Writing Feedback / some high school leavers choose to work/travel; a matter of personal preference [3]

In some countries, some high school leavers are choosing to work or travel for a period of time before going to the university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for those school leavers' decision. Give your own opinion and reasons using your own experience.

Nowadays, an increasing number of students determine to seek a job or take a trip for a period of time after graduation from the senior high school. Yet, there remain some arguments as to whether the overall effect of this trend has been positive or negative. While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that this movement has both sides of good and bad and need to be considered more deeply.

One the bright sides, students have to cope with a plenty of stress and burden when they are in senior high school. Hence, they need to relax themselves after years of hard study, so travelling or working are two of the best options. Besides, only through working, high school guarantees could learn more working experience and marketable skills, which they by no means acquired from their teacher. Moreover, after traveling around the world, they can also broaden their horizons, appreciate natural landscape and even get close to the nature to take a fresh breath.

However, some problems have been identified and need to be accessed. After a period of working or traveling, many students might forget what they have learned from their senior high school and find it difficult to start studying again. Moreover, when students can make money from their hand, some may feel that they could stand alone without further education. In fact, university and college will improve their job prospects as well as offer more opportunity for well-paid jobs and high standard of living. A recently American report has announced that the average salary of university guarantees are higher approximately 25 percent than those who do not have college degree.

To put all in a nutshell, I pen out saying that taking a breaking time period or go straight to the university is a matter of personal preference. From my perspective, students may lose their experience and chance in their life if they do not attend to the university as they can travel or work after graduation.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Essay: teachers lesson vs other sources; 'one click of a button' [3]

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Question:
Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from others sources (such as the internet, television).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

My Essay:

The way in which children today study is radically different from any previous generations, and the increased availability and relatively low price of modern technology has been instrumental in this change. Despite the argument of some people that learners can obtain more useful knowledge from teachers than from other sources, I firmly believe that both alternative sources and traditional teaching methods from educators are equally important in children's acquisition of knowledge.

It is undeniable that the widespread of alternative sources of knowledge has played an important role in students' acquisition of knowledge. Computers can be programmed to provide an endless numbers of questions in diverse range of fields, and as the students answer these questions, the facts has been learned and reinforced. A case in point is the reading and listening parts of TOEFL iBT exams, as candidates have to answer many questions in a limited period of time. Moreover, when students have some academic problems, they can post those to some websites and receive correct answers from unknown people in faraway places without any costs. Besides, in the past, conducting a research require long hours of searching in library shelves, now all can be done at a click of a button. Thus, technologies are vital in students' learning.

On the other hand, schools and university are places in which students gather to be educated and learn from each others as well as formal educators. At schools, students' development has been orchestrated stage by stage, step by step by experienced teachers, and their acquisition of knowledge is guided and backed up in a systematic way. Therefore, formal education approaches are also indispensable.

To put it all in a nutshell, I pen out saying that alternative sources information and traditional education systems are equally important in children's development. So students should learn both from their teachers as well as modern technology to gain the best learning outcome.

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: introduce new technology or free education [4]

Topic: Some people think governments should introduce new technology to improve people's life, while others think free education is the better choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is always a controversial issue as to whether the government should invest in research and development new technology to enhance people's living standard or in free tuition fee for students. From my perspective, it would be much better off if the government spend national resource on creating new modern technology than on free education.

It is undoubtedly that the development of new technology has revolutionized the way we living and improves people's lives. At the workplace, robots carry out many jobs that are impossible to be done by human as well as can be used to discover unknown or dangerous areas on behalf of human people. Besides, Digital technology such as mobile phones and the Internet facilitate both contact with loved one and global trade. Moreover, the evolution of technology also help people to get to closer and promote the culture exchange among different countries. Therefore, with all revenue contributed from taxpayers, the government is supposed to develop new technology to raise the living standard of their citizens as well as accelerate the process of modernization in the world.

On the other hand, some people hold the view that a country would be much better off if its government free tuition fees instead of developing more new technology. They argue that by free education, more and more children are able to go to schools and their parents do not have worry about the lack of money for their children's tuition fee. It is very easy to comprehend that more children go to schools, more students to contribute to their countries after graduation. However, it is believe that this option is more costly than developing new technology and many students may lose their incentive to study due to the lack of educational competition.

In conclusion, spend national resource on promoting new technology or free education is a matter of the authority. However, as individual level, I firmly believe that the government should fund money on the former option than the latter, because of the drawbacks of free education I have mentioned above.