Scholarship / Tell me how you meet the requirements of leadership [5]

Dear Holt,

Thank you in advanece for your specific comment.
Because of word limitation,I can't add more about my high school experience.If you won't mind please kindly advice me which part should I drop.

And ofcourse,I will add detail about construction firm and volunteer job.
Thank alot.

Scholarship / Tell me how you meet the requirements of leadership [5]

@Holt

I edit a little to my essay and here it is.

Leadership ,this simple word has deep,profound meanings and responsibilities.Being called as a leader is not just taking the name ,it is also taking the responsibilities.I have been faced many projects and missions as a leader and I found out that the problems solving skill,motivation skill,strategic planning skill are the main points the leader needed to have.At my early age of primary school,I played many games at school that support teamwork.Team work cannot be smooth without a proper leadership.Even at that age,I understood that point.A good leader lead the team to achievements.

During my middle school days,I was so motivated in projects and charity events that were held by school.I was starting to know the feeling of accomplishing goals under my lead.It is so amazing and I served as class monitor,project leader,cleanline supervisor of the class and took many responsibilities as a small leader.These small achievements gave me many experiences of leading people and understanding them.After I finished my high school,I attend my first year in Technological University Mandalay.Because I experienced many projects as a leader,I know how to influence people,how to listen to them and how to consider their suggestions.As a leader of my university projects,I could have solved many problems and took them to the "Goal".And I successfully held the small group of consulting for high school students about their problems,their dilemma of which major to choose and many other.It was a non profit small group and I am still proud of what I have done for them.

I also volunteered at a poor child educating program of "Pan Pyoe Latt" organization.There are many kinds of leadership,so we should not be stubborn about the methods.As a teacher in this program I lead not only children but also junior volunteers.It is very difficult to lead self orientation people .I tried to persuade them in many ways,balanced and improved relationship with them also.Discussion and negotiation became the indirect leadership here.I faced many arguments and disagreements.Leaders should not close their perspective on situation.I never consider only my opinions are right.I encouraged them to open to me and we always discussed about the issue we faced,changed the problems into possibilities.I always mind like our mission is to educate the children not to fight about our courses,we can always deal about it.

After graduate,as a young leader in my work(I work as a site engineer at U Min Min Oo construction),I lead many labours in site.All of them are skillful worker and much more experience in construction field than me.They all can do their duty well but they need to be managed and arranged the duties.That is my responsibilities absolutely.Because they are older than me,it is hard for them to treat me like a leader.I learned about civil engineering but the school didn't teach me to understand their mind.It was hard for me to influence them.I cannot collaborate with them,also cannot share their vision in managing the site because of education gap.But I tried to be a good listener for them.Always open and welcome their advices and it is useful mostly.In my opinion,being a leader is hard but it is harder to influence people.A leader cannot make pointing order only.He is going to show his actions and way himself enthusiastically.Understanding people mind first and plan the strategies which can suit with them. They will inspire our actions first and then they will follow our ideas.That's called true leadership and influencing.

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@faizunaa17

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