Undergraduate / 'I love to travel' - Georgetown's essay [5]

APPLICANTS TO THE MCDONOUGH SCHOOL OF BUSINESS: Briefly describe the factors that have influenced your interest in studying business.

Please help me. Any comments are welcomed
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Do I know anything about business? No. Do I have family members who work in business field? No. Do I have any business experiences? No. And yes, I want to study business.

First of all, I love to travel. Nowadays, global market has become normal and familiar to people, and working places have no longer been domestic permanent but international worldwide. Studying business provides great chances to go here and there, to meet more people and to learn more cultures. Furthermore, by the government's open policy, business is the best way of integrating the international economics. Exchanging new ideas, introducing our culture to the world, and expanding worldwide customer are necessary. The Vietnamese live in foreign countries always missing Vietnamese fruits and other specialties since they do not have these foods at where they are living. I do not want my tropical country with countless wonderful fruits to be unknown to the world.

We could not introduce us to the world and so does the world. As a fan, I wanted to buy a product from my favorite singers. Unfortunately, Vietnam was not in the shipping list. The singers wanted to expand their fame to Vietnamese fans. And Vietnamese fans wanted to go to their concerts or buy their products. However, we and our favorite singers did not have a chance to do so.

Secondly, I love working with people. It is fun to combine all different ideas into one idea, which somehow contains a part of the origins. It is interesting to know what people think about the same subjects, to see the different approaches from them. I love the way people dress making them unique somehow but becoming of symbol of businessmen, even though there are no uniforms.

I am very excited and curious about what I am going to learn, to explore and to experience. All ideas will be new and fresh. There may be different ways of approaching to problems. I consider studying business as a journey that I will take. And I long for it.

Undergraduate / 'Santa Claus, Classmates, Monitor, Music) - Describe yourself - Creative essay [2]

The Admissions Committee would like to know more about you in your own words. Please respond to one of the following two prompts: (A) Please submit a brief essay, either personal or creative, which you feel best describes you. OR (B) Describe an experience you have had living or working in a diverse community. How might that experience help you to contribute to the life of a university community like Georgetown's?

Please help me correct this essay. Do not only correct the grammar, please also correct the ideas.

Any comments and suggestions are welcome. Thanks very much
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How many worlds do you have? How many YOU do you have? I have three me-s in three worlds.

Dear Santa Claus,
I want to tell you this. No matter what people say, I believe that you are real. No matter what they think, I love you and believe in you. Even if there are no gifts, you bring me the spirit.

This year, I hope that you can bring me to Wonderland, where I can be a princess wearing any beautiful clothes or having any hair styles that I want to; where I can meet the fairies and see the miracles; where animals and flowers can talk, sing and dance; where there are countless colorful, delicious cakes and candies.

Please bring me to my Wonderland so that I can see the no-ending rainbow; where all days can be day with sun shine and where all days can be nights with stars and moon.

Please bring me to the world of hope and happiness, of colors and sounds, of loves and miracles.
Thank you so much.

Dear my classmates,
Why do you only focus on our three majors? Why don't you study all 13 subjects as I am doing? You are wasting your time to narrow, not to broaden yourself. Take time to look things around you. Take time to share stories and photos. Take time to look at others' smallest change in attitudes.

But why do you have to study that hard? Have fun. I have something else to enjoy rather than to learn. Why do you leave Judo class after all? If you had joined the Camping Day, your dream would have come true, your childhood game would have turned out to reality.

Love

Dear my Monitor,
My friend, you left me in a hard condition when you suggested me to be the monitor of the class during that time.
When you ask "Can you?", I could not answer.
I could not say no because I, myself, loved your suggestion and it was my dream. However, I could not say yes in a frank way like that. I was too shy and embarrassed to admit it. I was too afraid of the responsibilities. But I chose to say yes, which was good for both of us.

Thank you for giving a chance to take the responsibilities. Thank you for making my dream came true, although I had been waiting more than 11 years.

I asked Santa Claus to bring me to Wonderland not because I don't have one. I have my imaginary world, but it is totally different from Wonderland.

Let me introduce my World of Music and Art.

The world of music is where I run into for hide, for safe, for sympathy. Music brings me the variety of life through its small part called songs. There is always a song that fits an emotion. There is always a song that brings me the feeling that I have never felt before. Music is my reflection. It let me be me, be in any moods, even it is angry, disappointed, sad or happy and excited, without any complaint. It is an advisor and a friend of mine. I always want to be lost in this world.

Art is not what I run into but it is a door opening to the world. It takes the world in its eyes, in its papers and in its sculptures. It is the mini world reflecting real life. But it is the tool to search for wonderful imaginary things. It proves to us that you can last forever when other things cannot.

I will not bring one me to Georgetown's community, but the three of me with my three worlds. I bring to you the full of my self, my energy and enthusiast.

Undergraduate / 'Judo teacher ' - school or summer activity [6]

In the space available discuss the significance to you of the in which you have been most involved.

Please correct my grammar mistakes and also the idea of the essay.

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"Hajime! The game is on. Use your legs, hands, hip and shoulder. Focus. Combine your movements. Drop your partner. Trap her. Hold as tight as you can. Matte! Next pair please!" "Remember our rule: throw and drop your partners with whole strength. Otherwise, your partners will be badly hurt."

The very same reminder my Judo teacher keeps repeating in each of our lessons. Judo is not about fighting techniques. It is about the spirit. Judo is an art, a combination between the mind and the body, between both weak and strong. Contempt would never be allowed in class. We learned to be diligent, determined, but also to respect our partners.

If we want to be successful, we must co-operate with our partners. Judo is a very sensitive sport. We need to pay attention to all our movements, our positions, and our strengths. Once our partners do wrong we need to tell them. We need to show them what we feel when their positions are not correct. If we do not do that, we may get dangerous injuries. This is what we enjoy about Judo. This is how new friendships are built.

At first I and my seven other classmates signed up for Judo class. After signing up, I had once wanted to quit the class before it even started. I was afraid that it was too violent. I was afraid that I would get hurt. I was afraid that there would be no way to withdraw when I was in. However, it would be wasteful for not joining that one-and-only class since my school was the only high school in the city that had a Judo room right on campus so I decided to take part in it. Two years later, I was the only one in my class signed up for Judo despite I would not have a partner to pratice with me, despite the busy schedule of the last year in high school. I found the only girl in the next door class signing up for Judo class. As the result, we were the only two girls in the class.

I am very proud of what I did. I am pleased because I made the right decision that I chose to follow my preference.

Writing Feedback / Creativity is very important nowadays to make a better life [4]

Quote:
Given the importance of human creativity, one would think it should
have a high priority among
our concerns. But if we look at the reality, we see a different
picture. Basic scientific research is
minimized in favor of immediate practical applications. The arts are
increasingly seen as
dispensable luxuries. Yet as competition heats up around the globe,
exactly the opposite strategy
is needed.
Invention

Adapted from Mihaly Csikszentmihalyi, Creativity: Flow and the
Psychology of Discovery and

Assignment: Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today?

Can anyone help me with this essay?
You can comment on the ideas, the structures and the way of usings vocabularies. I feel that my vocabularies are poor. Any help to increase them?

Thanks.
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Some people's lives are limited between works and homes. Some people are pleased with what they have to day and do not care what happen to the world today. However, some people work extremely hard to serve the needs of other people. Some people spent their whole lives to create one thing but it can help thousands people. The reason is because they see that there are too many things people need but are still not available. They see that to make this world better, they have to be creative more than ever before.

Create mean to make something new and better, and something that is helpful to the human. Creativity is necessary in many aspect of life and in many fields of sciences. Creativity distinguishes human from other animals, making us survive longer in this world.

First of all, creativity in medicine has saved more people's lives. With the help of medicines, people can forget about their tremendous pains. Before, we use chemicals as a way to help the patients. However, today, we use biology technology to cure a disease, which is more effective and safer. In the past, people often lose more blood when they have an operation. Today, with the help of endoscopic technology, fewer blood is lost and it is cleaner.

Secondly, new inventions save our times and health. Long time ago, the housewives must wash the clothes by hands, which takes them a lot of time and health. Since the washing machine is introduced, it becomes one of the "must have" equipments at home. The wives will no longer have pains when trying to clean the dirt.

Another reason why creativity is very necessary today is because it can help the company to earn money. More and more inventions are created in the 20th century. Colored televisions are no longer a favor in the market. Yet 3D televisions are the choice when people want to buy a new one. 3D movies are now popular in worldwide. Maybe in the next 5 years or 10 years, 4D movies will be introduces to the viewers. This time, the profit that the companies and producers earn may be unimaginable.

Finally, creativity is a part of our lives. It makes us unique and different from each other. The one who is creative has a better chance to be admitted to a good university, a better job, or being longer memorable. For example, the admission receive thousands essays in one year. The one who has new idea will get their higher attention.

Creativity is very important nowadays to make a better life. Creativity is no longer a job of the scientists. It is now one of our characteristic. It is now our jobs since we are all responsible for the beauty of this world and for the happiness of our own.