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anonymous1   
Dec 23, 2012
Undergraduate / Leaving the Tribe; Common App/ Parting between two people [6]

Prompt" How does a parting between two people affect their emotions?
what soothes their agony and pain?

And down it goes, quenching in the air. It cuddles its secret with it and then faints in despair. There it goes, and there goes the secret of an old affair; a secret of the bulged heart, a secret of the lament eye, a secret that the shadows eavesdrop, and a secret that knows no lie. There it goes, watering a cheek and screaming on the other, "I love you my mother..." There goes a candid tear; a story written by fate about a daughter besieged by fear, leaving her mother...leaving her mate. A story about parting or agony I must say since there's nothing that hurts more than splitting one day.

With hankering hearts melting in their tears, with desperate sparks igniting their fears, a lover sorrowfully parts from his dears. Whether leaving a husband, a father, or a peer, it's always a drama like that of Shakespeare; a mission that's tough, a decision that's austere. A person feels lost; he's losing the others. This feeling of loneliness is deadly when it bothers. He senses the world as a prison outside and feels like a bird that the tribe left behind. The fire goes high; he starts to melt down. He wants to fly; he wants to smile and tries to erase that filthy frown. The other, however, senses the flame. He stiffens the screams, yet the tears are to blame.

While drowning in an ocean of anguish and fears, and while losing it in a maze of grief and tears, there lays the hope at the end of the plot; their goes ‎the moan submitted to the lot. This hope in fact does bring them again from the swirl of feelings to the realm of the brain. They finally hug and give out a good-bye; they leave it for fate to stop the lament eye and bring it all out in a long-lasting sigh,

Fate never sneaks from a door you left open, but it rather sneaks from a door that's locked. It leaves you surprised, puzzled, even shocked. However, in the whole nonsense of fate and life, it's faith that gives us power to survive. So, when life swoops down, have some faith, leave it for God, and flip that frown.
anonymous1   
Dec 25, 2012
Undergraduate / Leaving the Tribe; Common App/ Parting between two people [6]

Thanks for your comments and for reading my essay :)
but actually we were assigned to write this essay after reading a story about a mother who a daughter who part called " A Parting "

But i didn't mention the story in the prompt because no one has read it :P
and the solution i thought was to submit things to fate since one can't change fate...
and i mentioned that faith can help in soothing the pain :P

thank you :)
anonymous1   
Dec 30, 2012
Writing Feedback / ESSAY: NOWADAYS YOUNG PEOPLE ARE MORE WILLING TO HELP OTHERS? [6]

the essay is good :)
the ideas are clear :)
but there are some mistakes where you've repeated the subject as a clear subject once and as a subject pronoun :)
although the intro especially the first sentence isn't directly relalted to the remaining paragraphs, the overall evaluation is : CONGRATS YOU MADE YOUR POINT CLEAR IN A SMOOTH AND NICE WAY!!!! :) :)

before they making a step and holding the old,

correction: before making a step and holding the old.

the social atmosphere leads to the less unwillingness of helping others.

correction: the social atmosphere increases the unwillingness to help others.

hight position, in today's generation however, all the undergraduates are facing the same question: unemployment.

Correction : hight position. In today's generation, however, all the undergraduates are facing the same question : Unemployment.

simply because that they are scared of helping others

correction:simply because they are scared of helping others.

young they would rather walk away.

correstion: they would rather walk away.

I hope i helped:)
anonymous1   
Dec 31, 2012
Writing Feedback / the world from Newton's eyes - Sat essay [3]

Do you believe that fantasy and imagination is more important than information and knowledge?

The same way black is black and white is white, the same way the sun is a sun and the cloud is a cloud, the same way the moon is a moon and the light is a light, the same exact way a human's mind is a human's mind, and a human's heart is a human's heart, yet the thing that splashed the white into the black and made the grey blast, the thing that made from the puffy clouds a fairytale starring our past, the thing that dispatches the rocket into the outer space and keeps the human steadfast, the thing that whispers in the heads and provokes them to recast, the thing that makes from a stick and a rock, a play that transfers into our days and can surpass; it's the ability to see from the mind's eye; the ability to imagine and give those fancy thoughts the aptitude to broadcast. Imagination is the standard on which a human's creation, development, achievement, and advancement lay. It's the stimulus that provokes a human into the impossible and thus transferring those ideas from a castle in the air into a house on the land. The ability one has if observing the world from his mind's eye instead of the common facts and information is outstanding!

One of the few people who imprinted our world with his fuzzy hair and brainy theories, Albert Einstein, is the pillar of the framework of imagination. His ability to challenge the sensible drove him to go for a fourth dimension by creating the theory of Relativity. Was it not for his silhouette, he would have been stuck in the third dimension with this thought causing his insomnia. In the end, he knows what any other human knows, but the criterion was to use some of the known and go for the unknown. If you flip the pages of Einstein's life, you'll realize that he used to make plenty of mental experiments. The knowledge then was gained. This knowledge provided the foundation to a greater thing, the ability to use this knowledge and make a lucky guess. The guess was developed into a theory that uses knowledge's tools to be tested and confirmed.

Try once to observe the world from Newton's eyes; he wondered and imagined why the apple might fall while the rest of the world just accepted the fact that this apple, well, fell! He imagined that there is an almighty force that might be pulling this apple downward, and then he started testing this thought by the obtainable knowledge. The Wright Brothers shined in their own way too! Their wild thoughts drove them to dream about a steady flight. The man who created the microwave was doing radar research, testing a new vacuum tube and noticed that the candy bar in his pocket melted, so he put a few popcorn kernels near the tube and they popped. These popcorn popped in his head way before they popped in the tube. In 2003 a robot was invented that can be controlled by a monkey's head. It's certain that someone had to dream and believe it's possible to build it the way some lazy person dreams about it too.

The potentials that knowledge offers are huge, yet it only forms a passive robot that absorbs information. Imagination, however, is unlimited. It's the surprising magical combination of facts, fantasy, and mystery, unique for every human being. As for science; it is the mix of concept and conceptual thoughts that bind together to form a new product, astonishing enough, wild enough, yet unique and brilliant enough. Without the concept there would be no conceptualism, and a person will remain naĂŻve. Nevertheless, without the conceptualism, the concept will transform into the form of a routine and no mad scientists will fit in such a world. If Einstein kept on accepting the facts, how would he and his fuzzy hair benefit us????
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