Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Important qualities of a good supervisor (boss) [6]

Simple topic but kerlenin, I must say you made even simpler. Well written and ideas are very clear. I am sure that mentor will give you full point. I need some tips from you. Do you want to share experience and tips with me which may help me out to bring best required score for me?

Thanking you

Writing Feedback / Study at home using technology or study at traditional schools? [9]

Can we write partially? Someone told me that partial response may decrease my points. So, he suggested me to avoid.

Writing Feedback / Study at home using technology or study at traditional schools? [9]

Partially agree and disagree with the statement.

Writing Feedback / The advanced technology help students easily learn knowledge. TOEFL essay [6]

Every day, technology is getting advanced. With techonlogy advancement, students are also started using them in their daily lives. I strongly agree with the statement 'nowadays students can learn more information and learn it more quickly with the help of technology. Studets use computers, cellphones and portable music players to get and to share the information.

With help of internet, students can get easy and fast access to information. They do not have to spend time to search information in the libraries or textbook. Even schools have made a provision for students by setting up libraby on internet. So, students can get access library 24 hours without any problem. Sometimes, library has limited source and limited numbers of edition of books whereas on internet, students can access information from all over the world. I often go on internet website such as google for getting information on any term. It saves my lots of time. Students often send assignments to their professor through internet.

Students use computers to keep daily routine records of their class journals, assignments and research papers. So, they do not need time to spare time to manage all things. They have easy access whenever they want. They can easily rub them or easily add information. It also saves lots of papers and ink which keeps healthy environment maintained.

Students also use cellphones to share information through MMS, SMS and Email among freinds. Students have started listening lectures for learning purpose through portable music player known as ipods. Students install class lectures into ipod and they listen them while travelling or eating. So, they do not need to take out separate time. My friend, Vikas always listen english songs to learn english and make it better.

In brief, nowadays students become more advanced with technology and from technology, students can learn as much as they can.

Word Count : 308
Please give review on my essay.
Thanking you.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] The Cost of Human Development [9]

Human becomes a pain for animals. Human needs a space to live and also for his development. Human started building new communities, societies, shopping complex and business empires. To fulfill the requirement of increasing population, he started destroying the trees which lead to damage to the habitats of animals. Animals habitats are no longer exist. I disagree with the point of view that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals.

Human started destroying trees. As a result, animals' habitats are no longer available. Animals started entering the human developed areas. For example, I often see a group of monkeys in my society and they harrass people. They always come for searching food. Sometimes, they become offensive during monson time if someone tries to drive them out. They do not have space to get protection from rain. Trees deforestation also affect the small aminals badly. Like dogs and pigs. Due to human development, some spicies or animals are about to disappear or already disappeared. Some animals spieces become history for animal nature.

Due to deforestation, animals have problem in finding their daily food. Sometimes, I see a cow searching for vegetation to eat. If it fails to find its food, it will eat plastic or paper waste which is bad for its health.

Human also started developing his house on water which results into water pollution. Fish and other water creatures often feel disturbance from presence of human in water. I have spend some days on house boat built in the lake. I realized that fishes had been disappeared in that lake because of water pollution in lake due to mismaintained by human.

To sum it up, human should reserve some land for animals which help them to live safely and convenient to find food. Also reserved land allow them to move freely.

Word count - 311
Need feedback.
I have formatted some words in bold which are detected under word processor because of incorrect words or wrong spelled.
According to you, how much should I get ?? Out of 5.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] The Cost of Human Development [9]

Thanks Brislav for feedback. Yeah, I have a problem with idea generation. Therefore, I can not write my essay effectively. I do not know what should I do to improve? So, I can express topic better.

Thanking You