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vsanford64   
Sep 25, 2013
Scholarship / Questbridge Biographical: Literature and My Childhood [7]

I really like how detailed your opening once but it might be too much considering the word limit you have. Did you consider elaborating more on your dads addiction or how your mother and grandparents helped you?
vsanford64   
Sep 26, 2013
Scholarship / The world is a book and those who do not travel read only one page; Questbridge [4]

Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

"The world is a book and those who do not travel read only one page." I thought my life was stuck on that one page; a page where I only saw the Eifel Tower in movies and the Statue of David in history books. My family's income is very low; barely enough to pay the bills. Only in my wildest dreams did I picture myself traveling any time soon. Then I heard about a program called Tempe Sister Cities (TSC) halfway through my junior year and I decided to apply. If accepted, the program matches you with a foreign brother or sister to live with for 7 weeks, all traveling expenses paid. The application process was long. Over 100 people applied and only 30 were selected, I was one of them.

I was chosen to be an ambassador for the city of Regensburg, Germany. Seven other delegates and I spent our past summer living the life of a typical Bavarian. We learned the German culture, history, and language. The country was unlike anything I had ever seen before. Every day brought something new. From taking a tour of gothic cathedrals, to sitting by the river listening to street preforms play each day brought a unique experience.

This trip not only taught me how to be independent and self-reliant, it also allowed me to build great bonds with people I will never forget. My host family and I became incredibly close during my visit. I lived with my sister (Isabella), her brother (Lukas), and mother (Regina). Despite the language barrier, they accepted me as another member of the family. I acted with them just as I would with my own family; by doing chores, helping with dinner, and just spending time together.

Every night we would have family dinner together. The food was so good I couldn't help but to overeat. One night after a big meal I exclaimed "I have a food baby" at the dinner table. The room fell silent and I could tell that my family was confused by what I had just said. After a short pause my mother whispered to me "Who is this father?" I couldn't help but laugh. I explained to them that having a 'food baby" doesn't mean that I'm pregnant, just simply that I am so full I feel bloated and heavy. We all laughed at the misunderstanding and from then on the term 'having a food baby' became a common phrase in the house.

My host family gave me so much and I was so grateful to have lived with such wonderful people. The entire trip was an experience of a lifetime that I will never forget. Through Tempe Sister Cities I have built friendships and memories that I will never forget with people from the opposite side of the world.
vsanford64   
Sep 26, 2013
Scholarship / Starving Kids -- Questbridge Essay - Need to cut down a little. [2]

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I remember when I first moved to Tucson about six years ago. As my family and I drove around Tucson, I realized that there was a severe yet unique class division

My first impression of Tucson was how severe and unique the class division was....
vsanford64   
Sep 26, 2013
Scholarship / My mom went abroad to make a better future for me; QUESTBRIDGE biographical essay ! [3]

' I thought back to the goodbyes shared between my family, friends and I, leaving them behind was one of the saddest experiences. '

" We went to yard sales, something that I had never seen in my life, I played with my cousins on their giant backyard filled with toys and I saw animals that were rare in Mexico, almost every day. " last phrase sounds a bit awkward

Overall I really like your essay :) You might want to elaborate more on your experience at school and how hard adjusting was
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