Undergraduate / NYU Undergrad Supplement - What are your own academic interests? computer science [6]

I think with a better introduction, this would be a very good essay for NYU.

Scholarship / Short essay asking why i deserve this essay and how will i make an impact [6]

This is a good clear short essay. Make sure you make an emphasis on why you deserve this. You just discuss your families struggles but you didn't make a clear point on why you are deserving. The second part of the question is answered directly at the end of your essay though.

Undergraduate / My low vision has made things more difficult: UCF Undergraduate Essay [4]

In the first essay, try to make a stronger point on why it is so difficult to do your work. Maybe give an example something specific that you really struggle to do. I think this will help the reader have a better connection with you and your writing.

Writing Feedback / Noah and Utnapishtim are exactly the same person [4]

It would help if you try to structure your essay so that it discusses the theories clearly and then give your thoughts on it.
- Theory 1 description
- Theory 2 description
- How they compare
- How they contrast

I don't want to give you content advice because I am not well read about Noah and Utnapishtim.
I hope this helps!

Scholarship / Short essay asking why i deserve this essay and how will i make an impact [6]

someone respond to my thread please, and I'll respond to yours

Undergraduate / About Movie "Forrest Gump"; NYU Supplement What intrigues you? [7]

The Forrest Gump reference is great. In the second supplement, try to discuss what you have to offer for NYUAD. This will just make it a stronger essay.

Writing Feedback / Noah and Utnapishtim are exactly the same person [4]

thumbs up? check out mine please :)

Undergraduate / My low vision has made things more difficult: UCF Undergraduate Essay [4]

thumbs up?
I think the structure works how it is. Grammatically, it seems fine to me.