Undergraduate / Major: Psychology - My Interest in Psychology ( UC Transfer) [3]

I have more than one way of writing for this prompt. I am trying to write the different versions. Whichever version is best from the critiques, will be the essay that I submit.

Please help me out.
Thanking everyone in advance.

What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.

In the tenth grade, I did my career search project on psychology. In the eleventh grade, I took my first psychology class. In twelfth grade, I volunteered at a local hospital. In my first year in college, I took a child development class and joined the psychology club. My sophomore and current year in college, I'm taking abnormal psychology and represent my college's psychology club at the inter club counsel. Next semester I'm planning to take two more psychology classes and run for president of the psychology club. To please my parents, I researched other majors, but no other major has caught my interest like psychology has.

My interest in psychology started as a frantic hobby. In ninth grade, I took personality quizzes and believed that psychology was the answer to finding my identity. When looking closer at psychology through my personal research and experiences from classes, I realized I barely knew an ounce of psychology back in ninth. Personality quizzes where not valid, reliable tests. Personality quizzes are nothing but pseudoscience. I was never a fan of science and called myself a humanitarian. My neutral schema has adapted the idea that psychology is in fact a science that follows the scientific method.

Everyday I learn about new case studies, terms and researchers. From knowing researcher like Freud and Zimbabwe, my knowledge is extended to V.S Ramachandran and Anthony Pratkanis. In the past 6 years, I have learned what psychology is and now want to know which area of psychology is best for me. This time, I won't look at the personality tests that fail to follow the scientific method.

Undergraduate / Half a Bindhi - Transfer #2 :Accomplishment essay [2]

Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?

Half a Bindhi

Kids would walk by, their noses scrunching up as they saw me. I didn't smell but I guess they thought I did. They used to raise their brows in shock when I tried mingling with them. After a lesson on Gandhi, boys looked at me and snickered. The school hallway echoed with the chanting of "Gandhi dot...Gandhi dot."

I was the only one who wore a bindhi (a sticker that is kept in the middle of the forehead and symbolizes Hinduism) to school. People judged me by my appearance. They assumed that I was not "cool" and that I ate smelly food. At lunchtime, I didn't have anyone to play with. At the age of 10, I didn't understand the value of having a culture different from that of everybody else's. Frankly speaking, I simply didn't want the kids at my school to keep making fun of my bindhi. After much dispute with my parents, I finally got permission not to wear it.

By the time I reached high school, I had made a new group of friends. These friends didn't know the bindhi-me. They did know that I could not talk about the latest American albums and movies. Of course, I could tell them all about the latest Indian pop stars, but then they would probably laugh at me.

Even in a community college, people still look at one another and judge each other. At the start of Spring semester, a new immigrant from India was enrolled in my biology class. She was wearing a bindhi. She reminded me of my old self; back when I was always the girl criticized for wearing a bindhi. My friends looked at her the same way the kids in elementary school had looked at me. I was so frustrated at the thought that if I were still wearing a Bindhi today, people would make faces at me. I yelled at my friends for the low respect they showed for someone of my culture. My friends were not sure why I was shunning them until I confessed to them that I used to wear a bindhi to school.

The next day in my class, I didn't sit with my friends. When I returned home, I had a message from my friends expressing their apologies. I returned the following day class with increased confidence and invited my friends to come to my cultural show, where I would be performing a classical Indian dance. For once I wasn't trying to hide anything.

The night of the cultural show, I could see a row of my friends looking up at me as I danced the intricate steps. I wore a golden pleated dress and a red blouse. And I also wore my bindhi.