Undergraduate / MIT - Tell us about something which didn't go according to the plan. [4]

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Until class 8, I always used to get good grades at school, all thanks to my raw intelligence and presence of mind during classes. I always used to get away without doing much hard work and putting in great efforts. Upon reaching 9th, I realized that things aren't going to be that easy for me. But I had to learn it the hard way, so I continued the same trend of studying even in class 9. There was not much of a difference in grades in the term results so I became even more confident about my self, but did not realize that I was becoming over-confident. And ultimately when the final results were out and I saw the sudden decrease in the grades, I felt extremely bad and thought that I could never make it up. After some words of encouragement from my family, especially from my father, I decided that I will not let this happen to me. I was determined to achieve success in 10th and worked very hard towards it. At the end of the year, I saw all those good grades again on my report and felt better then ever. From then on, I made it a point that whenever I fall, I will not sit and repent, I will put in my best to stand up again and reach for my goal.

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Undergraduate / MIT - Computers: Department that interests you the most (100 words) [6]

Computers have always intrigued me, and the developments in the last decade show that sky is the limit for the advancement of Computers. Computer have always had such an impact on me that once I dismantled my own PC just to satisfy my curious mind, that wanted to know what actually exists in that box called CPU. To my great delight, I was able to assemble it back and it was running just as normal. After this experience my love for computers grew infinitesimally. Therefore, Computer Science & Engineering at MIT appeals to me the most, as of now.

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Prince