Writing Feedback / floria_ran [3]

The question is like this:
People attend college or universiy for many different reasons(for example,new experiences,career preparation,increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

This one is my essay for the TOEFL IBT examination. And I didn`t know exactly about my level, so I want your advices. I would appreciate you so much! Thank you for taking your time to consider my conversation.

Never before in history has the issue of college education been more evident than now. Accumulating number of students poured into university campus for further education. Most of them, from my own part, attend college or university for new experiences, career preparation, and increased knowledge.

One of the most common factors is the appealing and fascinating world the students think about the university. When they finally get into the college, the students may gain some experiences, which they had never experienced before. The opportunities to be independent and temperance will be given by the university, which have strong attractiveness for these juveniles. The example that can support this idea is not only can they have the right to choose the subjects they really interested in, but to select the teachers they respect. Generally, the students in the university are freer than the high school ones. Of course, the chance to leave their parents is surely a new experience maybe a challenge for these freshmen. Definitely, in this angle, the college has become a compelling place for students.

Besides, another reason to explain this phenomenon is career preparation. As we all know, mounting number of institutions in the college such as some associations, a student union and some other areas have been established to improve the student's ability. Responsibility, communication and the distinctive sight can be cultivated in the college, which is extremely useful for the students to get a good job in the future. According to a recent survey, approximately 85.67% working positions offered for graduates provide a preference for those who get some working experiences in the college. If these youngsters were not having the chance to go to university, they would miss the opportunity to improve their ability and gain some experiences. In this way, the career preparation is also another aspect to interpret this question.

Perhaps the primary factor is the students want to increase their knowledge. The world is changing at a rapid pace, driven by science and technology. The countless inventions improve our life quality and innumerous manifestations of science pervade our world, and they profoundly affect the social, economic and cultural outlooks of societies and individuals alike. Hardly can the students live a better life in the future without enough knowledge. So they poured into the university to learn something new in order to win their ultimate aim, have the ability to enjoy their life.

Obviously, new experience, future preparation and enhanced knowledge. That is what I deem about why the students let themselves to work hard to have the chance to study in the university.

Writing Feedback / "Human needs..": Disagree or agree. [2]

Prompt:Do you agree or disagree with teh following statement?

Human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

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The habitat for some endangered animals, for some people, are attempted to be replaced with some new factories, cultivations and buildings. However, they fail to realize that these constructions will not only destroyed the harmony between our human beings and the environment, but also cause pollution and make noise, which had a bad effect on our healthy. Therefore, I can not stand with this point. Perhaps due to the serious situation of these species, the colorful and significant life they will give us and the ecological balance, hardly can I give the support to human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

The primary factor is the serious situation they faced with. Nowadays, accumulating number of animals which are severely ill have disappeared in this world. We can not see them anymore. Recently, a statistics demonstrates that approximately 85.67% extinction is caused by human being, such as building houses and factories, and extending farmlands. Assuming that we still not realized our fault, what an unvivid world will we live in the future? Definitely, to solve this problem, we should stop our behavior to destroy their homeland after a full calculation. Hardly can I describe our living environment with the world like cold, grey and inanimate and so on. Consequently, the serious situation, the pronounced reason lead us have the choice to protect their habitat, rather than destroy it.

This reason along, however, can not explain why I hold my opinion. Another contributing factor is these animals can bring us a colorful and significant life. By saving land for these endangered animals, we can have a strong self-fulfillment and take pride in ourselves. My brother, an active young man, used to go to the zoo with his parents when he was an unsophisticated child. He can conversant the panda's routine habit and play with the white dolphin. The lovely animals resist him a colorful and unforgettable childhood in his mind. Now, he is a doctrine of environmental protection. The strong responsibility, high consciousness and appealing personality are contributed to the faith to protect the endanger animals. He makes his campus life more magnificent and significant than those who play computer games day and night. If we just think about the profits and ignore to pursue a meaningful life, we will feel regret and empty and lost a lot in the future. Therefore, enabling people to have a colorful life, saving land for endangered animals give us a chance to bring our self-value into effect.

Although the two reasons I mentioned above is the important reasons, the ecological balance is also relevant to this question. Saving land for endangered animals is helpful to establish good relations between the human beings and the environment. My friend Floria, is a good example which can support this idea. She and her husband lives in a small village near a beautiful lake. When spring is coming, two swans will perch on the lake. The villagers like them so much. They feed them and these lovely birds are friendly to people in return. In order to give them a good habitat, people in this place refused a recommend to build a factory last year. As the result, they lost the opportunity to develop economic in this small rust. Were I am one of them, I would have the same selection. Accordingly, the harmony between our human beings and the environment is extremely important than to develop the economic with blindly eyes.

Admittedly, we can not deny that building houses and factories, and extending farmlands also has its advantages, such as provide more work positions and improve the economic condition. However, it doesn't mean that people needs for farmland, housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.For one thing, people can also gain jobs at other factories and the most important aspect for them is to cultivate their personal quality and improve their own ability. For another, there are still many alternative ways to impulse our economic such as promote the efficiency, which is more useful than to build a new one. Moreover, the problem caused by the factory can not be neglected.

In conclusion, during to the serious situation, the colorful and significant life and the ecological balance. It's unwise for people to demolish the endangered animals` habitat for more housing, factories and farmlands.