Posts by senseofhumour

senseofhumour

Oct 30, 2020

Writing Feedback / The only way to reduce the amount of traffic is to reduce the need for people to go to work, school [3]

Hello daneko, underneath are some mistakes you need to fix:

1,It is discusses that reducing the need for people to go to ->discusses have to change into discussed this sentence is a passive not an active

2,I agree reducing the requirement to go out will reduce the traffic in the city->"to go out" I think you should change into For going out .Will-> can

3, nowadayS
4, their
5, To using-> to use
6,taking money-> losing money/ having to bring money with them
7,leadS to traffic congestion
8,work AT home-> Home have to go with "at", not "in"
9, the amount of traffic can be reduceD
10,reducING the need
11,You should try to learn how to paraphrase more.
12,I dont believe that it ... it sounds a little bit curt,you should write more like ,I dont believe that it is the only way to help people to cut down on the traffic jam

senseofhumour

Nov 29, 2020

Writing Feedback / Topic: Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. [2]

home working consequences

With the introduction of the international technology (IT)industry, home working has gradually become more popular among people. It brings about tremendous benefits for humans but also has some unavoidable disadvantages. In this essay, I'll go into detail about the pros and cons of working from home and draw some conclusions.

I will start with the advantages first. One of the major plus points of working remotely is reducing inconvenience and risks when commuting from home to work. Traveling to the workplace and especially a faraway one tends to cause some unwanted outcomes for all of our workforces. Traffic jams or accidents can happen suddenly in rush-hour and take away their life. Besides, going back and forth for work is completely time-consuming, people should have spent that time on their hobbies or their interest rather than boring journeys to work. Moreover, allowing employees to work remotely also make their employers get on well with them more easily By being allowed to work alone without any supervision, employees will be more comfortable with their work and feel a sense of trust from their employers. Consequently, relationships in that company will improve and all the staff can also develop their team-working skill.

On the other hand, working from home still causes distractions for staff. Although home working removes the distractions that may occur in the office if a worker doesn't have a suitably quiet dedicated working space at home they may get easily distracted by household noises or other members of their household. Consequently, staff might have to spend more time on their work and their work-life balance can be disturbed seriously. Moreover, home working may make people lose their discipline, without supervisors staff might tend to get into bad habits or postpone their works which will lead to their recession in their careers.

In conclusion, while the benefits of working from home make it seems like a good choice, I still believe that it just take effect in some cases

senseofhumour

Dec 26, 2020

Undergraduate / UBC - tell us about who you are: I got into computer science because i missed a tournament [3]

1, ... a hand-me-down from my dad. You should fix the word "Hand-me-down" this word does not indicate the item like a laptop , it mean a piece of clothing given to a younger family member or friend because the person who owns it no longer wants it or it no longer fits

2, you also need to separate clearly the opening ,body and the ending

3, This topic is tell us about who you are, i feel a little bit sense of digress( my own opinion),of course it is true that the essay allow you to include something about yourself that you are most proud of and the reason, but it does not mean you tell the story of your whole life, you can write about it, but don't write too much about it, focus on assessing yourself, focus on who you really are and you can know about it more clearly by asking your family,friends (how do they feel about you -I guess their own opinion will be the most honest answer that reflect yourself) and also ask yourself too. All are my own opinions ,I hope these words can help you to improve your essay effectively.^^

senseofhumour

Dec 26, 2020

Writing Feedback / More and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time for a job or study [2]

Topic: (sorry for this inconvenience,but the topic are too long for me to put at the heading)
These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or study.there are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying and working in a foreign country

Studying and working abroad are becoming more and more popular among people throughout the world. Indeed, the enormous benefits that this choice brings about are undeniable, however, Studying and working overseas still make people have to deal with frustrating and complicating problems. Now I will first consult about the pros

On the one hand, Moving to a developed country to learn and work helps talented people improve themselves easier. Generally, countries having a huge degradation in the economy or are not developed, the infrastructure like and education level there would not be able to respond to people's learning and working demand. For example, people learning science, will need modern facilities like the microscope or model rocket and people who teach them have to be fully-experienced, also specialized in a clear field ;Therefore, only by studying and working overseas in other developed countries ,can people find a new place to bring out the best in them.

On the other hand, differences in culture and language can cause considerable troubles. Coming to another country requires people to be a competent user in that language and able to adapt to the culture there. Consequently, with the case that people lack of possibility to communicate with the local people and also surrounding colleagues will cause unwanted misunderstanding and reducing the productivity of each individual.

In conclusion, Working and studying abroad make people feel free and easier to learn a wide range of knowledge. However it still has some disadvantages which we should consider carefully before having a go to learn and study in different places.