Undergraduate / Software engineering and computer science programs - AIF 1 Reasons and Waterloo [3]

Any comments and constructive criticism will be appreciated. I am over 900 characters and don't have a conclusion yet, but my main concern is, was it personal enough? And please point out any areas where I should elaborate.

Waterloo application essay

Q1: Please tell us about your educational goals, interest in your chosen program(s), and your reasons for applying to the University of Waterloo. If you have applied to more than one program, please discuss your interest in each program. (900 characters limit)

I am interested in the software engineering and computer science programs at Waterloo due to my love of problem-solving and pushing boundaries. I aspire to define new frontiers of innovation and build a better future for generations to come. The UW Blueprint Organization will allow me to dedicate my skills in creating technology for the social good while honing my technical craft in a team environment. Waterloo's women in engineering club offers mentorship, outreach events, and networking opportunities. Having a mentor will support my learning, provide guidance in a male-dominated field, and enable me to learn from others' mistakes instead of my own. Waterloo's extensive co-op program fosters professional development from day one, adding a competitive advantage after graduation. Arguing my case with stakeholders and their team, asking questions, or sharing learning achievements, requires a certain finesse that is only developed from onsite experience that co-op offers. The program will also help decipher, where I add unique value to the company.

Undergraduate / AIF Pandemic Information - Computer Science [2]

All help is appreciated. Any edits to make the writing flow and stand out to the reader would be helpful!

the important things I've done during COVID-19

During the coronavirus pandemic, our lives have changed dramatically. For some of us, this has meant significant changes to our personal, family, and community lives. You might have spent time caring for people around you. You might have spent more time on academic work than usual. You might have been able to use this as an opportunity for growth in other ways. Please tell us about two or three of the most significant things that have taken your time during the pandemic. (limit 900 characters)

When the bitter reality of the pandemic finally settled in, I felt powerless. Lusting for control, I sought refuge in my eating disorder; after six grueling years of recovery, I relapsed. In May, I was rushed to the hospital due to malnutrition. After being diagnosed with an autoimmune disease, I knew if my habits didn't change, I'd be dead within the month. I turned to art for solace; painting my problems on a canvas made them feel less intimidating. I quickly accumulated an abundance of oil paintings, begging for their tales to be told. Quarantine granted me the time to reopen my art business after neglecting it to focus on school during grade 11. I began marching the streets eagerly with my mask on and an overflowing bag of canvases. I sold 12 pieces and made over a hundred dollars. I thank this pandemic every day for gifting me the stories currently being told on 12 strangers' walls.