Posts by Luana1017

Luana1017

Nov 15, 2022

Writing Feedback / IELTS 1: The increases and decreases of CO2 emissions per person in four european countries [3]

CO2 emissions per person in 4 countries

The line graph compares the average CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

In general, Italy and Portugal saw significant growths in the average CO2 emission in metric tonnes per person over the 40-year period. In contrast, this figure decreased for the United Kingdom and Sweden. Portugal experienced the most dramatic changes in four countries.

In 1967, Portugal and Italy were two countries having the least CO2 emission per person, at about 1 tonne and 4.2 tonnes respectively. Following that, these amounts increased gradually and reached around 5.8 tonnes and 7.8 tonnes from 1967 to 2007

However, in Sweden, the average CO2 emission per person grew considerably from about 8.8 tonnes to 10.2 tonnes between 1967 to 1977. Meanwhile, this number for the United Kingdom remained stable, around 11 tonnes. After that, the figure fell significantly, which declined from nearly 11 tonnes to 5.2 tonnes in 2007. Like Sweden, The UK also saw a dip of almost 1 tonne over the period 1977 to 2007

Luana1017

Nov 28, 2022

Writing Feedback / IElTS Writing Task 2: Plastic shopping bags are used widely and caused many environmental problems. [5]

There are some grammatical errors in your writing
floods ... and causes big -> floods...cause...
they would dug in -> would be dug in
replacing plastic bags by -> replacing plastic bags with

Luana1017

Nov 28, 2022

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 1 - The proportion of the use of water in several areas of the world in three categories [6]

I think you should not use the word "below" in introduction part because when you take real ielts exem, you will not draw chart in your writing.

When you write overall, you should write more than 1 sentence and don't add data in this part.

Luana1017

Nov 28, 2022

Writing Feedback / (Writing Task 1) The proportion of smokers in males and females [2]

The proportion of smokers in british society

The table gives information about the proportion of males and females who smoked in Britain during the period 1970 to 2000.

It is clear that the proportion of smokers in males was higher than in females in Britain. From 1970 to 2000, the figures increased significantly. However, the proportion of males who smoked underwent more considerable growth.

The percentage of smokers in males was 10% in 1970 in Britain. After that, the figure rose dramatically and reached the highest point of 37% in 1985. Following that, this proportion fell gradually, which declined by 9% from 37% to 28% between 1985 and 2000.

The proportion of males who smoke was smallest in 1970, at 5%. Over the period of 20 years, the percentage grew substantially and reach a peak at 37% in 1990 and then overtook the figure for females. Finally, males saw a decrease in the proportion of smokers by 10% (from 37% to 27%) from 1990 to 2000, which was similar to the percentage of males.

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