Writing Feedback / Being happy with a job is more important than having a high salary? [7]

(I'm going to take the TOEFL iBTŽ test this July, so please help me with my writings. Thanks in advance !!!)

Everyone wants to have a dream job. Many people prefer employment with high salary, while others consider whether they like the jobs or not. If I have to choose between the career with high wages and the one I am happy with, I will choose the latter.

One factor that affects the efficiency of work is the attitude of the employee towards his job. If he loves his career, he will work very hard. If he hates it, there will be a tremendous decrease in efficiency. Even with high salaries, many people refuse to continue their jobs because they feel that they do not fit with what they are doing or the working environment cannot bring them creativity.

An enthusiastic worker is likely to remain in his position for a long time. Therefore, he will collect precious experience and easily get promoted. Being happy with your job motivates you to stay longer with the company and set goals to achieve. On the other hand, if you have to do boring tasks or make risky decisions at work, it is impossible for you to find motivation to further your career.

When you have the job you love, you do not want to jump to another company. This stability enables you to start your future plans. For example, after getting a good employment, you think of saving money to buy a house and build a small family. People who are dissatisfied with their jobs cannot focus on preparing for their future. The first thing they would do is to change their job until they are happy with it.

Well-paid occupations often go with pressure. Pressure can be a minor problem if you find inspiration and motivation in your job. Thus, being contented with what you are doing is always more important than getting a high wage.

Writing Feedback / "desire of good employment" - Why people attend college or university? [6]

"People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increase knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer."

We have seen a tremendous increase in the number of people going to university in the last few decades. Why? Have it been for the development of the education system? Do employers require employee to have a higher education? Let examine several reasons below.

According to many surveys, the main purpose of people when they attend university is to prepare for their future career. Now take a look at employers' opinions. As the world advances in many areas, companies, corporations and organizations require their employees to have deep knowledge of their fields. Imagine that you are a person who only graduates from high school. How can you take such complex, demanding jobs nowadays? It is a belief that if you have no higher education, you can only do manual labor or low-paid jobs. These kinds of occupation often accommodate no promotion or get higher salaries. Moreover, because of this belief, more and more people enroll in colleges and universities each year, which lead to the fact that it is very competitive to be accepted to a job. If you do not receive a higher education, you are in an unfavorable position.

Another reason why people attend college or university is the experiences. Going to universities for 4 years or more help you become mature. For example, every student will feel nervous when they live in a different academic environment - the university. Soon, they will have to change something in their views, thinking, or even characteristics to adapt to this new place. They gradually feel comfortable; therefore developing relationship with other students and professors, participating in campus' activities, which will develop and sharpen their social skills. Thus, they will gain new life experiences. Besides, they also learn about how to prepare for future career by many different ways. For instance, they will learn about cooperation, an important trait that employers need, through group projects and presentations at school. They can also spend 4 years to find their best suitable jobs and research about what companies and corporations consider when they hire new people.

In summation, going to university or college enables people to achieve their desire of good employment in the future by giving them substantial knowledge and experiences.

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Are my reasons effective? Is my writing coherent? I'm going to take the TOEFL test, so please criticize me more and show me which things I need to improve in my writings :D.

Thanks in advance :D

Writing Feedback / Improving roads and highways or improving public transportation? [4]

Topic: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

Nowadays the amount of traffic has increased rapidly, which leads to big traffic jams every day. There are two main solutions: improving roads, highways and improving public transportation. There have been many debates about which solution we should focus on. In my opinion, upgrading the public transportation system brings more advantages.

First, let's analyze why improving roads and highways is not a good option. As we all know, the number of cars has rose tremendously in the last few decades. Building roads do not solve the puzzle about traffic jams but encourage more and more people use their own cars instead of buses, subways. Moreover, it is very expensive to invest in roads and highways projects, and these projects often bring no good results. When roads or highways are being repaired, construction companies have to close them and people have to use other streets. This can cause a street to be overcrowded with cars; therefore, a lot of people will be stuck in traffic jams. An American wastes about one week each year in traffic jams. Traffic jams make the economy lose a lot of money each year. Cars in traffic jams cannot move, but they continue to emit harmful smoke to the air, which will make the global warming issue more severe.

Another reason why upgrading public transit service is preferable is that it alleviates the environmental issues. If we have good public transportation, more and more people will use buses, subways instead of using cars. The amount of traffic will decrease; therefore, there will be less harmful smoke, the main cause of air pollution and global warming, in the air. Furthermore, we have to know that governments work for the people. Many people in the middle and lower class, who account for large portions in population, use public transportation because the cost is cheap. If we build more roads, only people in the upper class can be beneficial from this. A good government is a government that serves all people, not only a small group of wealthy individuals. If all people use buses or subways, they will be more aware of the sense of community.

Those are the reasons why I think governments should concentrate on improving public transportation. I use buses as much as I can. If we all use buses or subways, this world will be a better world.

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Thanks in advance. I'm trying to write at least one essay a day :D (well, I think this quotation, "practice makes perfect", is true), and there are a lot of essays that are waiting to be posted here! I will need to read and give feedback in other threads a lot.

Writing Feedback / 'Understand others' emotion, attitude and feelings' - face-to-face communication is better [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, e-mail, or telephone calls.
Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

There have been many technological breakthroughs in communication such as telephone or e-mail. They all affect the way we are in touch with other people at some aspects, but they cannot replace the best type of communication: face-to-face interaction. Why? It is because when people are talking directly, they can show and see each others' emotion clearly.

First, face-to-face communication helps us recognize the attitude of the others towards you. Human being is so complex that one can express her emotion and attitude by using hundreds kinds of facial expression. They can show you what they feel about you by moving their eyebrow, smiling...For example, you are telling jokes at a party. You can infer this from people's faces that you are not very good at making people laugh. Therefore, you can adjust your behaviors properly before you make fun of yourself. However, if you use e-mail or instant messages, you simply see texts and it is very hard to know if the others are willing to communicate with you.

Additionally, you can show your emotion and willingness to other people when you talk with them. For instance, a smile can bring a sense of friendliness; therefore, people can talk with you comfortably. You can make friends more easily and the impression about you will stay in people's memories longer. Besides, face-to-face communication can help you reflect yourself a lot. During a discussion, eye contact, posture and speech can show a person's confidence, persistence, ability and determination to win the debate. If you can use these factors effectively, you are likely to get the upper hand. That is a reason why world conferences are not held online. People in important positions from different government gather, in addition to use logical and persuasive language to present their opinions, they also take the advantages of face-to-face communication.

In summation, during a conversation or a meeting, the most important aspect is that people understand each others' emotion, attitude and feelings, and only face-to-face communication can provide this unique feature.

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Thanks a lot for helping me !!!