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marigandi   
Dec 26, 2009
Undergraduate / "Playing as a goalkeeper" - MIT pleasure essay (100 words) [8]

Hi. I am new here.

Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it

Playing as a goalkeeper in a soccer game may be boring because I only stand in front of the goalpost during the whole game. Yet, I like my position because of the responsibility that I have as a goalkeeper. I have to be alert throughout the match as I have to ensure that not one ball goes beyond the goalpost. Furthermore, I have to be a leader of the team because my role allows me to have a wide view of the match; therefore, I have to give orders to my fellow teammates based on my observation of the match.

Please tell me what you think about this essay.

Thanks
marigandi   
Dec 27, 2009
Undergraduate / "I presented to the Judges about the case" - MIT CREAVITY QUESTION [4]

You could develop this essay if you want. The essay has to be between 200-250 words. I think you could write more.

Like what theAbraham said, I don't think this shows creativity. I am not confident with this essay because I don't think that I have done something creative. But I used like an everyday life example and showed that I approached it differently using my creativity. Try to use a simple example. Creativity doesn't have to be a big thing.

Anyway good luck.
marigandi   
Dec 27, 2009
Undergraduate / "attraction towards Mathematics" - MIT admission essay [12]

Your first essay is good. It shows why you like music, and you explain it vividly.
Your second essay should show why MIT is a good choice for your passion for math.
Anyway hope this helps

Good luck
marigandi   
Dec 27, 2009
Undergraduate / Community essay. School of Engineering and Applied Science . UPENN [2]

Hi. Please have a read and comment. This was a hard essay for me because there is not a Civil engineering department at UPENN. So I took a different approach from what I had planned.

Benjamin Franklin established the Union Fire Company, the Library Company of Philadelphia, the American Philosophical Society, Pennsylvania Hospital, and, of course, the charity school that evolved into the University of Pennsylvania. As they served the larger community of Philadelphia, each institution in turn formed its own community.Which of the academic communities and social communities that now comprise the University of Pennsylvania are most interesting to you and how will you contribute to them and to the larger Penn community?

Growing up in Dubai has been a great influence in my life. I have a passion for engineering after seeing the globally renowned engineering projects such as Burj Dubai, The World, Palm Islands and Burj Al Arab, which brought immense changes to the settlement that used to be a barren desert. Now that I am going to college, I want to develop this passion that I gained through Dubai, and I think the social and the academic communities of the University of Pennsylvania will allow me to do so.

I am interested in the School of Engineering and Applied Science (SEAS) at UPENN because it seems to be different from what I have expected. Initially, I thought engineering would be about big construction, which is what I saw in Dubai. But after doing some research on the UPENN website, I noticed that the study of engineering is broad and that there are aspects of engineering, such as Bioengineering, Computer Engineering and Material Science, that don't involve much construction. Therefore, I want to learn those different types of engineering so that I discover something new about the study. I know what engineering can bring to society because I was able to witness this in Dubai, and I believe that other types of engineering will bring great changes as well, since engineering is all about creation and problem-solving. However, I think that the process of bringing the change varies among the different types of engineering, and I want to see these differences during my time at UPENN. Thanks to UPENN's flexible first year curriculum, I will have the chance to learn about different departments available at SEAS at UPENN. Furthermore, through the various research centers and opportunities available on the campus, I think I will develop a wider knowledge of engineering. I am particularly interested in UPENN's Rachleff Scholars Program, which will give me the opportunity to research what I want to research within the fields of engineering and talk to faculty members from various departments within the School of Engineering and Applied Science. Also, through this program, I will have the opportunity to interact with my peers outside the classroom and laboratory through community-building activities that will enable me to gain broader skills and the practical knowledge of engineering.

At UPENN, I see myself taking advantage of every academic and research opportunities. However, I also see myself contributing to the UPENN community within the School of Engineering at Applied Science by participating in engineering student organizations in UPENN. Engineering is all about ideas, and I would like to share my knowledge and observation of the engineering marvels in Dubai so that my peers can learn something and turn it into an idea. My observation and my fieldwork research on the Burj Dubai may benefit someone who has not lived in a world where there are many skyscrapers. What I talk about the artificial islands on the sea of Dubai might enlighten many people who have never experienced something of that sort.

Going to a UPENN, I think my passion for engineering will develop. UPENN will give me a new sensation about engineering because UPENN offers me with the diversity of the engineering course, strong research opportunities and a society of engineers whom I will work with cooperatively and share ideas with enthusiastically. As a person with only a small dream gained through my childhood life in Dubai, I think my dream will grow into a reality during my time at UPENN.

Thank you for reading.
marigandi   
Dec 29, 2009
Undergraduate / "Playing as a goalkeeper" - MIT pleasure essay (100 words) [8]

Thank you for the comments. Now I changed my pleasure essay, but it is related to soccer. Please have a look at my new one.

I shoot the ball, but the ominous defenders block the way of the ball. For the second chance, my shot goes miles away from the goalpost. And for the third try, my ball is saved by the opposing goalkeeper. Although the goal net is eight meters wide, it is very difficult to score a goal, and I need to constantly make shots into the goalpost. But that is the beauty of a soccer match because once I shoot the ball beyond the goalkeeper, I feel that all the endless effort to score is paid off by a GOAL.
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