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Name: jawad
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Dec 15, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOEFL:Some people prefer to work for a large company; international conferences [3]

Some people prefer to work for a large company. Others prefer to work for a small company. Which would you prefer? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

Companies vary from small to large ones based on the context, success and needs of their work. Small companies usually have a local job in the area, while large companies work in an international context providing for the entire nation or even for other foreign countries. I personally prefer to work for a large company for several reasons.

First, to find a job in a large company is way more easier than to find a job in a small company. Large companies always look for new skilled employees to fill in their need of distributing, managing and selling their products in different countries. For example, if a large company decides to open a branch in a foreign country, they would need more employees in that country to work there. In other words, Large company equals more job opportunity.

Second, I think that a large company can give better salaries than a smaller one. The fact that a company is a large one, this means that it's having a considerable success. In other words, this means that the company can give more salaries to its employees. For instance, common sense would tell us that a famous and international known company won't give the same salary as a small local company.

Third, I love travelling around the world. large companies have an international reputation, as they organize international conferences, meetings and workshops which will give me the opportunity to travel in different countries and meet new people. As well as learning new skills in my field from these workshops.

In conclusion, i can certainly state that I would rather prefer working in a large company than in a small one. I have different reasons to hold that, such as having a better chance to find work, having a better salary and having the opportunity to travel around the world to attend international conferences.
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Dec 17, 2013
Writing Feedback / With the advent of television in the XX century, people started to change; we became better persons [4]

How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

With the advent of television in the 20th centurey, people started to change in different ways. These types of media boradcasts, whether it's television or cinema movies, changed the way how we think, how we act and how we learn. As far as I'm concerned, T.V and it's content affected human's thinking and acting in today's society in a very poisitive way for several reasons.

First, I'm inclined to believe that television influenced people positively in the sense of gaining knowledge. Many of today's T.V programs help us to learn about new things in this world. The new information we gather and gain from these programs vary. Information about science, health, technology to even sociology. The programs that offer these topics vary too. For instance, we learn about our planet and how to make it better from documentaries, we also learn about health issues and how to help others from health T.V shows. We also learn how to be tolerant towards other people from international conferences broadcastings as well. Therefore, when we learn new things and when we are more aware about what surround us, we become better individuals in our society.

Second, a reasonable number of programs in the television offer various services for the society to help them overcome some problems in their lives. For instance, there are hotline channels whom the purpose is to help people with social problems to feel better. Other programs offer hotlines for the people to ask specialized doctors live. This helps people in many ways.

Third, with the advent of the television, the world became a place where if something happens in the far east, the far west would know about it in no time. This helped us as humans to learn about the problems of others, which led many times to the development of brotherhood and careness between different cultures. For example, when wars happen in other countries, people hear about them in the T.V, as a result of that, many people start raising charities to help the affected people from wars.

In conclusion, we became better persons from different aspects after the advent of T.V due to many positive influences from it. Whether it's educational or humanitarian, we are now able to know about each other faster than we did before.

I'm really interested to know how much would this essay get in a scale from 0 to 5 if it was written in the toefl test.
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Dec 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / With the advent of television in the XX century, people started to change; we became better persons [4]

Thanks for your feedback everybody.

Other than a few small errors, I think you've done a good job. You asked me how I would rate your essay in your other thread. I am not good at that task and also that depends on the person who would mark your essay too :D , If it is me I would give you 4/5 :)

Thanks for your mark. The point of asking you for evaluation is very important for me because when you give me what you think is my score, i can understand where my situation is right now. If nobody gives me his opinion regarding the score of my essay, then I won't be able to know if overall i'm going in the right direction or if i'm going in the wrong direction regarding the structure, ideas and organization :)
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Dec 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / Introduce yourself : Tell me about your family ? Tell me about your house ? .. [5]

I noticed that the beginning of every answer seems annoyitng if these answers all are answered at the same time. It's just repeating the beginning again and again. If these questions are not going to be answered at the same time. Then i think the beginning sentence is okay :)
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Dec 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / Toefl ; Who are the best teachers? If parents are able, they should teach them. [3]

I'm not an expert or anything, but i think your Introduction and conclusion paragraphs are really short. Your introduction and conclusion sentences are very long, maybe you should divide them. If you google how to write an introduction paragraph, you will find some very useful articles :)
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Dec 18, 2013
Writing Feedback / Television damaged our interactions and made us disconnect from each other for several reasons. [3]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has destroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Communication is an essential part of human beings' daily life, we interact to talk everyday with eachother in different ways for various purposes. Some people think that television ruined our daily communications, whereas others may argue for the opposite. As far as I'm concerned, television has destroyed our interactions and made us disconnect from eachother for several reasons.

First, after the advent of television series and movies, family members started to have less interaction between each other. Before, when there was no T.V, members of the family would gather more often and used to share stories and interact with eachother. For instance, my grandfather once told me about how they used to play table games together before T.V. "Now everybody is busy watching T.V", he said.

Second, youth don't pass time with each other that much anymore. When there was no T.V, youth used to go outside to together a lot to chat about their ambitions and dreams. Nowdays, things have changed a lot, as there are countless T.V shows and movie series which distract the youth from socializing and meeting. Some people may argue that television shows became a need in the lives of some youth.

Third, When there was no television, people were more productive than they are today. In my hometown, people used to gather a lot in order to decide what volountary work they want to do to help those in need. Now, this gathering is not done anymore because many people are busy watching television.

In summary, some people may not agree with me, but from what i have heared and seen, communication and interaction between friends and relatives has been demolished from our society after television. There are various examples of that, starting from fewer family gathering to a larger scale of fewer community gatherings and meetings. This issue will be hopefully solved if we work together to make stronger ties and relationships between all of us.

I'm really interested to know how much in your opinion this essay would get in a scale from 0 to 5 if it was written in the toefl test. Your opinions are important :)
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