Undergraduate / 'Get it done if it doesn't kill you' - Stanford Letter to Roommate [4]

Great essay! I love the use of "migration" and how you're optimistic about procrastination.

Undergraduate / Extracurricular -"This field is a canvas. Let's paint something beautiful today" [3]

I love how you talk about the shin guards and their strength. I love the imagery too. For the last line, think you should leave it as grass instead of changing it to field. I love soccer too and I thought this was a good essay

Undergraduate / UChicago "Tell us about your favorite.." Essay [5]

I like the development throughout the essay from what the music does to how it makes you feel. I was thinking you could maybe talk more about the you part, for example from where you say, "This emotional ability..." Otherwise, it's a really good essay.

Undergraduate / 'Upward' - Common App: Write about an extracurricular (1000 characters) [5]

It's a really insightful essay and has a good spectrum of the impact of Upward Basketball and your role as a referee. However, I thought it'd be even better if you elaborated on how giving second chances is your favorite part just a little more. It's just my opinion though. Besides that, it's really good :)

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Undergraduate / "The Dam" - Stanford CommonApp Essay #1 [6]

I thought it was a really good essay except for a few ambiguities: "The whole experience *really disgusted me.". I also feel like you could have a better transition from the whle project to the engineer part, probably where you say "...and the creatures in it..." That's just my thoughts on it. I'm a highschooler just like you so don't lean on my word. Otherwise, it was really good :)

Undergraduate / Stanford- Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you. [3]

Hey, Overall, it's a good essay, except for a few grammar errors and wording issues. "In advance, I warn you that I love to sing..." change this to "I would like to caution you about my love for singing. Unfortunately, it's horrible, so... you will have to deal with my poor emulations of Beyonce." ...something of the sort. "I wildly dance when I'm angry or stressed because since I am also awful at dancing" change "because" to "and". "an angry mother who is about to eat you alive" change "you" to "me". the sentence right after, erase "but" and put "for so long" right before the comma. Make a transition between staying in and the reality shows sentence by just putting "and" between them. Change "Ia am an attentive listener and loyal" to "I am loyal, and I am an attentive listener." Also elaborate on those qualities. Do more 'show' than 'tell'. Also change "I am a stron believer of karma" to "I strongly believe in karma." It has a good subject, and if you fix the few errors and work on your transitions, you'll do great :) good luck!

Undergraduate / MIT short answers; I'm Asian/ my interest in coding/ my mentality [14]

I thought your essays were pretty interesting since I am interested in Electricl Engineering and I once had a neopets account too haha. If you're able to elicit more meaning out of the "bird-house painting" than the "quote" essay, then go for it. The quote essay did have meaning and insight to it. I thought you could go farther to explain on the impact of what you absorb from the quotes is on you. That's just my opinion though. Good luck!