can not even reach 500 TOEFL score, and most of them are afraid to take IELTS test. Some students also have dreams to work in Australia, where language proficiency is also a problem for them.

After achieving my master degree in applied linguistic and completed my future research about second language acquisition, I wish to eradicate this problem, hence, my goal to increase the students' English proficiency level in Indonesia, or at the very least in my district.

When there is an increase in Indonesian students' English proficiency level, we can expect an increase in the number of International students from Indonesia, this will benefit both country, Australia will experience a growth in the capacity of Australia's education, and Indonesia will have a better human resource by having more students studying in a country with great quality of education.