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Posts by ummasm
Name: Siti Muthmainnah
Joined: Nov 19, 2016
Last Post: Nov 21, 2016
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School: Universitas Islam Indonesia

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ummasm   
Nov 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS task 2 - cause effect of consuming fast food [3]

Question :
An increasing number of people in these days prefer consuming fast food to home prepared ones. Why do you think this trend happen? What soft of problems might it bring into society?


Over the last decade, consuming fast food have seen in the society life style. People would rather to buy ready-made meals than home-cooked ones. This essay will discuss some reasons why this occurred and examine the consequences of this worrying trend.

The main cause of this problem is prolific increase in the number of fast food restaurant. For instance, on nearly every high street there are Mac Donald's and Kentucky Fried Chicken which they mostly open 24 hours per day. This ensuring that people who are busy in their work or even the students prefer consume these foods. Another cause of an inceasing consuer is interesting advertising that encourages people to buy. There are many exaggerate advertising that offer cut of price on their foods. That will lead consumers to think that they should order as long as foods in discount price.

The effects of this have been and will continue to be very serious. The most problematic is helath problem. It will be a large increase in helath related dieases, especially diabetes. This debilitating illness means people have to be injected with insulin for the rest of their life. Furthermore, the social life may be influenced. Ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option to order lead people to change their eating habits. This will result in their family interaction since they have not enough time to eat together with the home prepared foods.

To sum up, it is evident that there are several causes of increasing the number of fast food consumers. Thus, there are variety of negative effects as a result. Society must ensure to prevent this problem from deteriorating further.
ummasm   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / Would it be better to construct a new museum and the city hall rather than to renovate the old ones? [5]

Hi Fitri :) here is my some suggestions toward your essay

1. There are variousvariety of reasons why ...

2. ... repair and maintenance. In the other sides , there are a ....

In this paragraph your explain variety of your reasons, I think that "In the other sides" better to use In additional or Also, because there are not contrast reasons.

3. However, to develop a new museum is not as easy or if you want to use "as" you should add is not as easy as .....

Hopefully, it is help
Thank you,
ummasm   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / There are several reasons why distance learning is more useful than conventional learning. IELTS 2 [7]

@Holt
Hi Mary :) Thank you for your feedback. It is helpful.
however, I want to ask you about the number of word in IELTS task 2.
As I know, it does not matter if we write more than 250 words, at least it is not less than 250. My teacher said that is better to write 260-280 words in task 2. what do you think? what is the best to consider the number of word in our writing?

Regards,
Umma
ummasm   
Nov 19, 2016
Writing Feedback / There are several reasons why distance learning is more useful than conventional learning. IELTS 2 [7]

Question :
Technology like computer and internet made it easier to learn university subject frim home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning from home?


My Answer :
Most subjects in university these days are able to access from home due to the development of technology. Althought this issue has benefits, the drawbacks should be considered.

There are several reasons why distance learning is more useful. Firstly, student can be flexible toward the time course. For instance, students who have occupation are able to arrange their time when they have to work or study as well. This enables them to decided learning while they should work. Another reason is, that they are still living in their place. Most universities which located in big city require their student to live in around the campus or at least in same place. Distance learning make student can acquire the subject materials without moving to the nearby university.

Although distance learning brings positive effects, there are numerous drawbacks for student social life. To begin, there is a lack of interaction between the students and their lecture. While it can be solved by technology which have a skype that helping them to meet each other virtually, it cannot be enough to understand the subjects such as science and engineering. Laboratory courses have also been linked to problem of distance learning. For several courses that they have to do in laboratory will be a consequence for them because they are not be able to run their experiment. Furthermore, there is influence on their relationship among students. If they spend less time in campus, they will have not enough friends to interact with.

To sum up, despite the benefits of distance learning, the negative effects is more problematic. Those affect mostly in student social life.
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