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Posts by sisiyunjao
Joined: Dec 5, 2010
Last Post: Dec 13, 2010
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sisiyunjao   
Dec 6, 2010
Writing Feedback / "work nowadays is more stressful and less leisurely than in the past" IELTS essay two [10]

Many people think that work nowadays is more stressful and less leisurely than in the past, how about your opinion?

Answer:
In contemporary society, people are confronted with more stressful and less leisure working condition. Most of them expand their working hours and working intensity to achieve success.

It is manifest that people living in modern cities should spend more time on their work to grantee their job opportunists. Obviously, the booming population leads to stiff competition in big cities. If you take a rest and do not treat your job ...

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sisiyunjao   
Dec 11, 2010
Writing Feedback / "work nowadays is more stressful and less leisurely than in the past" IELTS essay two [10]

psebastian56
However, it does not relive the current stressful working situation that may change the attitude of the people and their lifestyle and philosophy aspects.
quite confuse about this sentence what i mean is root cause of stressful working condition may come from people's attitude of lifestyle and philosophy aspects.
sisiyunjao   
Dec 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Boys and girls should attend separate schools [11]

First, students in these single-sex schools pay more attention to their study. When children reach the age of puberty, they are too concerned with their appearance and how the other sex think about them. These problems in their growth process make a lot of distraction for them.

In my opinion, the third paragraph is too short comparing with the second one. Maybe u can restructure it.
sisiyunjao   
Dec 12, 2010
Writing Feedback / IELTS the advantages and disadvantages of the prevalent of English [2]

With the development of globalization, English became the dominated language in national trade, conference and many important events. This phenomenon has aroused a heated discussion in public.

Some people claim that the prevalent of English brings a great number of benefits for people. First of all, it promotes the communication and interaction between different countries more conveniently and clearly. In the ancient time, the different languages and geography set barriers for people to exchange their goods and ideas. Fortunately, the innovation of plane and train solved the geographical barriers. If we can popularize the use of English, the language hinder will disappear as well. In addition, English is a beautiful language, which is more systematical and extensive than many other languages. Learning English can foster people's sentiment and nourish their literature and art.

However, the opponents believe that the dominated status of English has destroyed culture diversity and many less-used languages become extinct. Even English is a sophisticated language; it does not express every detail of life especially in Asia countries, which have totally different linguistic system. It is undeniable that language contains many aspects of people's daily life, which is influenced by culture, environment as well as religious. Obviously, these languages have special significance for people who belong to them and using English to replace them is crudity.

Personally, English as an elegant language should be advocated in many fields to expand the global trade and communications. But, we still need preserve other languages for sake of keeping the linguistic and cultural diversity.
sisiyunjao   
Dec 13, 2010
Writing Feedback / "Does a zoo have any useful purpose?" [5]

Animals are important in our life which have many of the usages in the different fields. Z oo is contains a lot of animals which receive the required care. Some people may consider that a zoo has no useful purpose, while in my view it has many benefits in our life, so I completely disagree with this statement for several reasons.

The first reason is that a zoo is essential as an educational tool. it contains hundreds of different animals which are useful to students in different stages such as in primary school,university and preschooler .I
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