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sophisticated   
May 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ; Letter to Football Team-mate to inform why I leave the team [5]

You are a football player, but you have to leave the team for a while,
write a letter to your team-mate and say:
- why you have to leave,
- how much you love the football team,
- when you are coming back.

I hope this letter finds you in good spirit and health. I am writing this letter to notify you that I won't be able to take part in next week's practice sessions as well as qualify sessions which are scheduled on next weekend. As my cousin sister is getting married next weekend.

As you are aware with my dedication and commitment towards my team and love for football. However, I have social obligation to fulfill, my sister is heavily relying on me to make her wedding day - the most memorable one. As a senior member of my family, I have been assigned many wedding duties such as venue, decorations, and catering to table arrangements. All activities require my time and hence I have to skip my football sessions.

I know I have created a void in team selection in such short notice but I have my family commitments. I hope you will understand my moral duty as a brother.

I will be rejoining the practice sessions from Monday onwards. Hope to see you all very soon!
Yours truly,
Barack Obama
sophisticated   
May 29, 2013
Letters / motivation letter for summer school [2]

Starting lines can be rephrased

Let me introduce myself. My name is _____. My purpose of writing this is to apply for course of...

This would sound more formal.
sophisticated   
May 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / Marketing assistant position - IELTS Letter check Request [4]

Write a letter to apply for a part time job in a new international
company, you have heard about the position from someone in your neighborhood.

Dear Sir,

Let me introduce myself. My name is Mtt Romney, my purpose of writing this letter is to apply for post of marketing assistant in your company Denver Associates. My neighbor Mr. Smith is working with your company as production manager from past 2 years and through him I came to know that your company is looking for a part time marketing assistant.

I am pursing my post graduate in field of marketing from Kellogg's University of USA. As per the visa rules, I am permitted to work 20 hours a week during my study. I have 6 months of experience of marketing during my college internship in field marketing as well as internet marketing. I was associated with Sharp Network solutions in India before joining my MBA course in USA. Attached is a copy of my resume and I can also provide university reference letter from our dean and professor if required.

As per my verbal conversation with Mr. Smith, job sounds pretty much exciting to market baby products via internet and tele marketing. I am available to come for an interview or any aptitude test at your convenience. Please feel free to contact me on +61 007.

Waiting anxiously for your reply,
Mitt Romney
sophisticated   
May 31, 2013
Writing Feedback / Marketing assistant position - IELTS Letter check Request [4]

Is it okay to add last line...

I am available to come for an interview or any aptitude test at your convenience. Please feel free to contact me on +61 007.
Waiting anxiously for your reply,
sophisticated   
Jul 28, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS Letter ; Asking a friend to be my partner! [6]

This letter is for 136 words only ... i need atleast 150+ ... any lines I can add

One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new business.

Write a letter to reply friend's offer. In your letter

*Give your opinion of your friend's offer business idea
*Tell him whether or not you have decided to accept his offer
*and explain your reasons for this decision

Dear Gary
I hope you are fit and fine Gary. Thanks a ton for some time to research and analyses about your business proposal. I think sea-food restaurant will fill the bill in the City center.

Having dined at almost every restaurant in the area, I believe the sea food idea will work wonders. Firstly, there aren't any authentic Caribbean Sea food restaurants in the city center. Sea food lovers have to dig down to city's outskirts where one or two restaurants cater Caribbean cuisine. After much planning and research, I am all in for this idea.

In terms of investment, $10000 is bit too much for a new restaurant. I think $7000 would allow us to get started on the right foot.

I hope we can work together which will be mutually beneficial to both of us.
Yours sincerely
Peter Roberts
sophisticated   
Sep 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK1:Letter to complain about neighbor [3]

It all started on ...would be the correct formation

also another humble suggestion ... to begin your last paragraph formally

I hereby request you to please intervene in this matter and halt this nuisance.

Wonderful writing ...you have very well arranged all situation ... loved its flow ...
sophisticated   
Sep 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS letter ; Changing the booking of travel abroad [3]

You have recently booked a trip abroad with a travel agency, however, plans have changed and you cannot go to that trip. Write a letter to your travel agent. In your letter

- Give details of your trip.
- Explain why you can't go on this trip.
- Tell the agency what you want to do about the booking.
Dear Sir/Madam.

I have booked a trip to Switzerland for me and my spouse, scheduled for September 15, 2013. I regret my inability to depart on scheduled date. Some inevitable urgency at my work insists me to put my personal plans on hold for a shorter time.

My PNR number on travel itinerary is 123-456-0134-4567. I would appreciate if you cancel all the reservations for this trip. I am really keen to experience and enjoy your elite trip. Since I am planning to make another reservation at earliest, I would appreciate if the amount I have previously paid will be used for my upcoming trip. If this adjustment is not possible kindly reimburse the paid amount to the credit card I have paid with. I am canceling this trip before 30 days of scheduled departure so as per terms and conditions I am eligible for the full reimbursement of the paid amount.

I humbly apologies for all the inconvenience this may have caused to you. If you have any questions, please feel free to call me on 123-456-7890. You can also approach me at jesse@gmail.com.

Yours truly,

Barack Obama
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