Writing Feedback / Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people [3]

Topic : Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

In contemporary life, Internet has spread out rapidly to every coners of the world, as a result; it connects us much closer than ever. I determinely support this contention and my reason are outlined below

To start with, a very first important point to consider is that there are an enourmous number of people using Internet all over around the world. Therefore, they can easily have a chatting or games with the people coming from another countries which was difficult to do in the past . This is an emperical fact that my brother has had a lof of forgein friends since one year ago when he started to use social network on the Internet

What is more, another thing I would like to mention is that Internet contains a huge site of information which is free to access . It leads to the fact that people have more chances to discover another cultural or other national detail . My brother, again, learned a lof of difference languages through the Internet which help him confident to communicate with foregin .

To conclude , Internet plays an important role in bringing people together . It not only pulls people living around the world closer but also creats a clearer understanding of life in another areas

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Writing Feedback / Do you think mathematics can predict divorces ? [2]

In the contemporary eras, predicting divorces based on Mathematics is a matter of increasing concerns . Some people claim that divorces are belong to Psychology, meanwhile ; theoretical contains Mathematics . To my view , my answer would be a yes . And I guess this is probably due to the fact that the accuracy of mathematics in many specific areas , especially in predicting divorces. In the mathematics of marriage, certain expressions of emotion carry a disproportionate amount of emotional weight Physiological data, such as pulse rates was collected, analyzed and calculated from videotaped conversations between couples . This is an empirical fact that the result of correct researches is a remarkable figure accounting for 94% in 2012 .

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