Letters / 'program in Computer Software' - Computer Science Motivation Letter [NEW]

Hello everybody, could you please help me improve my motivation letter, I am not sure if it has grammatical/vocabulary errors or not. In addition, I think it is not well-formed as well.

I appreciate your consideration deeply in advance.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am enthusiastic about pursuing a master degree at the [Uni Name] in [Program Name: Computer Science]. I have completed my education in the Bachelor of Computer Engineering majoring in Software at [My Uni Name].

I believe the [Program Name] Master's Degree offers me the greatest opportunity to expand my education in some very meaningful areas of interest as the program's curriculum is outstanding which consists of subjects like Concurrency, Testing, and Evaluation which are essential in the software industry and they are my favorite in that field. I have used 'object oriented Programming' techniques and I have some knowledge about 'software architectures' so it is clear for me that how important are these subjects in software and I am positive that these courses in addition to my previous experience would make me more knowledgeable as a Software Developer. In addition, I am very enthusiastic about 'artificial intelligence programming' and solving problems by intelligent techniques as I have passed a basic course associated with 'artificial intelligence' during my Bachelor Degree which was very interesting.

My graduation thesis titled 'web application development based on SOA' which helped me to acquire worthwhile skills associated with practical and theoretical subjects as it needed a lot of research and further self-studies. By completing my thesis I learned how to integrate software programs using Web-Services and how to utilize 'object oriented programming' techniques in software development in addition to handling concurrency, data integrity, logging and security.

Through discussion with graduate students and my research, it is very evident that [Uni Name] is one of the top universities in [Country Name]. I would be proud to be a student in the [Program Name] in your highly esteemed university.

I have completed a comprehensive Undergraduate program in Computer Software. As you can see by my resume, this program in addition to my practical experiences have prepared me well for the graduate education challenges I now wish to pursue. I hope that the skills and knowledge I obtain from this graduate degree will give me the opportunity to become a more professional software developer and to pursue my academic education.

Sincerely,

My Name

Graduate / (My Childhood / Studies / Work / Interests)Statement of Purpose (SOA) [NEW]

Hello everyone, could you please help me improve my SOP in terms of grammatical and format?
Thank you very much in advance

Here is my SOP:

Statement of Purpose
Reza Ahmadi

My Childhood

One of my favorite activities as a kid was reading books and I enjoyably saved my pocket money to buy books. My second favorite activity was using my creativity to invent things. For example, I have created many new and innovative things during my primary school which were donated to my schools.

As a 15 year-old boy, I was really enthusiastic about creating computer games rather than playing them. I created my first simple computer game using MS-DOS and GW-Basic when I was about 16 years old. Afterwards, I learned to write programs using Pascal when I was around 17 when the amazing speed of Pascal compilation time and powerful language encouraged me to create many programs using it.

Furthermore, I have always been at the top of our class and I have won many prizes during my primary, and secondary school.

Undergraduate Studies

During my undergraduate studies I was exposed to different interesting and challenging issues of computer science. Therefore, I decided to make myself familiar with a breadth of knowledge to improve and accumulate more practical experience. In addition to academic courses, I read lots of books, mostly in two categories: Artificial Intelligence books and software engineering books

(like C++, C#, UML, and OOP). I also applied them to some personal projects in my free time.

For my project course, I could successfully create Integrated Software Systems based on SOA and using software engineering methodologies and paradigms like OOP, UML. In addition I used C# and Sql Server in order to develop programs. I used to study on SOA model and tried to exploit this powerful architecture in order to develop loosely-coupled and scalable software systems. In addition, I needed to manage many issues like security, concurrency, and many other aspects associated with software systems.

Work Experience

I have played different roles like a member of R&D team, Analyzer, Designer, Developer, and Software Architecture to meet my company's goals as well as fulfill clients' expectations. I have created several software products by taking advantages of different technologies in a team or on my own.

I have found that I am really interested in Object Oriented Principles, Design Pattern, Data Mining, and Software Architecture. In addition, I am very enthusiastic about researching on Artificial Intelligence as a basic AI course was in our curriculum during my undergraduate studies which was very appealing.

Working as a Software Architect in the third year of my working at Kheder Company proves how ambitious and hard working I am. After about six months R&D, I have created a three-tier architecture for Payroll system and it was highly appreciated by CEO and Software Manager of my Company.

Some of the new architecture's advantages were:

- Huge reduction in the amount of code compared to the previous architecture
- Separation of Concerns was correctly implemented
- More user satisfaction by applying User Experience Design
- Code was easy to understand and easy to extend

My Interests

- Service Oriented Architecture Application Development and Design
- Agile Software Development
- Information Retrieval
- Data Mining
- Bioinformatics
- Optimistic Algorithms

Why [My Uni Name]

[My Uni Name] is one of the top universities in the world and it offers research programs which are my desire. Besides, [My Uni Name] has been recommended by one of my best friend who graduated from there.

Objective

I am determined to continue my studies to PhD level since I am sure that I can gain profound knowledge in my areas of interest and it definitely helps me to be more successful in my future career. Besides, I believe in myself and I believe I can be far more productive by studying at [My Uni Name] with it top-notch faculty.

Based on my previous experience and my interests, I am definitely sure I am capable of pursuing my future research and work in Computer Science and Software Engineering research programs.

Reza Ahmadi

Undergraduate / 'a software specialist' - Why did I choose my university and Goal of my study [3]

Hello everybody,
I am writing a short motivation letter to describe my future goals of selecting a program and why did I choose a particular university. I highly appreciate if you could help me correct it. Note, the length must be less than 50 words!

The program's curriculum is outstanding as consists of a wide range of courses which can be selected. Furthermore, through discussion with my friends in the [University Name], the atmosphere is friendly with many opportunities like financial packages, and sport teams. One of my early wishes has been to work in high-tech companies in the [Country Name]. I hope that the skills and knowledge I obtain from this program in addition to my previous experience will enable me to become a software specialist and my wish comes true.

Thanks guys