Undergraduate / husband of my mother's friend - SIGNIFICANT INFLUENCE Common Application Essay [3]

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PROMPT: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

When I think about a person who has had significant influence on me, not much people come to my mind. Of course my mother and even my sister are some kind of role models for me and influence me with their actions.

But there is one person who influenced me strongly in the last few years: J, the husband of my mother's best friend. He is born in XXX, but holds the U.S. citizenship.

J impresses me with his unbelievable stories, I love to listen to. The story when he moves to the US I like most is: It was in 1980 when he came to America with his family, planning to build a company. But at the same evening, he entered American ground, his business partner ran away with the whole IT equipment. But J did not even think about coming back to XXX after such a bad start, he attended university again and began to work for another company.

J shows me to give never up, being ambitious is more important than a lot of people think. There is always a spark of hope.

What J did with me is that he increased my bravery. He told me, if I want something, I have to do something for it. Those words always come in my mind connected to success.

Now J lives in XXX again, but he still works for a company in the US. J commutes between the two countries and is a master in coping with difficult problems.

J has endless love to give and due to the fact that my father has left our family in 1998 and had never tried to meet us again, J is like a father compensation for me. I call him Uncle.

He cares, delights, suffers and shares his life with me.

He taught me to give love, when I could rather hate. Achieving so much in life and being satisfied with the simplicity, is a wonderful and desirable goal. I have learned to admire the basic things in life, which are key figures and not being cheerless about not be able to afford superb things.

J definitely shows me, that nothing is impossible!

Undergraduate / Supplement DEAR ROOMMATE [4]

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PROMPT: Write to your future roommate and include anything that allows him and us to knwo you better.

I am really excited to meet you; after all you will play a big role during my university years. I love getting to know new people and appreciate different cultures. I believe a good friendship relies on honesty and openness. I hope you bring a lot of culture with you and show me your way of life.

I like being active and being out; our world offers innumerous fantastic adventures which are silently waiting to be discovered.

Sports like tennis are one way of being active for me. I love the fascinating interaction between muscle power and mental strength. A small yellow ball rushes over the court, trying to hoodwink me, but in fact it is my ally and the ball tells me what to do next.

But I also believe that a break in between is absolutely essential. I am a family woman and that is where I get most of my power from. I enjoy cozy Sunday afternoons within the family circle, cooking together and having fun. You have to know, that my relatives by blood are only my mother and my elder sister, so the term "family" includes all closer friends for me.

John Miles states: "Music was my first love, and it will be my last" A big part in my life is about music too. I enjoy making music as much as listening to music. But do not be afraid, I will not sing under the shower. I love nearly all kind of music; it is strongly depending on my mood. I see music as something like therapy, it makes me feel good.

You have to know that I am always open for a debate, especially about political issues. I am delighted to learn from others and get to know their views and way of thinking and argumentation.

I am looking forward to meet you; there is so much to talk. I certain feel that our friendship will not only last during study, it will last forever!

Let's start our University experience!