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Posts by kervina [Suspended]
Name: kerwin veerap
Joined: Dec 8, 2016
Last Post: Dec 9, 2016
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From: Mauritius
School: Lba

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kervina   
Dec 9, 2016
Undergraduate / Extracurricular essay- can someone help me correct or improve it [8]

Ever since I entered high school, I spent lots of my free time volunteering for MOVE Volunteer Mauritius. As a member and treasurer of the organization, I was chiefly in charge of financial part. However, my roles extended far beyond raising money to build homes or fund community projects; it was all about connecting with the people around me and trying to understand their problems before tackling them. Alongside this extraordinary group of dynamic and wholehearted individuals, I organized lunch meals and fun days at homes and orphanages and taught young children to play soccer. Their smiling faces and the enjoyment in their eyes as they slowly learn to juggle, dribble or freestyle make it worthwhile.
kervina   
Dec 9, 2016
Writing Feedback / TED Summary - The Internet Secret [4]

Try to rephrase confide citizens the concealed (...) privacy of internet users"?, try making it easier for readers to understand your point

By the way, since it concerns Snowden, try watch the movie, which has been recently released. It will definitely help you for your essay.
kervina   
Dec 8, 2016
Undergraduate / Application answer with fun. Need some help and advice to improve and make it funnier [3]

We know that colleges ask a lot of hard questions on their applications. This one is not so hard and we promise, there is no hidden agenda - just have fun! We have all heard the saying "laughter is the best medicine." Recount a time when something really made you laugh. (200 word limit)

At the Royal College Curepipe, my local high school, we have always had this weird tradition of celebrating someone's birthday with an egg-smashing battle. 27 February 2014, it was our Head boy's birthday. The day before, all my friends and I stayed after school and spent hours to prepare ammunitions: trays of eggs, flour-filled balloons, and bottles of our the RCC elixir (a gooey and stinky mixture of raw egg, vinegar, milk and Coca Cola) and hid them all in our classroom. The following day, when we came to school, to our surprise, the classroom walls were covered with flinging big glops of raw egg and it was so smelly. After few minutes, we figured out that what a terrible mess we had caused: the mixture had triggered a gas- producing chemical reaction that made all the bottles explode, spewing all their contents around. Despite we were heavily punished by the principal and forced to clean the classroom, we still couldn't stop laughing and together sang happy birthday to our head boy, who himself had joined the cleaning process.

Although my high school days are now over, this will remain as one of my most memorable and funniest high school experiences.
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