Writing Feedback / Memory from the past can always give people more specific guide in the present - SAT [6]

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As the saying goes "One can't always live under the shadow of memories." Memories are the few important things that one is need of. In one's effort to learn from the past and succeed in the present, memories are playing parts in helping people to win the life.

In the area of business, the CEO of Starbucks, Howard Schulze, is a significant figure making memory lead him to success. Howard was born in a blue-collar family; both his parents have to work from dawn to night in an effort to support the living of the family. It was pretty common that the poor family ran out of money at the end of each month, so Howard and his little sister have to eat cheese accompanied by bread often twelve months old. However, little Howard cared about his parents a lot and had great passion and determination to be a educated person. At the age of seven, Howard's father lost his job as a driver when he broke his ankle during an accident. The luxuries money for paying the health insurance was totally unattainable for this low-incoming family. Facing his father sick and poor, with no health insurance, Howard could never forget. The shadow of his childhood didn't even stop his pace from becoming the CEO of Starbucks. As he says "I want to be in charge of my own destiny." He determined to escape poverty and became the first person of his family to graduate from college. The memory of Howard helps him realize his dream and earn the bachelor degree in marketing. And also his father's experience became the unforgettable memory in Howard's heart, so he pays all the health insurance money for the workers of Starbucks. In short, Howard's memory from his childhood helps him and motives him to be an educated person and able to make great fortune.

In the book Free the Children written by Craig Kielburger, a Pakistan boy Iqbal Masih was sent to a carpet factory at the age of 5. He had to work there from day to night without any rest. In the gloomy, shadowy and damp loom, this little kid got insufficient food and sleep. Six years later, in his age of 12, he was the size of a six-year-old boy. This was a horrible memory for this little kid. At the age of 10, Iqbal escaped from the carpet factory and freed by a member of the International Labor Constitution. There, Iqbal received great tender loving care. One year after his recovery, he set out and began to speak against children labor in public voice. He carried his memory from the gloomy childhood and started to show people how brutal children labor was. He went around the world giving out speech; as soon as Iqbal was presented in front of public, people applaused for his action and encouraged him to continue on. Swiftly, he helped over 3,000 Pakistan boys during one year. In all, Iqbal wasn't tripped by the memory from his childhood; instead, this past sad memory gives him the motivation to help more and more children labor get away from the shadow and inspire more and more people to join him.

Memory from the past can always give people more specific guide in the present and lead people to success. From the experience of Howard Schultz and Iqbal Masih, we can clearly see that these memories don't hinder them rather than help them triumph in the present. In short, memories, no matter good or bad, can always give people hope and assist people to win.

Writing Feedback / Is the opinion of the majority-in government or in any other circumstances-a poor [4]

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Throughout history, when a kind of opinion or the voice of the government spread about, more and more people will join in and start supporting these ideas no matter good or bad. Gradually, these viewpoints become majority ideas; however, there are still some people who speak against the public voice because they foresee the defects of these standpoints. Therefore, in my point of view, sometimes the majority is a poor guide.

A prominent novel To Kill a Mockingbird written by Harper Lee is set in a rural town named Maycomb in the early 20th century. During that time period, the whole America is facing the Great Depression. The society is precarious because people don't have enough utilities to sustain their lives and the gap between black and white remains serious. African-American man can't receive the same education as white man, they can't use the same door to the theater and they are always regarded as inferior race in most American's mind. In the novel, Harper Lee characterized a hero, Atticus Finch who is a local lawyer in the Maycomb County a man with great integrity, loyalty and dignity. When he takes a very thorny case concerns the rape of a white woman who is of the lowest rank in the society by a black man Tom Robinson, he sets out defending Tom's innocence by all means. It is as clear as daylight that Tom Robinson is accused unjustly; however, under that circumstance, it is impossible for a black man to win the case against a white people regardless his sinless. When the trial of Tom Robinson begins, all the town people go to the court in order to find out how Atticus can protect Tom's reputation. In Atticus's closing speech of defending Tom Robinson, he concludes that all men are created equal, no matter what is his race, his skin color and his religion. Contradict to the majority white people's ideas, Atticus stands out and speaks for African-American people because he knows that racial prejudice is not the theme of a peaceful and equal society.

In conclusion, the majority can sometimes be a poor guide; it can veil people's eyes making people follow the majority blindly without thinking about the consequences.