Undergraduate / "Imagined Enemy essay" - University of Chicago Supplement [2]

I would like feedback. I feel like my essay lacks substance.

Essay Option 1: "A man cannot be too careful in the choice of his enemies." -Oscar Wilde.

Othello and Iago. Dorothy and the Wicked Witch. The Autobots and the Decepticons. History and art are full of heroes and their enemies. Tell us about the relationship between you and your arch-nemesis (either real or imagined).

I wake up and go over to the window drawing back my yellow polka dot curtains to invite the sun in today. The trees look the same way they always look, like comfortable lounging pillars of brown, and the woman from apartment 2201 is walking her golden retriever in front of my building during this time. It's twelve forty-five and the world seems so "alive." Routine. Nothing excites me the way it used to. Older people call it maturity, I call it unintentional suicide. Peering out of the window there are no smiles on my end, only an internal longing for adventure. Adventure comes to me in the form of a text message. PAULAAAAAA! CAN YOU CHILL? I won't disappoint. I'm going to chill. Why? This could be an opportunity for possible adventure. So I send a reply text, tell her that I'll hang out with her, get dressed, and when she arrives in front of my apartment building, I rush outside and hop into her car. Something watches me drive off through my bedroom window.

Ending up in downtown Ann Arbor with my best friend is nostalgic. We were here last weekend and two weekends before that. Something about downtown Ann Arbor makes me feel like I'm Neo from the matrix. Maybe it's the fact that every girl I pass feels comfortable in denim shorts so revealing that I've been programmed to consider it normal. These girls are Mr. Anderson and I have to fight for a smidgen of existence when it comes to individuality. Eighty-nine degree weather and I'm dressed in black denim jeggings and an emerald green turtleneck sweater. My best friend shakes her head disappointingly at me as we walk the sidewalk; she's also wearing "the virus." Nevertheless we walk downtown, get a bubble tea from Bubble Island, and while she admires the guys that walk by, I observe the elderly homeless man who is sitting on the same bench he was the last time I saw him. The wind doesn't stir him like it stirs me. He sits there settled, hair messily combed by the passing wind, in a state of nirvana. He's accepting of his situation.

We end our downtown trip with Noodles & Co. take out. As I sit in the passenger seat on the ride home, we listen to Justin Bieber's song "boyfriend" for the fifth time today. However, as opposed to the ride there, I don't sing along. I stare out the window and watch the road she drives me home on. The shortcut she uses is no longer a secret. When secrets are shared, they are no longer the same value. The secret becomes old news, now easily forgettable. That's what I classify today as: forgettable. Her voice during the car ride whizzes right by me, I'm not able to latch on to a piece of the conversation she's trying to hold. Like a friend I nod, and hope it's at the right moment so that I don't offend her. I tell her thank you when she releases me to my solitude, and I look up at my bedroom window to see the same something shaking it's head in disappointment.

Yesterday I told myself I wouldn't eat another box of food from Noodles & Co because it had become sickening. Just because someone didn't keep the promises they'd made to themselves didn't make them a bad person. Besides, going downtown today evoked temporary happiness. When my best friend asked me what I wanted to do today, I told that we should go downtown. My choice created my own mental infliction. Entering my room I toss my messenger bag by my keyboard stand I look over to the window. The something in my room speaks only to me, telling me that I can try again tomorrow. She also tells me to stay away from that homeless man in Ann Arbor because he will try to steal my happiness.

Undergraduate / ' Majoring in biology, cosmetic surgery' - Michigan - Why Transfer Writing Portion [4]

Describe the unique qualities that attract you to the specific undergraduate College or School to which you are applying at the University of Michigan. How would that curriculum support your interests? (500 words maximum)

University of Michigan is known for being a prestigious institution. The academics are meant to challenge students and create champions. I admire the Literature, Science, & Arts program because it creates a comfortable balance between social and academic life. For those who wish to challenge themselves more than the already extraordinary student, they can participate in the Honors Program. Furthermore, the option of joining Michigan learning communities is a valuable experience. Finding someone that shares the same interests and are on the same academic path is a sure way to succeed. The LSA program helps students come to grounds with what their niche is, offering over 100 different concentrations to go along with the chance at internships, and international opportunities.

So many people partake in the LSA program because it provides an acceptance to different communities and cultures. Being able to study abroad and indulge in theme semesters is an amazing privilege because you learn many different things through new cultural experiences. U of M holds many campuses, each offering their own taste of Ann Arbor. Downtown Ann Arbor draws in a very diverse group of people. Whether you attend the university or not, there are still great places to hang out and study; and walking on campus makes you feel like you're part of a small community even though Michigan is such a large school. Building long-lasting bonds with new people is a great thing, but being a transfer student can put you at a disadvantage in this area. University of Michigan has a number of clubs and organizations that will allow me to adjust from a community college to social campus life.

Majoring in biology with hopes to become a cosmetic surgeon means I must be disciplined and work hard. This is why University of Michigan is a great choice. Providing Undergraduate research opportunity programs not only creates a steady advancement in my intellectual progress it but also gives me a chance to truly appreciate science. The research programs will give me greater opportunities when it comes to getting accepted into medical school and grad school. I am particularly interested in U of M's changing gears program, one that gives transfer students like me the chance to dive into the world of science beyond the textbooks.