Posts by RorA

RorA_IDC

Mar 6, 2015

Faq, Help / Unable to start new thread - providing links [7]

cannot post it.

To prevent spam, you may not post clickable outgoing links or link to images. You may remove www and/or http from your message (or remove the Bibliography / Works Cited section) and try again.

I want to post a eassay but words above appered.
I donot think there are any bibliograph or work cited or www or http..SO what should i do,i have alreay checked so many times.I'm new here

can anyone help me? thanks so much

RorA_IDC

Mar 7, 2015

Faq, Help / Unable to start new thread - providing links [7]

yes i did.Finding no relevent answers i need.I decide to use another web browser.thanks anyway

RorA_IDC

Mar 7, 2015

Scholarship / I noticed that most of the students lack good interpersonal and debating skills - SMU COX MBA app. [3]

I guess being a good leader not only knows how to train his team members in different means effectively but also good at how to get along with them and collaborate with them.There is no way we will be able to resuscitate the event had the first edition failed to intrigue the students..I think this sentence is unnecessary,no need to tell others you have failed first edition but emphasis on what you have achieved ,what kind of chinages bring to you after launching the events.THE key point is the difference bring to you,just saying the huge difference bring to your MUN I guess is not enough.

--just my humble opinion.

RorA_IDC

Mar 7, 2015

Writing Feedback / Preventing crime is the viable benefit of using body scanner and CCTV - IELTS [5]

maybe your sentence would sounds be better if you structure your worlds like this.With the rising of criminal phenomenon,people's demands for safety and security increasing correspondently. ~~disturb~~ personal rights. violate some citizen- some citizens .upgrade tranquility? i cannot understand this phrase. i personally argue-i personally believe.I personally argue that this has more positive to prevent criminal actions and efficiency aspect rather than to consider about privacy. it's positive and also "positive" here is not an appropriate word to use.it's more important

prevent criminal actions-- prevent crime.Do not 'gild the lily' if you don't know how to use these word correctly,instead,using some plain words.

RorA_IDC

Mar 7, 2015

Writing Feedback / Preventing crime is the viable benefit of using body scanner and CCTV - IELTS [5]

thanks for correcting my mistakes.
And i 'm really sorry,i've already checked the dictionary,i made a mistake."argue" is an appropriate word to be used in your sentence.I've never seen using this word in this way so i thought it was wrong.apologize again.

wish you have a good day and good luck with your exam.

RorA_IDC

Mar 8, 2015

Writing Feedback / cultural identity lost because the emerge of internet. IELTS [NEW]

Topic; A great many countries around the wolrd are gradually losing their cultural identity because of prevalence of the Internet.To what extends do you agree or disagree with this statesment?

Many people worry about the disadvantages caused by Internet could bring devastating consequences to people and the society.Many bad effect have already happened,such as violating personal privacy,increasing number of cases of newly-type crime,specially the one that people are losing their cultural identity.On my view,I totally agree on this argument and I believe we should do something to prevent it from getting worse.

It is the Internet that connect people together in an unimaginable way.Before the appearance of the Internet, the boundaries between each country still distinct for geographic reistrictions.In that way,one countries' cultural concepts and values permeate others easily.In some extend,weaken the unity of a nation .People especially youth are willing to spend more time knowing intersting news or celebrity gossip instead of learning their own cultural and history.After everything becomes globally-cultural,economy,politics,more and more preofessionals and government are inclined to finish their job and tasks in a cooperative way to give a win-win situations.Moreover, one country's cultural and view are easily abandoned by their citizens if they are aware of that other country is superior to themselves in this competitive wolrd. The concept of cultual identity is becoming more and more vague,the learning of our own cultural spirit are gradually replaced by fashion information and high technology.

With this expected result some action should be implemented.Building our legal system concerning our own distinctive cultural especially to teenagers .To accept this reality but minimize the impact to us,treating Internet with a correct and positive attitude,taking this chanllenge bring by Internet and following this trend,then we can make a better world.

RorA_IDC

Mar 8, 2015

Writing Feedback / Riversdale University's Map in 1973 and in 2010 - IELTS Writing Task 1 [2]

Hi,Mumtazdinar!Actually a wonderful essay for me.I,myself cannot find ANY mistakes.
but if i write this compostion,i will mention the reason why building a new bridge in the lower reach of the river is because the construction of the medical school building in the bottom left corner of the map for people's convenience.

And i will also refer to one obvious factor contribute to the changes in the last paragraph-The increasing number of faculty and students over these years so that car park is extended,bulidings appeared more...

Just my humble opinions.Have a good day!