Writing Feedback / Two seasons winter, and fall - check if I ramble, and puncuation [NEW]

Prompt: two seasons winter,and fall

Note: My teacher wanted me to combine 2 of my paragraphs, without a concluding paragraph.

Winter Seasons

There are two major events that link me to the two seasons that I like which are winter, and fall. These two seasons are my favorite because my friends and I do special activities together in these two seasons. First of all I would like to tell you about winter and why it is one of the seasons that I picked. When winter comes my friends and I get together from different cities and go to the mountains to enjoy fresh air and activities that we planned to do such as: mountain hiking, skiing, fishing, and other activities that we think of when we get there. My friends and I love to go mountain hiking and enjoy the thin chilly air that comes from the hight altitudes then take our skiing equipment and ski down the huge slopes to see who reaches our cabin first. Then when the day gets near all of us gather our equipment and go fishing on the lake until sun set, and after that we go to our cabin and watch movies. This is why winter is the main season in my life.

My second favorite and major season is fall because during this season when my family and i lived in Ukraine we did many things to prepare for winter. In Ukraine people are very busy when fall comes because people try to do as much work as possible to prepare for winter. For example, people put vegetables and fruits into glass containers so that the air tight containers preserve the fruits and vegetables during the winter season. Others make space in their basement for crops such as, potatoes, sunflowers, and corn. Kids have a very important job during fall. Their job is to rake the leaves that fall from apple trees and pick up the apples or other fruits that fall off the trees. At the end of the season we all sit around our parents and wait until they cook us some apple pies and wait until we see the first snow flake.

Writing Feedback / Four ways to control stress, take up a hobbies, exercise regularly, set realistic goals, etc. [2]

PROMPT: Four ways to control stress.

Controlling Stress

There are four ways how people can control stress take up a hobbies, exercise regularly, set realistic goals, maintain close relation ship with friends, parents.

Firstly, the most common way to relive stress is by making a hobbies, something that you will do everyday to keep your mind off work, or education. For example i began boxing to relive my stress, I fight a dummies which lets my mind to not concentrate on my stress related day. Boxing is a very good way to relive stress because when people box they pretend the dummies is their stress and hit it as hard as they can and once people run out of energy from hitting dummies too much they believe they have defeated the stress that way. If you are one of the "none violent" type of people, then try out side activities such as soccer, or volleyball try playing something that will make you happy and not frustrated.

Second good way to relieve stress is by doing different kinds of exercises such as, jogging for couple minutes, or going to gym. Mostly elderly people try to squeeze in their time in the morning to have couple minutes to walk, run, or jug around a block to get more healthier and relieve stress. Studies have shown that a person is more happier when he or she takes couple of minutes every morning to have a walk with a friend, or relative, or even a dog. Other people simply just go to the gym as another way of exercising. Inside the gym people use dumbbells or use treadmills to relieve stress, when a person does something that they enjoy it helps that person to overcome stress by not thinking about it too much.

Third best way to relieve stress is by setting realistic goals such as finishing college, or start a good career. When a person is well organized that person sets realistic goals to help himself stay on coarse. People who enrolled into colleges are less stressful then the people that went to work after school. For example the person that is going to college knows his major that he will study, and once students come out of college they wont have problems finding a job. Which it makes easier to be less stressful on the other hand, people who have not went to college are stressed out because of the low pay rate they get from working and barely having enough money to pay for bills.

Finally maintain close relationship with friends, and parents is one of the most common ways to relieve stress. People who have very close relationships with parents are less stressful, because they have a special bond with parents that help them overcome stress when there is a bad situation. If you are feeling alone and stressed rent block buster movie buy some popcorn and have a family night and enjoy the movie which will help you to relieve stress. Another good example of relieving stress, by going out with friends to have fun going to eat someplace with friends, or do some outdoor games like volleyball or walking around on the beach. In other words having fun with family and friends will help people to relieve stress.