Writing Feedback / Is it more important to have an enjoyable life than to earn a lot of money? [ielts writing task 2] [8]

Hi! thank you very much for your help, I am taking my exam in 2 weeks and I need to understand the level of my writings, which Ielts wark would you give to it?.Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable life than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

-Nowadays, issues regarding the link between job and an happy life are very common:
on one side people who think that loving their job is essential, others who think that money is the key in order to have a satisfying life. I think that both views can be correct to certain extents, but to me doing a job that you enjoy leads to a more fulfilled life.

Firstly, money cannot buy happiness but can really help to achieve it: people can do an infinity of things such as travelling a lot, having expensive hobbies and going often to eat out. Above all they do not have to be worried about saving money, which is one of the most popular problems in life. On the other hand if you choose this way, you might be bored everyday going to work, splitting your life between doing something that you do not love and enjoying your life spending what you have just earnt.

Secondly, another reason is time: if you enjoy what you do, you will consider working as a integrated part of your life, a pleasing "continuum" between your personal life and your professional one. It is priceless getting up in the morning with a big smile: we are never completely dressed without it.

Thirdly, loving what you do makes you do it better (which often means earning more money too). If all the people in the world really loved their job how amazing our earth would it be?! Everything would work better, people would be less stressed: if everybody feeled good, we would be happier.

Obviously having both money and happiness would be perfect, however I strongly believe that money are just a fallacious way for happiness, and that between a good income and an enjoyable job everyone should go for the second one.-

Writing Feedback / Internet is an excellent source of communication, but some people suggest it's hard to find info [2]

Hello! do you think that this is worthy of a 7 ielts mark?IT IS A WRITING TEST 2
It is generally believed that the internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays the Internet has become one of the main sources of information, even if it is hard to select and evaluate them. On the other hand it has an unique power to connect people.

The internet is the perfect medium to communicate, from e-mails to the latest social networks it is easy and quick to talk on a global scale. For example people who met each other around the world or during exchange periods, have the chance to keep in touch and talk in live-view for free, thanks to the skype application.

Nevertheless, internet users find themselves in the "over-information" era, where anyone can upload online contents contributing to an overflow of data. For instance on our social networks it is common to find an infinite range of shared contents whereof people are not able to verify the sources, due also to famous online journals which are the first to amplify fake news.

However, if the Internet had not existed we would have not had such a direct access to documents and contents from all over the globe, learning and studying from sources miles and miles away. Above all, thanks to streaming connection we can attend live online conferences as if we were there, asking questions and participating in the conversation. In the United States, Stanford University often report open-classes videos on internet, and it is an amazing opportunity for anyone to watch those videos since its privileged university-ranking.

Therefore to sum up, in my perspective the Internet is the most suitable place to communicate and to find relevant information.

Writing Feedback / IETLS W1 poverty rates by age and gender (bar chart) and family composition of women in poverty... [3]

Hello! These are the graphs belove my answer
"You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The pie chart shows the percentage of women in poverty and the bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words."
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The charts illustrate poverty rates by age and gender (bar chart) and family composition of women in poverty (pie chart). They refer to United States in 2008.

It is clear that women were significantly poorer than men, and the former were nearly all single women. In detail, being single was the key feature with a total of 80% made up of single women with no dependent children (54%) and ones with dependent children (26%). In addition, the third main poverty percentage regards married women with dependent children (12%).

Furthermore, we can see how women poverty rate were a continuum of decrease throughout the first period of life; around 20% of poverty rate under 5 years old, to approximately 8% at 44-54, despite a peak at 18-24 where poverty rate went back to 20%. Thereafter, according to the bar chart, the rates increased gradually in late adulthood.

Finally men, who had a similar initial poverty rate (around 20%), ended up having a significant fall in poverty rate with age (approximately 5% at 75-up compared with around 15% for women).

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