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Name: Dung Bui
Joined: Jul 27, 2021
Last Post: Sep 7, 2021
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From: Viet Nam
School: Agriculture and foresty

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DungBui   
Aug 17, 2021
Writing Feedback / The graph demonstrates the variation in the birth rates of two countries, namely China and the USA [2]

the changes in the birth rates of China and the USA



The chart provided demonstrates the variation in the birth rates of two countries namely Chine and the USA in the period from 1920 to 2000.
In general, the birth rate of both countries witnessed some fluctuation before a slight decrease. Besides, the statistic of the USA was higher than that of China in most of the years.

Starting at roughly 10% in 1920, there was some variation in the birth rate of the USA, followed by a bottom out at less than 5% in 1945. After that, the birth rate of the USA surged to 15% in 1950. The statistic of the USA witnessed a slight dip in the remaining years apart from two times steadily rise to about 12% in 1965 and 7%.

Regarding the birth rate of China, there was an upward trend to 15% before plunged, hitting a bottom of exactly 5% in 1940. Subsequently, the statistic of China stabilized from 1940 to 1945, followed by a surge, reaching a peak at 20% in 1950.



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DungBui   
Sep 7, 2021
Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 2: TRAFFIC PROBLEMS AND SOLUTION [3]

Your essay lack of words. This task need at least 250 so you should add more ideas or making clearer your ideas.

So the topic ask you agree or disagree with the former statement. The second paragraph should write about the benefit of 'TAX PRIVATE CARS VERY HEAVILY AND USE THE MONEY TO PROVIDE FREE OR VERY CHEAP RAIL TRAVEL'.

Example, because of the free rail travel (underground network free for children and the elder) so it can limited the quantities of people using private transport.
DungBui   
Sep 7, 2021
Writing Feedback / Different views about the funding of traffic system - money on railways or on new roads? [3]

The first paragraph seem like repeat the topic without reasons why you choose to expend much more money on railways rather than new roads.
Some people think that expanding more road system could tackle congested roads. From this, there are existence of multiple roads that help people commute comfortably and save time.

You chose to spend money for railways but you didn't tell the clearly reasons.
DungBui   
Sep 7, 2021
Writing Feedback / TASK 2; The idea that people should have their own house instead of renting one [3]

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.


Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?


The idea that people should have their own house instead of renting one remains a source of controversy. However, I hold the view that it is beneficial to renting house.

It is indisputable that financial element plays the crucial role when renting a house. Instead of spending a huge of money on house, people can give payment each month or a period (half year, quarter) which is economical in total. Moreover, it is flexible to change the living depend on favorite or the distance to the workplace. For instance, people can experience living next to the beach due to its tranquil and fresh for a few years. Thus, people can use the redundant money from renting house for investment or trying to do the new things.

Furthermore, the tenancy can give people numerous house's options. Houses' style is a case in point. While people have their own house expend tons of time and money for transform it, the tenants can easily choose their style of house ranging from classic, vintage to modern. Especially, almost apartment have full of interiors and convenient stuff namely stove, washing machine, TV, etc. It is more suitable for those who are frequently house moving. Besides, the utility services can be allowed to experience like sports space, swimming pool, park, convenient stores, library ...

In conclusion, it is advisable to rent house rather than buying one in place. I believe that this picking is intelligent for not only the present life experience but also the future.
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