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Name: Duong Thi Thu
Joined: Dec 21, 2018
Last Post: Jan 16, 2019
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thuduong19   
Dec 21, 2018
Writing Feedback / Computers will replace teachers in the future? [3]

Computers are being used more and more in education and so there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

machinery cannot dominate education



In the age of modern technology, there has been immense advances in technology in most aspects of lives, particularly education. Many people are of the opinion that one day teachers will be obsolete in the classroom. I affirm that educator's position is irreplaceable in this area.

Some people hold a belief that the role of teacher in the classroom starts to fade, giving place to computers for several reasons. First, there are a number of fundamental subjects which are able to be taught by computers. Pupils can do assignments and get answers easily using computers in some areas such as maths and languages as these subjects only require students to memorize the information through a process of repetition. As a result, programmed-computers can provide a multitude of questions and answers to students to handle with. However, this hinders the interaction between students and educators.

All things considered, teachers still play a pivotal role in the classroom. Firstly, teacher can instruct and stretch students how to analyze and synthetize information efficiently and then give them appropriate feedbacks. Meanwhile, a computer is not adequate to evaluate mistakes or provide expanded concepts which are essential to enhance students' learning proficiency. Secondly, teachers can support students to develop other vital skills. A prime example is that through classroom activites designed and monitored by teachers, students can foster their critical thinking skill, creativity and team-work performance. Besides, teachers create motivations by honoring the academic achievements of the students.

In conclusion, technology will not bring the best values into education system if we marginalize the role of teachers. Education is a crucial mission that machinery cannot dominate in any time. It would be much more efficient for us to use a computer with the teacher's guidance in the classroom.
thuduong19   
Dec 23, 2018
Writing Feedback / Some prefer online courses to study and they think it is better. Others prefer classroom education. [3]

there are some repetition of words that you should consider to use other synonyms or different ways of expression. The arguments are not strong enough I suppose. You should give more explanations or examples to better illustrate your points. For example, with the first argument, u can say: The preference of taking correspondence courses might be attributed to the less expenses students have to pay for their study. For instance, ...

... reasons why people STRONGLY BELIEVE that taking ... because online courseS save money. ... to pay for travelLING. .... long way to THE UK, which means money saving (REDUCE THE EXPENSES...).

... Internet-based courseS.
with other studentS over ...
studentS MIGHT acquire ...
thuduong19   
Jan 16, 2019
Writing Feedback / E-market has become an ever-increasing trend and gradually overtaken in-store shopping. Pros & cons. [2]

Please advice me on this. Thanks a lot!

shopping online is replacing shopping at store



With the fast-growth of technology in the modern days, e-market has become an ever-increasing trend and gradually overtaken in-store shopping. Indeed, online shopping offers both customers and business-makers plenty of benefits, it also comes with several drawbacks.

In respect to the bright side, there are different pros worth mentioning. First, service-users find e-shopping incredibly time-saving, especially for those who are snowed under with work and family concerns. In fact, innumerable products could be delivered in the front door only with a click of mouse as e-shopping doesn't require physical travel and it provides convenient door-to-door service to the buyers. Secondly, e-market-buyers could have access to the international trade and make a purchase of any items outside their country. Amazon is a prominent example which offers customers wider choices with an excessive number of items and competitive prices from variety shops and stores globally. Thirdly, e-shopping also opens a huge number of business opportunities for small retailers to make great profits without the necessary of hiring an office or staff to maintain the operation of their shops.

All things considered, the demerits of online shopping should be also addressed. First, purchasing items online might cause satisfaction, disappointment and frustration to the buyers. In many cases, service-makers are prone to display glossy photos of their products to boost their sale; however, the quality or materials of such items are not as advertised. Second, people who access to e-shopping are more likely be at risk of being victimized by computer crimes. In fact, those making online purchase encounter higher chances of being hacked. For example, customers' ID cards, banking accounts or even private information might be invaded or fringed by hackers and bad people.

In conclusion, disregarding the disadvantages, online-shopping has gained in popularity and appeared to continue blooming and overshadowing conventional shopping in the upcoming years.
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