Undergraduate / Standford roommate essay! I want to be done today so let me know what you think. [4]

Hey roomie!
Well, we are about to embark on a journey that will change our lives in unexpected ways and I am so ready to break free and finally experience college! So before we make that leap, you should probably know a few things about me. First off, I was born in Stockholm, Sweden and I am half Swedish (thanks to my dad). This means I will show my Swedish pride and heritage through my abundant amount of Swedish chocolate, crazy socks, and my love for IKEA and Swedish meatballs...yum :). Another big part of my life is sailing. Yup, that's right. I'm a sailor, and I won't let you forget it! Every summer I competitively sail throughout the Midwest and sometimes, if I'm lucky, in warmer places like New Jersey! Yes, I did, in fact, sail off the Jersey Shore. My favorite band of all time is The Beatles, but that doesn't mean I wont randomly belt out some Adele or Katy Perry (their songs are just so catchy!). I've been brainwashed by my mother into making my bed every morning and keeping my room pretty clean, but due to my cousins' rooms, where I can hardly see the floor, I'm cool if you're messy. There is one thing about me that sadly, and ultimately will cease to change...maybe irrevocably. I am always late. From changing my watch to 3 minutes ahead to waking up earlier, I can never seem to promptly be on time. Maybe you'll be able to solve my tardiness or learn to love this quirk! I am a very bubbly, adventurous person but I am also a great listener and can be quiet and down to earth. I love to meet new people and experience new things; I was in a variety of clubs and sports in high school that gave me different perspectives on peers, my school, and also life. I plan to join some clubs and hopefully join the sailing team upon entering Stanford. Now that you've been loaded with some information about me I'd just like to say I am so excited to begin my Stanford adventure with you! I'm sure we will have a lot of fun together in the upcoming school year :)

See you soon!

Undergraduate / Stanford Essay: What matters to you, and why? Wanna be done today so let me know :) [3]

I feel like it's missing something/doesn't have enough closure so you can be harsh! i really want to get in!

Every summer I go up to my lake house in Wisconsin, spending the time reconnecting with friends, swimming, and sailing. Sailing has been an active part of my family's lives for as long as I can remember. I'm a sailor, my mother's a sailor, all of my uncles are sailors, and my grandpa's a sailor. You could say sailing was in my blood from the minute I was born. As I grew older, my appreciation and admiration for this sport, and pastime, grew as well. Sailing is a part of me, and always will be. It has taken me places I would never think of experiencing and to people I now call family; I have learned a vast amount about the sailing community as a whole due to this. As the years have passed, I have sailed with multiple partners, but in recent years I have sailed with mainly one partner. Through the numerous sailing events, we grew closer and closer together and became an incredible team and I now consider her to be one of my closest friends. One competition pulled us all the way out to New Jersey. This was completely new to us; we were going halfway across the U.S. to a 420 (the boat we sail) clinic where any teenage girl in the nation was welcome. I met girls from Florida to California and everyone seemed to have their own spin on our one common link: sailing. This competition was truly memorable. We sailed brand new boats we assembled ourselves, catching glimpses of Sea Nettle as we navigated the salty, rolling waters of the east coast. Listening to sailing coaches from Dartmouth to Stanford opened my eyes to fact that sailing is a universal sport; I can take it with me wherever I wander. Many of the friendships created on this trip I plan to keep forever. Sailing has given me so many incredible opportunities that created everlasting memories in my life so far, and my life has only just begun. When I'm on a sailboat, catching the wind and pulling the ropes, I get a sense of belonging and pure happiness. Nothing can replace the way I feel when I'm sailing.

Undergraduate / 'My body and world around me' - Stanford Essay: Intellectual vitality [2]

"I cried once a week"..."She gives you so much homework, I never slept!"..."That class was the death of me." Walking into my first day of class, my mind was swarming with nervous thoughts of how I was going to survive this term of AP Biology. The actual subject of biology was hardly a topic within my racing thoughts. To my astonishment, I walked out of class with a smile!

Over the summer, I was assigned to read Survival of the Sickest and answer questions in preparation for the class. Not only did I complete this assignment early, I thoroughly enjoyed reading the entire book, which is usually a rare occasion due to the fact that I strongly dislike being forced to read books over the summer; I much rather like reading at my own free will. It fascinated me, the way nature has affected humans throughout our entire existence. I was surprised repeatedly and engrossed in the stories and facts behind the relation to diabetes and the Ice age, as well as other strange connections.

My teacher, who I had envisioned as a cold, scary women, turned out to be a cheerful, humorous, and also very helpful women who I greatly look up to. I look forward to the lessons she puts together and AP Biology is now the highlight of my day. She made learning biology intriguingly fun with the help of biology raps she found on YouTube, produced by Stanford Biology majors. This was the first time I had really noticed Stanford as a possibility for my future education. Now I know it is the only college for me: its students made me fall in love with biology even more.

Having completed a full two terms of this class, I am now more aware of the world surrounding me and the processes taking place within my body right now. At the beginning of the year, people questioned my intentions in college, and to this I had no response. Now I can confidently say I plan to further study biology at Stanford and proceed into the medical field upon graduation.

i know it needs work! so help me and i'll help you :)