Writing Feedback / Descriptive Essay: Description of a Flood [6]

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The creeping monster steered its way through the ghost town, carrying the dirt and debris as a shield to ram down the rows of homes and buildings. Its muddy, wave-churned body consumed everything in a second as a helicopter hovered over the water filming the catastrophe. The monstrous massacre of houses and trees resulted in an assured death of the town as the gluttonous fiend approached his next prey. The brute started gaining velocity as it enters the town like an anxious tourist. The helicopter, now tentative to follow the pretentious murderer, ascends higher into the sky waiting for the rolling waves to come hurtling down on the municipality. Town after town the hydra continued its slaughter as it gradually enters the city like a charging bull. The caustic tsunami penetrated the metropolitan, still not satisfied with the destruction it's already caused. The seas and waves invaded the land. The interior of the earth moved in a strange way, and the ocean floors lifted suddenly, flooding the dry land. The earth, for the first time, was submerged.

Writing Feedback / THE CAVE- Creative Writing [2]

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THE CAVE
The scrawny creature was forced into a dank, dark cave. It had been left curled up in the corner of the room with a thumb in its mouth. Its black, beady eyes darted back and forth around the room, vigilant of intruders. Dust swirled around the cave as the creature reposed and made itself comfortable. The only sound to be heard was the constant and monotonous dripping of the wet patch on the roof. The water was discoloured by the dirt and mud. The creature noticed the small rocks falling from the roof of the cave and heard a distant rumbling. The giants were fighting again and it couldn't do anything about it. They were significantly stronger than the creature and had a massive advantage in their size. It was too afraid to confront them and instead hid in his corner curled up like a cocktail shrimp. It had hardly eaten the last couple of days. It had to salvage food from the floors of the cave and was sometimes even forced to drink the dirty water. Its anorexic figure left his cheeks puckered up and his ribs being able to be visible through his chest. The creature held itself tightly and waited for the fighting to stop.

The next morning the creature felt a flood of light shining at his eyes. The cave had been damaged by the rumbling of the giants and a small crack in the wall was created. The creature dragged its drained body towards the crack and took a peek outside. The giants were still fighting. The creature did not know what to do. Soon the whole cave would be brought down if they continued fighting. The creature continued to stare outside as the monsters prolonged their battle. One looked more masculine than the other and was overpowering it. The smaller one did not look too eager to fight but was being harassed by the stronger one. Soon the bigger one looked like it had given up and walked away, far away from the cave. The other one started to cry and buried her face in her hands. The creature slowly and cautiously climbed out of his cave to comfort her. The boy quietly walked up to the mother and asked her, 'Mummy are you OK? Why is Daddy leaving? Will he be coming back?'