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bepe5n

Jul 9, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

Hi everyone,

I am from Nepal and English is not our first language. So my English may contain errors.Forgive me for that.

I want to make a request for help with preparation of my recommendation letter. I have completed my high school from Nepal. I am now applying for USA universities. I need three recommendation letters from my teachers ,but when I asked for it they told me to prepare recommendation letters myself and they will sigh it. I do not know how to prepare it,what to include in it. I want you friends to help me make best recommendation letter. I want to study Bachelor in agribusiness. I want to have recommendation letter from my chemistry,maths and general paper teachers. I have following things to include:

I am the 1st student in my class.

I have scored grade A in maths,physics and chemistry while none other of my friends have scored a single A in these subjects. Grade c in general paper.

I am the leader of my class.

I have many things to include in recommendation letter which I will write in further discussions.

Thanks,
Bipin

bepe5n

Jul 11, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

okay,thanks I will prepare draft and post it.

bepe5n

Jul 16, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

Here I have prepared a letter.Help me to improve it.

To Whom It May Concern:

Having known Bipin Rimal for more than 2 years as one of the excellent students we ever had, I would highly be pleased to recommend him for Undergraduate programme in Agriculture Science department in your college. It was a pleasure to have a student like him in our school. He proved himself as one of the most excellent students in my long teaching career.

Based on his previous academic accomplishment we had enrolled him in our prestigious school with 75% scholarship for complete two higher education study period. He made every class lively by showing his curiosity in the deep subject matters. He has confidence and faith on himself. He is mature guy to be stable in difficult situations and has ability to progress quickly. He had excellent relationship with every student at his class and helped them to achieve academic excellence. He was praised by every teacher of our school and an idol for his peers. He was a student teaching assistant. He even tutored students of our school after he completed his high school. Because of his talent, perseverance and brilliance, he is the pride of our school and the school awarded him with honor -"Student of the year, 2012".

He is not only excellent in academics but also equally good in extracurricular activities. He was captain of Football and Basketball Club of our school. He led our school club to victories and showed his leadership quality. He even was the finalist of table tennis competition conducted by school.

Based on my acquaintance with Bipin and his qualification, I am confident that he will be excellent asset to your college. It is an honor for me to write recommendation for such extraordinary student. He is multitalented and I would highly recommend for admissions and financial support. If you have any concern, I am more than happy to provide further information on him.

(Dr. Man Bhahadur Pun)
Academic Dean

bepe5n

Jul 16, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

What can be written instead of (. It was a pleasure to have a student like him in our school.) suggest me. and how is the overall recommendation? Does is tell everything that is needed in recommendation leeter? and Is it okay for application?

bepe5n

Jul 17, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

Should he be replaced with Rimal?

bepe5n

Jul 17, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

.this sounds repetitive... you said he's been an excellent student already. Now move on to tell his special skills, talents, attitude etc.

Suggest what can be written

bepe5n

Jul 18, 2013

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2: What factors are important in achieving happiness?Depend on individuals [5]

Life is itself the source of happiness

bepe5n

Jul 18, 2013

Writing Feedback / Bearing arms and violence in a country - GRE Analyze an issue [2]

Great one.loved it

bepe5n

Jul 18, 2013

Letters / Request for help in the preparation of recommendation letters. [10]

How is it? does this reflects necessary things? Is it polite and speaks truth?

To whom it may concern
Having known Bipin Rimal for more than 2 years as one of the excellent students in my general paper class, I would be very pleased to recommend him for Undergraduate programme in Agriculture Science department in your college.During that time, I have found him to be both a strong student academically and a role model and leader for his peers.

Rimal has proved himself as an independent learner as he studies not only the text covering the syllabus but other books and generals related to the topics.He is the type of student who always takes the initiative to help out fellow students who may not quite grasp the material. Rimal has an extremely amiable personality and is popular among his colleagues and faculty as he shows great consideration and deep respect for others. Being honest,polite and hardworking, he demonstrates the best of behavior and excellent study habits.

Rimal has a sound work ethic and is able to handle the pressure of deadlines well. Last summer break, I gave his class a group work project to write 4 essays. Rimal was the leader of his group and only group in the class that managed to submit their work on time. This shows his leadership capacity and serious dedication to working hard.I have also seen him helping students in various areas in Science and Mathematics on numerous occasions.

Rimal has striking characteristics and outstanding intellectual ability. Having innate leadership qualities, Rimal has led our school in numerous academic as well as co-curricular events.As the Academic coordinator of Novel Academy,I appointed Rimal as a student teaching assistant. He even tutored students of our school after he completed his high school.

Based on my acquaintance with Rimal and his qualification, I am confident that he will be excellent asset to your college.He has a great vision for his future. He is undoubtedly the type of student that has the potential for great success at the college level. Rimal is multi talented and I would highly recommend for admissions and financial support. If you have any concern, I am more than happy to provide further information on him.

Sincerly,

bepe5n

Oct 17, 2013

Undergraduate / Everything happens for good; PERSONAL ESSAY for Common App [2]

Question is Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea. What prompted you to act? Would you make the same decision again?

I have tried.
This is my personal essay
Everything happens for good because there is God.It is beleived that god is the creator and ruler of the universe.Everything happens to his will. I did not get this knowlegde by birth; I learned this from the experience of my life.Even the worst case happens for good reasons but how?

My life started to get interesting after I passed class 10.I thought the hard word work I did on my studies should have given me the best available high schools but none preferred me.I got rejected;I got frusteted.Quality education is the key factor for my future plans.I phoned my parents who live in far city to tell the situation I was in.My mother said," Calm down! Everything happens for good because there is god." This words did not calmed me istead made me think deeper about life and god because at that moment nothing was going good im my life.

I had many sleepless night thinking deeper and deeper abbout life.People on earth suffer so much.Pain exist everwhere.There is poverty especially in unederdeveloped country like my country Nepal.In Nepal,people worship and pray day and night to god for their good but still there is so much chaos and conflict.Personally, I had to spend my childhood in hostel for my study being companied my loneliness.In hostel,I was discrimated in name of caste and even sometimes bullied.At that time,my mother was suffering from neuro disease.It was hard for me to smile and laugh.

Was this things happening for good reasons?Where is God in my bad situation? Do I have to always suffer?
I could not find the answer just sitting and thinking.I thought I should challange God.I tried to become a bad person.I joined A level institude and chosing A level is bad option here.At school,I disrespected teachers,broke rules,bunked classes and tried to be bad student. Outside school, I joined local gang, violated social norms and rules. I let myself fall in bad company.I even did not kept intouch with my family.I did all these just to see if God comes to me and saves me from doing crime.I also wanted to check if this could result and good. As said too much expectation leads to unhappiness.I expected so much from God but he did not appared.This made me more lonier and unhappier than before.Many negetive thoghts came in my mind.Sometimes,I wished to die.I was completly lost in darkness until that day came.

One day, my best friend told me to join a spiritual course help by Art of living organisation.At first denied but he after he shared me his experience of the course, I thought to give it a try. When we are in darkness,even a small glimpse of light attracts us. The course provided me the ways and arts to live a life. It taught me meditations and gave me spiritual knowledge.I felt like the spiritual practices took away my darkness. I have started to think positively.I have become happier. I searched God in form but he appered in knowedge.

With broader knowledge of life,resposibilities have increased. I have responsibilities towards Earth and every creature.It is not a burden;it is a responsibility that every one of us share. I have responsibility towards my country and people here,towards manking and humanity. I now beleive that pain and sufferings are inevitible but what we can do is keep smiling and face the problems.We should always think positive and act wisely.I f any bad happens to me,I will not get frustated rather I will use wisdom I have and keep faith in God to tackle the situation.I will pass the knowledge I gained to others and work together for better future of mankind.

Suggest some improvements and evaluate my essay please.