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Name: Fidelis Permana Sari
Joined: Nov 16, 2015
Last Post: Nov 18, 2015
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Nov 16, 2015
Writing Feedback / A breakdown of the number of people both female and male participating four evening courses - IELTS1 [2]

Task 1: The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at ad adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

A breakdown of the number of people both female and male participating four evening courses in an adult education institution in 2009 is presented in the bar chart, while the proportion of the ages is illustrated in the pie chart.

Overall, female students tend to join Drama, Painting and Language classes, while Sculpture class was more popular among male students. In comparison, the senior students tend to be more active in participating the classes than the junior students.

To begin, Language class was the most popular class among female students which had reached 40 students. It was twice of the population of males. For painting and Drama class, the population of female students who join the classes were 30 and 20 people, while for the male students just stood at 25 and 10 students. However, for Sculpture class, the participant of male students reached 10 students, while female's figure was halved of male's figure.

The highest proportion of students who participating the classes was dominated by the aged of over 50 which was 42%. It was followed by the group of aged 40-49 and 30-39 who stood at 26% and 16%. The lowest participation was for the group of aged under 20 which had reached only 5%.
fidelissari   
Nov 18, 2015
Writing Feedback / The bar chart compares the proportion of certain categorized people living in Australia [NEW]

The bar chart compares the proportion of certain categorized people living in Australia who visit four selected places which are Zoo, Library, Theatre, and Cinema. Overall, all categorized citizens tended to visit Cinema.

The figure showed that citizens born in Australia had the most frequent in visiting Cinema standing at 70%. This cohort followed by new migrants born in English-speaking countries and born in other countries, with two-thirds and half of the total of the proportion.

By contrast, Library visitors saw a different trend. New migrants born in foreign country was the highest Library visitors stood at more than half. New migrants born in English-speaking countries and born in Australia had the next-highest visitors, 40% and 38%, respectively.

However, Zoo and Theatre visitors' bracket shared the same pattern. The proportion of citizens born in Australia who visited Zoo was two-fifths, while Australia citizens who visited Theatre was halved of Zoo's visitors figure. Meanwhile, the bracket of new migrant born in English-speaking countries who went to Theatre end up at a quarter, while on the Zoo visitors' figure became twofold. However, new migrants born in other countries saw the lowest percentage in visiting Theatre and Zoo at 10% and 32%, respectively.
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