Writing Feedback / "My grown up Christmas list" song [8]

I don't know why I choose the song "My grown up Christmas List" to listen now, maybe I am lost in memory, maybe I miss my childhood and my Mom very much, or simply I haven't listened to an English song for a long time, for months. Or because I only want to listen to Kelly Clarkson's voice now, a beautiful voice which I love so much.

I already study 4 periods of English at school. Oh no, I must say exactly in the dorm of our school. My university doesn't have enough classrooms for all students so that more classes are placed at some of rooms in the dorm, of course there're tables and a board in need.

I feel disappointed after class. It has been my feeling for long time. Sometimes I felt very excited about the lesson some of days in the past, but I soon realized my problem is that I am not self- confidient and I still have not become a confidient person as I expect.

Some English songs really give me relaxtion, peace, and they warm my heart a lot. I always feel like adventuring an interesting world, getting a new feeling and enjoying an exciting experience when listening to an English song. That's enough to illustrate my thought and my passion. Ah, also US film about life, love, friend, adventure and childhood make me feel so.

When will I become a confidient, never say can't and not fear person? When is this day?
I must have a strong heart.
Not feel bored and unmotivated any more. Practice and try to the best of my ability.
To keep my Dreams.
To love more, share all of things I have without receiving with the people who I love
And Give all of love and inspsiration to My Passion.
To Live My Life!
P/S: Maybe I need a list,
A list of the Dreams of my life!

Do you remember me
I sat upon your knee
I wrote to you
with childhood fantasies
Well, I'm all grown up now
And still need help somehow
I'm not a child
But my heart still can dream
So here my lifelong wish
My grown up christmas list
Not for myself
But for a world in need
No more life's torn apart
That wars would never start
And time would heal all hearts
And everyone would have a friend
And right would always win
And love would never end
This is my grown up christmas list

As children we believed
The grandest sight to see
Was something lovely
Wrapped beneath our tree
Well heaven only knows
That packages and bows
Can never heal
A hurting human soul
(rythms)
What is this illusion called the innocence of youth
Maybe only in our blind belief can we ever find the truth.
...
This is my grown up christmas list.

Writing Feedback / "an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday. [NEW]

It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided to go by bike on this trip because we all wanted to enjoy the atmosphere there. As expected, the air was so great and clear. We felt very excited about this place. After having lunch at my grandparents' house, we took a short nap and made all preparation to go fishing with grandparents in the afternoon. The lake beside the house has many fishes and we had a joyful fishing and a lot of dishes cooked with in the evening. It was our first day.

On the second day, we got up early and drove bicycle around the village. The traffic was not heavy of course. We went along the small roads, had lunch under the shade of an old tree and saw the children play with kites in the afternoon. The wind made us feel relaxed and peaceful.

On the third day, dad and mom allowed my sister and I to help my grandparents with the works on the fields. The summer comes, either the harvest does. People are more busy to collect all corns and rices. We had a hard- working day. We went to sleep early and the village at night was so silent.

It was such a memorable travel of mine, we felt very happy during the after time of that summer, and all sorrow was disappeared!

Please feel free to give me some corrections. Thanks for all advices!
This is a short essay with about 15 sentences written "to describe your last summer holiday" with simple words and grammars.

I haven't visited EssayForum for a long time (to me) because I had some troubles and difficulties with my life in this period of time.

Finally I can come back till today.
I missed EssayForum very much (although I didn't have time to join with everyone a lot and had not so much memories but I could know exactly what I felt.)

I missed all of them: EF_Kevin, EF_Susan, amrosca, oscarlpf1, chatoyante, snowfairy10... my friends! , I remembered the discussion between us, the advices I was took and given, the effort we all tried to learn English better and the help of all people.

I am making a change with my life and ready for the change to better and better, the change that I accept, now, and everyday.

Happy to come back. :)

Poetry / "Dear You" ; Poetry writing [3]

Dear You,
I have made my mind
with a lot of thoughts
Then finally I decided
to come to see you,
the happiness of my life
tonight...
...
This afternoon I heard outside
The wind is blowing up
The birds are singing on trees
And my violin singing your song high.

I feel nervous, a little shy
I run away from my heart
But the road I always want most,
is the road I'm running to you.
Dear You.

Poetry / "I Always Wonder why..." - POEM [3]

I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.

Then one day I heard a sound
It was touching my heart so much
That moment I had to ask
where this music came from?

It makes me always love my home
love the morning with bright start
love the tree with pure leaf
the autumn with full of leaves,
in the summer running with yellow fields
and holding all-night-winter with warmness
When the piano sings these first notes
I'm surprised that they are you,
and from that I knew,
you could shape all flowers of spring in your mind.

I always wonder the day,
When you first falling in love
your heart must have beat so fast
and rhythms had each new change.

I'm always hurt when you get pain
For years I'm living with that,
when the past days your tears shed
Memories just go away...

I can't forget whenever you say
you remembering your childhood,
Parents, brother, the road and rainy day the most,
when life gets tough,
I wanna share everything with you.

I always wonder very much about you,
how attractive you are,
how sensitive and caring,
how funny and interesting,
and all of theses behind.

I always wonder your first child,
How beautiful that she could get
And happy faces of all your kids,
Because in that moment, I want to see your smile.

I hope you take good care for yourself
for every journey you'll take steps
for enjoying every moment you'll have
for being through sorrow and happiness,
you see clearly your life,
it's wonderful because of you!

I have never told you,
in an untold way,
How important you are to me.

You are the first and the last,
For I sing my most beautiful time in my life.

I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eyes
That whenever I see it,
I find deep in your soul peace.

- This is a poem I wrote. I'm about to send this in a special day to the one that I love so much for 7 years. This is my sided love. I'm so grateful if you all can give me some feedback, I would really appreciate. Thank you so much!

- Here in this poem:
"I always wonder why
You have such beautiful eye(s)
That suddenly when I catch it
I find the happiness.
...
/That whenever I see it
I find deep in your soul peace." -> I want to keep the word eye is "eyes", but that will not match the grammar with "it" in the next sentence right? Because of wanting to keep the spirit and sound, I very want to keep the original, but get a little confused.

Hope you guys can help me. Thank you for stopping by! Thanks for this chance to meet new friends. :)