Undergraduate / 'really hard working'- world you come from and how your world shaped your aspirations [11]

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"My Inspiration"

In every hard work, there's a success in the end. First of all, I grew up with a broken family. There was a time that I want to give up, but I've tried not to because if I give up how can I support my family? At young age, I've overcome lots of challenges in life. These challenges, taught me how to be strong to face difficult situations and overcome entire obstacles in life.

The dream of every parent is to see their children make it life rather than turning out miserable, and so was the dream of my parents. Although we never agreed on certain issues, they have really inspired me in every aspect of my life. I remembered the day when we encountered a difficult situation, I did not know what to do because my father lost his job, so my mother had to work abroad to fulfill our needs.

Three years ago when I'm still in Philippines, I experienced how life is really difficult without money. We are lucky if we eat once. I ask myself what would happen next to us. I told myself that if I had my own family, I wouldn't let my children face poverty because I don't want them to sacrifice. I would try to provide them a comfortable atmosphere for living to have a better life than me. I don't want to conquer this anymore. Because of my experiences, this obstacle steers me to be inspired and be motivated in life.

At the age of fifteen, my Mother told me about my Aunt's success. She told me that my Aunt's family is broken too. With her fighting spirits, she stays strong and reaches her dreams. We both grew up with a broken family. Now, she is a flight attendant in Qatar. Everything that she did ends up to success. She was my inspiration in life. I am always telling to myself that "I want to be a flight attendant, I should follow her steps," steps to success.

At the age of sixteen, my stepfather decided to adopt me and my brother. When the day I came here, I was really happy but had a little bit sadness because my sister and my real father were left in the Philippines, but I know it is okay because this would help me to have a better life. Then I told myself that when I'm done in college, I will bring my father here. I'm still hoping that one day, we can be complete again and all of us have a better life pursuing our own dreams.

Life here in the U.S.A. looks like the same in Philippines, but here, study first, pay later. In Philippines, we need to pay tuition first before we enter to a private school. I remembered one time, I see a homeless old man, I want to help him but I don't have anything to support him. I was disappointed that I could not help him. One thing that I see, I need to be responsible and be strong to pursue my goals. In order to help this old man, to help my family, I need to study hard and earn money. Education is my only key to success.

When I started studying here, I met some new friends. I thought that they are good friends of mine, but when I noticed that they are fake friends, I decided to avoid them. Some of them are making fun of me. Then, one time when I was in the hallway, they bullied me but one thing that I did not give up is to prove to them that even if they bullied me many times, I can be successful in life. I wanted to prove them that they're wrong. Those people who put me down became my inspiration in life. It taught me that I should be wise for choosing my true friend.

Sometimes I want to give up, but because of the experiences that I've been through it gives me an inspiration to finish high school and go to a four year college. I don't want to live in a fabulous life. I just want to live with a simple life that I can help other people including my family. In fact, after high school I will look for a scholarship or a financial aid to go to a four year college course in college. After college, I will find a better job and I will work hard to support my family.

Not because you are poor, you will give up. You should not be. You can be an inspiration to others, so they can be responsible in life. Learn from the experiences that would be interesting to you in order to reach your dreams. Do not get easily affected to what you hear about you. Keep in mind, always be strong and be positive in life. If you are in the right track, you will probably more fortunate.

In life, sometimes you'll fail, sometimes you'll succeed, or vice-versa. But if you are a hard working person, you will reach your dream and have a better life. I know that some of the time I fail, but I do not give up because I always put in my mind that all of these are for my family, they should be my first priority before others. I want them to be proud of me by studying hard and reaching my real dreams. I am really thankful that I still have a better life today; I learn many things about my family and myself. No matter what happen, I will do my best to prove that I'm worth it with my family.

Writing Feedback / "Help for Depressed Teenagers" - summarization of my article [NEW]

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"Help for Depressed Teenagers"
by Laurie Pawlik-Kienlen
Published on Aug. 19, 2009

What does "Depression" mean? How does depression affect our health? Depression is a condition of mental disturbance. It also called a "common cold" of mental health because it can affect millions of people including North Americans. In fact, it may also affect our thinking and behavior such as loss of concentration or interest, lack of self confidence, fatigue, insomnia, irritability, restlessness, and forgetfulness. In addition, depression is a major risk factor for suicide. And people who are mostly involved with this illness are teenagers and adolescents.

Most teenagers and adolescents "don't always realize that depression can often be easily treated and effectively treated." But, many of them are afraid to talk about their feelings to their parents because some of them think that parents won't understand, or will become anxious or angry. For example, I experienced being depressed all the time and I don't know what to do. I didn't tell my parents about my problems because I don't want them to worry about me, and I'm afraid to share it.

In many cases, some of them tend to commit suicide, or being addicted to drugs because of being helplessness and worthlessness. I already tend to commit suicidal before, but suicidal is not a great idea to escape for my problems in life. But for some people who are having difficulties in life sees that suicidal are the only escape for their pain.

Dealing with depression is really hard to solve if you will not asks for a help. Most people who are depressed always chose to keep their problems because they don't want their family to worry about them. We know that sometimes "parents aren't the best to go to" people when they are depressed. Guidance counselors, peer mentors, teachers, spiritual leaders and coaches might help the teenagers and adolescents to states their problems. But, sometimes parents must be involved with this serious illness in order to support their children to fight against their feelings of depression.

Being depressed is a part of everyday's life. Keeping your emotions is not a good way for every one of us. No matter how hard the situation, illnesses like depression can always be treated.

Undergraduate / "Acceptance and Trust" - personal quality, contribution, etc. [3]

Prompt: Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to you as a person?

My unfinished essay. Please help me with my essay.

"Acceptance and Trust"

During my childhood years, I never accept everything that I have. I often wish that someday I can be like them. What I mean is, I wish that I can have a complete family, I wish I can be so smart like my friend, and I can wish that I can have a better life like the other people. I've always been jealous in everything that I see. But, there was one thing that helps me to accept of what I have which is myself. Actually, I've never learn on how to accept what I am. Until one day, I realized that if I still continue being jealous, it will end up nothing. I should be thankful to the things that I have in my life right now.

If you want to be like smart as your friend, or if you want to have a better life, why won't you try to work hard to be successful? You still have time to get all of this. Being jealous is not a better way for me. It's not really bad to have a wish like this, but sometimes expecting too much can get you hurt.

Sometimes, when I don't get the things that I want, I cried most of the time. I'm not a child anymore, but it seems like I still act like a child. When I turn in my teenage life, I learned how to accept myself. I learned how to be matured enough. Acceptance is my greatest achievement in my entire whole life. I never expect this before, I'm proud of myself for learning this kind of a thing. At first, acceptance is never been easy for me. It takes me too long to appreciate and cherish the things in my life.

I remember my best friend, I've been jealous to her because she was always got higher grades than mine. She told me being jealous, you'll not succeed. Then, after she told me that way, she never talked to me for a year. I feel frustrated and disappointed. I wish I never been jealous to her. It's my fault I never accept the way my life is. How can others accept me if I can't accept myself?

On the other hand, trust is my second greatest achievement in life. I don't know how I can trust myself. I sometimes say that I can't do it; I need other people to help me. My brother and my older sister taught me that I should stand on my own feet. I should believe in myself. If you can't trust yourself, how you can trust other people?

It's never been easy for me to trust myself, but when I immigrate here in U.S.A. It forced me to stand where I am and believe in myself. I thought that I can't ease this problem. But, I'm actually wrong. There was one reason why I can't also even trust myself because of the other people who put me down. They told me you can't be successful.

For people who put me down, I became inspired in my life. When I studied here in U.S., I proved to them they are eventually wrong. I'm almost three years here in state, I thought that they're right that I can't have a better life, but because of those awards I got in my new school it made me think that I can finally trust myself and ignore other people's saying about my future.

I never regret learning this personal quality.