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MSetYo   
Dec 19, 2009
Poetry / NYU SUPPLEMENTAL LIMERICK/HAIKU/POEM [5]

Write a haiku, limerick, or short poem that best represents you:

I have two that I wrote. I'm wondering which one to use. Thank you so much for your input!
::: VERSION 1:::
The Callused fist

Battered and worn
Indifferent to pain

Always open

Fingers spread - wide
Very wide - reaching-
For a goal cannot be
Grasped

With a clenched fist

::::VERSION 2::::

My resolve is in crumbs
-Concrete Crumbs-
Each piece though small,
Is hard. Harder than the best concrete-mix on the market.
MSetYo   
Dec 19, 2009
Poetry / NYU SUPPLEMENTAL LIMERICK/HAIKU/POEM [5]

Thank You. I tried to write these in conjuction to the hardships I faced due to a Chronic Illness. Hence the recurring theme of pain/struggle.

Do you think that its still to dark?

Thanks again!
MSetYo   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Tufts Supplement: Many forms of self expression - contributing to the Class of 2014 [7]

Self-identity and personal expression take many forms. For example, music, clothing, politics, extracurricular interests, and ethnicity can each be a defining attribute. Do you surf or tinker? Are you a vegetarian poet who loves Ayn Rand? Do you prefer YouTube or test tubes? Are you preppie or Goth? Use the richness of your life to give us insight: what voice will you add to the Class of 2014?

my love to rap and freestyle



[rough]
It's 2.am. My head bobs up and down rhythmically to a crudely produced beat that flows from my headset. The sound of scratching breaks the silence of the night as my bic pen scribbles furiously across a sheet of paper. Thirty minutes pass and I finally finish the rough draft of the lyrics to my newest track.

"If this paper be my canvas let my pen be my paint-brush, Conveyance is the key, but don't let my rhymes rush..."
I love to rap, freestyle, write, and produce. It is a way for me to voice my daily concerns, philosophies, and beliefs to the world. When I first arrived in upstate NewYork, there weren't any computer gaming rooms and subways. I needed to fill the void the absence of such conveniences left me. Hence, I began to record songs using my computer mic and windows movie maker about Korea: how I missed the subway, the city life, and the after-school institutes I had to go to. Over the course of a few years, this passion developed from rapping about Korea to addressing problems in conventional hip-hop, recording from a laptop mic to a home studio. Today, rapping(for the sake of brevity), is much more than a hobby to me. It represents perseverance, freedom, and happiness and in a sense, it also represents me. On a different note, being an emcee has been a smooth journey so far aside from having to explain to my friends the difference between 50 cent and me.

It's 5 am. The dim light from my laptop illuminates the darkness of my room. I export my track as an .mp3 file into "my music" folder. I turn the computer off and collapse on the desk, the track still looping indefinitely in my head.
MSetYo   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Why I want to Apply to Syracuse - Syracuse Supplement [5]

As a highschool student living 1 minute away from SU, I can confidently say that your " why SU" adequately conveys your interest in the school. School spirit and sports are a big deal at SU. On a different note, I suggest you add " Let's go orange" somewhere near the end to truly cement your interest.
MSetYo   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Why (or why not)? Perhaps the key question is "Why in between?" [22]

I don't know if this helps or not, but try to cite classical philosophers. As an example,you might want to mention thomas aquinas when talking about empiricism/ causation. Also when talking about your inablility to answer your cousins simple question, mention St.Augustine and his theory that numbers cannot be altered by reason.
MSetYo   
Dec 28, 2009
Undergraduate / Common App Identity- I am an individual (not cliche) [2]

On the 15th of April, in 1992, I was born in the Crouse Irving Hospital Syracuse, NY. I was in fact, the first generation to be born in the United States. The first person I saw was a white nurse. The first place I walked was America. The first infant friend I had was a white baby named Roy. Even the first language I encountered was English. Yet, the first words I spoke at the age of seven months were Korean. My mother tells me I said 꽃(flower) and 물(water). Before I was even able read, write, and perceive the world in an objective, more or less in a proper subjective context, two distinct paths of identities lay before me. -- Or rather forcefully integrated into my life for this was not a matter of choice.

[New paragraph] The trout, after it is ready to venture out on its own, roams the rivers and the oceans. Yet, the trout embarks on a lifelong journey back to its birthplace. How the trout locates the exact place it was born, no one knows. What we do know, however, is that the trout has an extremely strong sense of its origin. Within the limited perimeter of my perspective, humans - at least most, resemble the trout. Self identity provides an emergency exit door and a sense of security. Especially in a convoluted world as now, self identity has become more important than ever before.

[New Paragraph]April 15, 1996 - I blow the seven candles out of the cake as my grandfather, grandmother, mother, father, uncles, and aunts finish singing 생일축하 합니다 (Happy Birthday). Happy birthday dear YunBaek they say. It is a subtle, yet significant change to a four year old who has been called Michael his whole life. Happy birthday dear Michael rings inside my small head... Happy birthday Michael...

[New Paragraph] During my four years of youth spent with my grandparents, my self -identity had become even more muddy and convoluted than it had been. Cultural clashes, disparity between looks and mindset, religious doubts - these were the main issues my young mind had to face. I was neither Korean nor American, neither Christian nor Buddhist, neither Asian American nor a fob (fresh off the boat). What was I? Who was I? What could I refer myself to? These unanswerable questions were asked countless times. I sometimes envied my Korean friends in the neighborhood: Kids with a solid base of identity.

{New Paragraph] April 15, 2009 - It has been over three years since I have been back to the States. Ironically, like the trout, I am back where I was born. However, the Michael Yunbaek Myeong today is very different from the Michael Yunbaek Myeong 15 years ago. The experiences I've had in Korea and the US, Seoul International School and The Manlius Pebble Hill school have increased my range of understanding of the world. In doing so, I have learned that there is a greater significance in viewing myself and more importantly others as individuals rather than their country of origin. Furthermore, I believe that it is imperative for every individual in this world to have had the experience of interacting with others different from them both culturally and intellectually. This is my greatest asset.
MSetYo   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / Dangerously High Risk Essay: Yale & Brown [20]

hmmm, my first impression while reading this was, " wait, what?" I think that that the admissions officers would be confused. Although it may capture their attention, this is still a very high risk essay.
MSetYo   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / What don't you know?- Brown Supplement! [7]

My only concern with this essay is that I've already read more than five essays very similar to this( friends, essayforum, etc etc). However, the genuine tone of the essay may be a big plus. Also, as others have stated, your use of metonymy( the pen) is very coherent and original. GL
MSetYo   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / my career aspirations, BROWN " What don't you know" [4]

Thank you in advance.

My eyes stare blankly at the red target of my opponent's chest and I wait. He makes his move lunging forward, focused on my left torso. This is a game over, my bait has been taken. I take a quick step back - left leg forward - followed by a twist of my hips as my right leg whips across the opponents face. Good Game.

For as long as I can remember, my right leg has been referred to as the "assassin." It has been a consistent crowd-pleaser in demonstrations and a reliable point-earner in competitions. With my beloved assassin, I know how to do a near vertical side kick. I know how to snap a baseball bat in half with a high round-house kick. And I know that I can execute almost any kick without fault.

However, I am what most martial artists call a right-leg dominant. When it comes to my left leg, confidence ceases to exist. I do not know how to kick above chest level. I do not know how to execute a high side kick without breaking the hip bones. And most importantly, I do not know how to remedy this situation.

I have favored my right leg always, using it over my left leg for a cheap reward of satisfaction. For years I have cheated, neglecting to train my left leg. I was lazy and I was impatient; impatient for success. Today, this negligence has rendered my left leg useless compared to capacities of my right. And I realize the validity behind the saying "there is no shortcut."

** I am basically stumped at this point. I'm trying to make some broader connections with my career aspirations etc. ANY advice would be greatly appreciated. Thank you so much in advance **
MSetYo   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "spirit for adventure" - Stanford--What should your roommate know? [5]

Well roomie, let me just start by saying that you are in for a wild ride. Have you ever had one of those frustrating friends who, regardless how much you beg them not to, will force your hand up along with theirs to volunteer for those embarrassing games they have at pep rallies? preceding sentence seems to be too long. Breaks the flow of the essay

I am a very active person with a passion for getting involved within my school and the community. I am also known for recruiting others to join things along with me, so I hope you like to be involved too. In high school, I actually recruited a few friends to join the swim team who had barely swam a day in their lives. Redundant use of " recruited." Replace one with another word.

Pros: Vernacular Language makes the essay seem personal and your voice is carried through.
Cons: Instills a jovial atmosphere.
MSetYo   
Dec 31, 2009
Undergraduate / my career aspirations, BROWN " What don't you know" [4]

Thanks again, does anyone else have any suggestions? I was also wondering whether or not I answered the prompt. Thanks in advance! PS This is due within the next hour!!
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