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Posts by thaobui1907
Name: Bui Phuong Thao
Joined: Jan 3, 2016
Last Post: Feb 22, 2016
Threads: 2
Posts: 4  
From: Viet Nam
School: University of Liverpool

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thaobui1907   
Jan 19, 2016
Scholarship / My story can be summarized in three words: Change or Die. Why I deserve a scholarship? [3]

Please tell us why you should receive a scholarship. Please provide as much detail as you can about yourself, your ambitions for the future and what you hope to achieve.

My story can be summarized in three words: Change or Die. Surrounded by an imaginary jail called "safe zone", I lived and studied hazily until the university entrance examination forced me to face with the fact that without a well-educated basement, I would not achieve anything precious. My intensive effort filled up the blank in my academic background and brought me to the best private University in Vietnam. After graduation, being conscious of the role of English in recruitment and Post-graduate education, I bend over my backward to study IELTS myself from the poor beginning and eventually achieved the overall score of 6.5. Despite of having a good job in Vietnam Multimedia Corporation, ambitions urge me to take the greatest challenge of my life: studying abroad.

Undeniably, developing in future society is the education market. Real experiences as a student and a teacher assistant made me identify the gap between the demand of the students and the relevance of the teachers as main issue of contemporary education system. Inspired by the initial result from my research called "Vietnamese students and orient vocation concerns", I nourish a project about a world-wide supply chain where information related to students and teachers is available. For my plan, studying in LJMU is a fundamental step.

In terms of academy, I expect that a year studying in LJMU will equip me with valuable knowledge in advanced management within the global context required for my successful career. Never living far away from home, studying abroad offers me a great opportunity of self-survival, gaining intangible skills including financial management and social skills. Furthermore, the diverse cultures of campus life may enable me to gain experiences of engagement and social navigation.

However, always presenting as considerable financial strain is money. Obtaining the scholarship, I will lighten the burden on my mother's shoulders. Beyond the financial meaning, this scholarship is on verge of proving my latent capabilities which so far have not been recognized by my acquaintances, especially, my parents. My success will make them believe the worthy of investment on my study.

Thank for your help ^^
thaobui1907   
Jan 21, 2016
Scholarship / My 250 word essay on why I believe that I should be awarded a certain scholarship [5]

I believe in the first para, you want to express that you are very enthusiastic person. However, I think that the evidence is not strong. It just explains something around without showing the proofs for what you want to emphasize. Detail example, specially, in academic or volunteer field ,may be useful to make your para more reasonable
thaobui1907   
Jan 21, 2016
Scholarship / Tell us about paid or voluntary work experience and/or how you plan to contribute to Uni [3]

Please tell us about paid or voluntary work experience that you have completed and/or how you plan to contribute to student life.

My living experiences have been built up by a lot of paid works and voluntary duties.
Right after graduation, I was employed as a banking accountant in Vietnam Multimedia Corporation. Self-conducting assigned tasks after 3-month training, being nominated as one of three the youngest outstanding staffs and a part of the excellent team of the company are undeniable evidences for my maturity after a year working hard. However, being inside the workforce, I realized the shortcoming of current management system compared to the International Standards as the severe defect of Vietnam's companies. Hence, Reform is inevitable to integrate.

Besides, charity activities also have an important part of my life. Extending from university life to current, I participate in several blood donation festivals. Aware of the shortage of sufficient living facilities and education materials in distant areas, I call upon my acquaintances and intimates to hold frequently the events of collecting used clothes and studying equipment to send to the disable and needed children. Penetrating their pain reminds me how lucky I am and my responsibility to the society.

Being a color in the picture of campus life, I will be an active, exclusive and impressive shade. Beyond just an international student, my assembly to variety of events creates a chance to bring out Vietnam's history and customs to fortify the cultural diversity that university is desiring, especially, throughout typical traditional celebrations or games. Moreover, taking part in my favorite club- the university Men's football club is the way I get involved quickly in new environment of global friends, and nourish my passion with football in its town. From personal activities to social contribution, I will bring with all volunteer experiences in the past to keep participating in the various social activities cooperating between university and several charity organizations. Particularly, the sympathy with the torture that my niece and many cancer patients suffer drives me to choose Macmillan organization to register for. My contributions to university are even further with the role of alumni that is the bridge assisting me to approach university to a giant education market in Vietnam.
thaobui1907   
Feb 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / Teenagers should obtain more life skills which will be useful in the real world - IELTS [2]

Honestly, it is become valuable if students work in community service.

I think you should avoid using the same words as what they used.

... skill which connecting in many job fields or university majority. Yet, seldom of schools are is serving to improve students life skill.
Teenager students should be introduced with give by giving them opportunities how to communicate with each other in the work or solve some issues together. (I think this is not a good sentence)

However, secondary-education students must be understand about responsibilities when their be a part of group to finishing some job.
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