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Posts by juanmarman
Name: Juan Marman
Joined: Jan 10, 2015
Last Post: Jun 17, 2015
Threads: 3
Posts: 6  
From: Spain
School: The Ohio State Univeristy

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juanmarman   
Jan 10, 2015
Undergraduate / Linkedin Statement - determination and drive to excel inside and outside the classroom [3]

This is my linkedin statement, do you like it? any errors? could you help me improve it? thank you!

I am a Spanish six-year Business Administration & Law student currently studying in the Fisher College of Business at The Ohio State University and have an expected graduation date of June, 2015.

My determination and drive to excel inside and outside the classroom have aided me to be close to achieve my degree with great results and also, to have been able to attend and succeed at other worldwide recognized institutions: my one-year exchange period at Regent's University London reinforced my passion for the international connections in business and finance as well as helping me in further increasing my interpersonal and communication skills. My desire to keep improving academically and enhancing my multicultural competency made me apply to The Ohio State University, where I am currently coursing my sixth and last year of my degree, obtaining great results on my first semester and willing to keep it up.

I have also spent two summer courses in Germany (06' & 07' obtaining an A2 CEFR German level diploma) and also Japan (13' & 14') adding valuable experiences to my international profile. Improving my German language skills after my graduation is one of my short term goals

I am primarily interested in an analyst position to start off a successful career upon my graduation in June, a position where I can keep on expanding the knowledge acquired on the areas I have focused on the most: management and international finance, while gaining valuable work experiences. Your time and consideration are appreciated.

Gracias,

Juan
juanmarman   
Jun 10, 2015
Graduate / CV Professional profile - summary of a good achievements, goals or/and skills [2]

Here's my "professional profile" that I'll include in my CV. Is it a good achievements/goals/skills summary (given the sentences limitation). Any errors? thank you in advance

I am a recent Law & Business graduate looking for entry-level development opportunities to start off a successful career in the banking industry, an area where I have excelled but more importantly where I am most interested in. After fantastic international study-abroad experiences and travels I've realized that a multicultural environment would be the best to grow both personally and professionally.
juanmarman   
Jun 15, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: Internet excellence for communicating people and finding information [7]

Hi! I agree that you could have structured this in a different way. In my oppinion, you could blend the second paragraph (where you talk about the benefits) and then create a new one with the disadvantages (then, you could start with "on the other hand"), which you already introduced in your second paragraph with the sentence "However, the easiest communication by the internet may deficient people productivity as it is used for unnecessary chat". Other disadvantages could be the lack if reliability (i.e. Wikipedia) and security (i.e. hackers).
juanmarman   
Jun 15, 2015
Graduate / The largest building society in the world and UK's first internet banking; Proffesional Cover Letter [6]

Please let me know what you think and if there are any mistakes/things that I could write better. Thank you so much!

Dear Mr. XX,

It is with great enthusiasm that I submit my application for the XX Programme 2015, which I believe may report to you.

My strong desire to join XX does not only come from the fact that it is the largest building society in the world, but from its technology and innovation competitive edge: from launching the UK's first internet banking service in 1997 to recently being the first UK financial services provider to launch an app for smartwatches.

Studying a double degree in Business & Law and interning at a multinational advising firm have given me a broad knowledge in areas ranging from strategic management to M&A law, developing exceptional analytical skills. Through challenging and enriching international experiences I have broadened my adaptability, eager to learn and the people skills to match up. During my time at Columbus, Ohio (USA) I got to make friends that work at Nationwide Insurance, letting me know what to "put members first" meant.

During a 3-year period at my residence hall I was in charge of solving my mates IT problems and I was frequently asked for advice. I spend part of my free time keeping up-to-date in the latest technology releases. It would be fantastic to turn something that I am passionate about into a profession in the financial services industry.

What excites me the most about this opportunity is both the rotation component of the programme so we are able to get an insight of the whole business in the area and the constant feedback for improvement that we would receive. What has taken me to succeed at world-class institutions is my desire to get better and trying my best in whatever thing I do, as my excellent results reflect.

I would love the opportunity to meet with you and discuss the value that I can bring to the organization. Please check my portfolio for a deeper insight of myself, my projects and grades. I appreciate your consideration and look forward to hearing from you.

Feel free to call me at XX or email at XX@gmail.com.

Sincerely,
XX
juanmarman   
Jun 16, 2015
Graduate / The largest building society in the world and UK's first internet banking; Proffesional Cover Letter [6]

I made some corrections, please let me know what you think. Thank you very much for the feedback @Icturn87.

Dear Mr. XX,

It is with great enthusiasm that I submit my application for the Digital & Change Graduate Programme 2015, which I believe may report to you. I want to join Nationwide Building Society because it would be fantastic to turn something that I am passionate about (strategy and technology) into a profession in the financial services industry at a diverse site.

I am convinced I would be the right person to join the programme because of the exceptional analytical skills I have developed while studying a double degree in Business & Law and interning at a multinational advising firm, giving me a broad knowledge in areas ranging from strategic management to M&A law.

Also, my enriching international experiences (I am a Spanish citizen that has studied and travelled extensively around the world) have broadened my adaptability, eager to learn, and the people skills that seem to fit with Nationwide Building Society adding diversity to the organization. My language skills would also be an asset. I want Nationwide to be my next challenge.

Despite not having a technology educational background it is an area that excites me, in which I spend part of my free time keeping up-to-date in the latest technology releases. During a 3-year period at my residence hall I was in charge of solving my mates IT problems and I am frequently asked for advice.

During my time at Columbus, Ohio (USA) I got to make friends that work at Nationwide Insurance, letting me know what to "put members first" meant. I have no doubt that joining Nationwide Building Society would be a correct decision. Not only it is the largest building society in the world, but holds a sustained technology and innovation competitive edge: from launching the UK's first internet banking service in 1997 to recently being the first UK financial services provider to launch an app for smartwatches.

What excites me the most about this opportunity is both the rotation component of the programme so we are able to get an insight of the whole business in the area and the constant feedback for improvement that we would receive. What has taken me to succeed at world-class institutions is my desire to get better and trying my best in whatever thing I do, as my results reflect.

I would love the opportunity to meet with you and discuss the value that I can bring to the organization. Please check my portfolio for a deeper insight of myself, my projects and grades. I appreciate your consideration and look forward to hearing from you. Feel free to call me at XX or email at XX@gmail.com.

Sincerely,

XX
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