Writing Feedback / Smoking effects and smoking ban; IELTS [10]

Hi, here is my essay for the Ielts task 2. Could you give me feedback for ideas, syntax, grammar and other comments? Thanks so much.

Smoking can cause serious illnesses and should be made illegal. To what extent do you agree?

In recent decades, there is a contention in many circles that whether smoking should be made illegal or not. It is obviously that there is no defense for the harmful effects of smoking on both smoker and those who are around them. However, there are still some reasons for accepting this activity with some limitations and warnings.

Many researches have done with the conclusions about the overwhelming adverse impacts to health. Smoking not only harms the smokers themselves but also those around them who are affecting by so-called passive smoking. It is not just one of the major risks of the heart attacks or strokes; smoking is also the main reason of lung and liver cancer which are diseases that people have not yet found out any solution for them. In addition, smoking shortens a human significantly.

In spite of these dangers, governments still have not put a complete ban on this kind of product. The efforts to make smoking be illegal just result in forming the so-called black markets where some people still sell and consume tobaccos illegally, and consequently increasing the level of associated crime.

Finally, the decision to ban smoking, although there are some advantages such as protecting people, especially non-smoking people from adverse effects of smoke or keeping all people in a healthy environment, would be more likely to have much negative effects and unfeasible. It would, therefore, be better for the governments to continue campaigns that educate people about the potential dangers of this action instead of banning them.

Writing Feedback / IELTS - Recycling rubbish does not happen in some countries; Why & What can be done? [4]

Hi guys, here is my essay for the IELTS writing task 2. Could you please give me comments about ideas or grammar? Thanks so much.

In many countries people do not recycle their rubbish as much as they could. Why do you think this is? What can be done to change this?

It is apparent that with increasing environment concerns and the rapid exhaustion of the Earth's natural resources, it is very important to dispose of trash in an eco-friendly manner. There are nevertheless a great number of people all over the world fail to do this in their daily activities.

The primary reasons for this are their awareness and habits. Some decades ago, there are not many concerns about what the global warming is, or how to save our mineral materials and other natural resources. Some people even thought that those resources were unlimited. Consequently, they wasted instead of recycled rubbish as it is possible. Now, despite of the goverments' efforts, citizens in many countries still cannot completely realize the usefulness of recycling as well as change their daily habits being for many years.

The second point of this matter is availability, which is extremely lack of recycling facilities or even they have not existed in some places. In our building, there is just one rubbish bin for all kinds of waste. What should people do with their separated trash? Or are there any meaning of this activity if in the ultimate step, all kinds of waste will be thrown into a dumping ground?

Obviously it is not a work of a person, but all walks of life. By organizing "green campaigns", improving citizens' knowledge via means of media and supplying facilities for separated rubbish are things that governments should do to change the citizens' manners. On the other hand, forcing people by levying a fine on those who do not separate their trash is also one of the effective ways to change the habits of people.