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bezabee98   
Dec 8, 2008
Undergraduate / "Moving"- Common Application Essay [7]

A really good essay even thought I can't point out any errors but just taking the time to read it I learned a lot out of your essay . good job
bezabee98   
Dec 8, 2008
Undergraduate / What is the best advice you ever received? Why? And did you follow it? [4]

hi there essay forum I really want to master essay writing skill I do have a grammar and comma problems to name a few can you help me thank you

What is the best advice you ever received? Why? And did you follow it?

The best advice I have received was the advice from my mom who said " everything thing happens for good". My mothers advice was so true and applicable . It gave me hope that when bad things happened to me or things don't turn out the way I want them because of my mom's advice I understood it was is for a reason. I followed it also because through out my life it was easy to find situations where I could get upset.

Since I was a little girl I heard my mom say "everything happens for Good" I heard her say it both for the good and the bad things that happened. hearing her telling me this when she saw me upset made me put it in my mind and apply it in my everyday life. Finding myself in small situations being mad like missing the bus to get to school or being rejected by a friend, I remember always getting mad at myself , people or even God. The time I applied for a job and after waiting two weeks for interview I was mad because I didn't the new job. This days thanks to God I have been changed because my mom' advice was so true and applicable. Now rather than just worrying myself why things always don't work out as I expected I learned not to give in or give up easily in every situations I found myself in but always I try to see beyond what is in front of me or try to focus on the positive sides of situations as they saying goes " you can either think the cup is half full or half empty".

The best counsel that I got from my mother when I connected it with what I read on the bible where it says in new testament "Give thanks in all circumstances" . I really believed that all things happens for a reason and that gave me hope. I was just wondering, pondering and thinking all the good and bad things that happened in my life. Even more I was just thinking about the good and bad things that happen in people lives and how even though at times it is very difficult to be thankful for the bad things that happen in my life but just remembering it in difficult situation helps me to clam down. I found it to be a good reminder to just keep on being optimistic .

The more I lived life there were more situations coming my way that I got me upset easily. To mention a few friends made me upset when they stopped calling me. Strangers made me upset because they cut line in front of me at a grocery store. The dog make me mad because it pee on the sofa. The microwave made me mad because it stopped working. Sometimes it was easy for me just to get upset rather that to be happy and being thankful for the lots of things I possess . But now since two or three years ago my mom's advice really sync in and I got to apply it and at times it was difficult to believe everything was happening for a reason as the saying goes " Everything happens for a reason and a reason" but just not getting upset because I missed the bus to go to school or that I broke up with my boyfriend really felt good. It made me feel that I was doing the right thing. That I was living my life to the fullest which when I look back at my life I was sure not to find any regrets.

Ever now and then as I go through this life this two advices pop in my mind and remind me how my moms advice "everything is for good" is such an outstanding advice it gives me happiness a sense of meaning that things are not just happening but for a reason.
bezabee98   
Mar 5, 2009
Essays / Being Me is Special - Essay Help [8]

I think just take your time to brainstorm ideas u never taught u have will come to you

good luck
bezabee98   
Mar 5, 2009
Essays / "Driving Under the Influence" - Thesis [4]

Instruction - subject is given write the thesis

subject -Driving under the influence

Thesis- Driving under the influence is very dangerous and can lead to serious accidents that lead to physical or mental handicap

Subject- college internship

Thesis- internship are the best ways for a student to gain expericne while in school

Subject- Bus system
Thesis- Bus systems should change their arrival time because lots of ppl are being latte for thier work
bezabee98   
Mar 7, 2009
Essays / "a defining moment" - Need assistance with writing an Essay (forgot the basics) [14]

I would recommend for you to just sit with pen and paper in hand and to just start listing ideas that come to you right away, without worrying if those ideas right or wrong. If you are like me the ideas that come to you are very meaningful or "defining" . I think if they ideas weren't significant they wouldn't appear on the paper you are going to write.

something like my birthday when I was ... ,My first date....,My first day working at a new job I felt , tasting a new kind of food make feel like..

Then try to develop those ideas as much as you can

so more than anything the first thing I think you should do is

to just sit with a pen and paper in hand or with a blank page in front of the computer.

Good Luck!
bezabee98   
Mar 7, 2009
Essays / Make a poor thesis and effective thesis (new voting machine) [5]

Revise the following thesis statement to make it more effective

1. There are some advantages and disadvantages to the nation's new voting machine.

Revised :
Although many people already now how to use maryland's new voting machine however the older group of people being the major voters only paper applicaton should be used
bezabee98   
Mar 9, 2009
Essays / Make a poor thesis and effective thesis (new voting machine) [5]

Thank so much all of you here that was pretty helpful I am glad you point out my mistakes, I wasn't able to see how "However" wasn't needed in the middle or neither did I knew I wasn't supposed to use both "However" and "Although" both in one sentence.

Thankyou so much
bezabee98   
Mar 22, 2009
Scholarship / Contributions to the Field of Sonography [10]

hello there..

all I can think of is for you to write down whatever comes to mind without stopping . I hope this helps at least a little bit.
bezabee98   
Mar 22, 2009
Essays / success and their rules essay [4]

characteristics (distinguishing quality, outstanding) you think are important ?
persistent

a public figure with successful characteristic ?

Abraham Lincoln

any information?
American's very inspiring president who lived in ...

Breaking down the question, I hope it helps.

Good Luck
bezabee98   
Mar 22, 2009
Grammar, Usage / Compose Topic Sentences [4]

[i]Compose topic sentences that will begin paragraphs.

1. To explain to the police a traffic accident you witnessed.
After Witnessing a traffic accident I was thankful for all the good things I have in my life.

2. To explain what beauty means to you.
A woman's biggest asset is her beauty either if it's her hair, her eyes or any part of her body.

3. To explain why you are attending college or university.
Attending college is the biggest accomplishment I am doing in my life.

4.To tell a friend about your experience of seeing an accident happen.
Seeing an accident happen was a very emotional experience.

5. To describe your dream house.
Jaquiz on the balcony, one of the must have features in my dream house .
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