Writing Feedback / The same necessity of giving money to libraries and sport [3]

"Universities should give the same amount of money to their students sports activities as they give to their universities libraries."
Do you agree or disagree with following statement?
Use specific reason and examples to support your opinion.

I think it is a little hard to scrutinize and sum up all the aspects of this object in a 12-13 line essay because it is a kind of complicated question to answer. and I think that is the why the determiners of the universities are still arguing about this topic to make a decision ,more economic and more effective. but if I found myself in the choice position, I will give them the same amount of money because each benefits and advantages of them are not outweigh than the other we. let me lay out my reasons.

First of all, I think the necessity of assigning money to educational departments like libraries and research projects is clear to all. if they can't access to money, obviously, science and knowledge won't advance not even a word. since progress the science and educate the students is the main purpose of the universities, it is absurd to deprive them of money.

On the other hand, all we know that education is absolutely depends on health. From statistical point of view, students who participate in sports programs are more physically and mentally healthy and the point is that they are more successful in their lessons. that remind me a sensible sentence the wise owl says .he healthy mind is he healthy body. which means effects of sports are in the same level of effects of libraries.

In summary, I tried to give my reasons on the same necessity of giving money to libraries and sport. in my opinion giving the same amount of money to both of them are undeniable and incontrovertible.

Writing Feedback / 'People visit museums for many reasons' - visiting museums during travel [6]

Hello,
I am preparing myself for my Ielts test and It would be my pleasure if you can help me.

"Many people visit museums when they travel to a new place. Why do you think people visit museums. use specific reasons and examples to support you idea"

People visit museums for many reasons. Some of them are really interested in museums and history. Some of them just look at museums as a place for passing their times. And some other people visit museums because it is the best place which you can have most enjoyment with less problems with the speaking in the current language of that strange place. But the point is that museums are very popular in different sorts of people. Let me give you some reasons to support my idea.

First of all , museums are fascinating place for people who are interested in history because it is a location for collecting all stuffs which they want to see. A place for knowing more about history of a special thing or heritage of a particular age and epoch or background of a specific region. So it is attractive enough for Not only historians but also ordinary people to make a bee line to the museums for entertain and learn.

On the other hand, suppose that you are in a strange place and you are not able to make conversation with other people because of your incapacitation to speak and understand in current language of that place. So museum would be a good choice for you to make, because actually you need no special ability to comprehend and sense what are you seeing. Just there are some basic information like a digit as the year of discovery or excavate of that ancient thing or something like that you will be able to understand with the first glance.

Moreover, ancient objects like skeletons or remnants of a special period or region are fascinating enough to absorb different kinds of people to come and see and ponder about them. For showing you the correctness of my claim I can invite you to a museum and you can see that many people who are not historians or even history followers. they are some people who just enjoying what they are seeing.

In summery, I tried to give you all my reasons to supporting my opinion about the advantage of museums. As I mentioned museums are a place for many sorts of people.

thank you
soroush,