Writing Feedback / IELTS_News media is important in our society. [4]

TOPIC: News media is important in our society. Why is it so important? Do you think its influence is generally positive or negative?

People now seem to get most of the information from the various forms of news media and whether it is important and has a positive impact in modern society or not has sparked spirited debate. My discussion will be as follows.

There is no denying the fact that news media plays an indispensable role in modern society. At first, if news media disappears, the public cannot participate their political life actively because young people who are the future of a nation will lose the chance to hotly discuss and study current affairs and old people who have rich experience cannot offer precious advice. However, if news media exists, news concerning fashion will enrich people's leisure and work life as a glance of entertaining news will be quite satisfying and can alleviate their pressure.

Admittedly, news media both has its pros and cons. Firstly, it can be deceptive and misleading as news media may give an exaggerated account of the issue without any sense of responsibility. However, news media keeps people informed of current affairs, enabling people to have easy access to the global world. For instance, people would not be told on time how is going about the air crush in Malaysia without the help of news media. Besides, some news reported about celebrities, tourism and so on is quite entertaining, which can alleviate people's pressure from their daily life.

In conclusion, news media plays a significant role in current society and it exerts a more positive impact.

Writing Feedback / IELTS_TASK2_ People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives [4]

TOPIC: People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to overcome it?

ESSAY:

In present-day society, to accomplish own dreams, most people has failed to keep a balance between their busy work and daily lives and this problem has to some extent troubled

There is no doubt that the imbalance between work and lives can exert detrimental impacts on people. Spending too much time on work, people can create a potential gap between themselves and family members because of lacking of emotional communications. Moreover, sitting in front of a office desk poses a threat to personal health and can reduce their life expectancy before enjoying a comfortable life for a long time.

In present-day society, to accomplish own dreams, most people has failed to keep a balance between their busy work and daily lives and this problem has to some extent troubled

There is no doubt that the imbalance between work and lives can exert detrimental impacts on people. Spending too much time on work, people can create a potential gap between themselves and family members because of lacking of emotional communications. Moreover, sitting in front of a office desk poses a threat to personal health and can reduce their life expectancy before enjoying a comfortable life for a long time.

The causes of the problem should be ascertained. It is obvious that a vast number of workers do not have a flexible time management as they just fill all their time with all kinds of work, leaving no extra time on leisure. For example, they regard their home as a place to sleep rather than to chat with family members. Besides, under too much peer and social pressure in the company, people have to force themselves to be absorbed in their work and are not easily be destracted.

Given the severity and reasons of the problem, there are some adoptable approaches. Firstly, a strict schedule is needed in order to boost the work efficiency so that people will return home early and be conscious of talking, sharing and exchanging ideas with wife and kids, largely strengthening family ties. In addition, by forming a regular and healthy lifestyle, and therefore they will do their utmost on work tomorrow. For example, doing some sports like swimming helps to alleviate pressure from daily life in a n effective way.

In sum, the imbalance of work and lives bring people negative effects and causes of it are manifold, therefore, people can take effective steps to overcome the problem.