Writing Feedback / IELTS Task1. SUA, Sweden and Japan; Proportion of elderly in three different countries. [6]

The below graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries, SUA, Sweden and Japan.
150 words.

numbers of elderly citizens

The line graph presents the rate of citizens aged 65 and over among three different countries, USA, Sweden and Japan in a period of 100 years length time.

In 1940, the elderly population from SUA and Sweden was at approximately 9% and 7% respectively. Subsequently, the percentage of elderly slightly increased in both West countries until 1980, where followed a slight fall. The rate of elderly national of SUA and Sweden met around 1998 at approximately 14%. However, Sweden 65 aged nationals started to increase sharply reaching 20% in around 2010. Whereas SUA elderly population kept a steady rate. Nevertheless, in 2020 thinks will tale a turn over of the situation for both west countries, as the percentage of elderly ageing 65 and over will rise to approximately 23% for SUA and 25% for Sweden in 2040.

Although, in Japan, the proportion shown in the graph regarding East elderly nationals is a slight fluctuation. In 1940, the rate was at 5% but afterwards slightly decreased until 1960 and 1990 approximately. However, from then kept rising and in 2020 will increase sharply and will surpass the percentages of SUA and Sweden, reaching the peak at 27% in 2040.

All in all, the percentage of elderly population among them three countries, SUA,Sweden and Japan, fluctuate and will increase gradually to 2040.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1; Percentage of British Students able to speak languages other than English, 2000-2010 [4]

The charts below show the proportion of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Foreign languages knowledge among UK students

The charts illustrate the percentage of students who were capable to speak other languages aside from English in 2000 and 2010, at one University in England. During the time, students became more interested in other languages than them past generations. The only language that maintained the percentage of 10 during 10 years was German language only.

In 2000, the predominant languages was Spanish and French with 20% and 15% respectively, whilst 2010 brought a slight decreas in the interest of students to focus on Spanish and French language, leveling them at 10% with German language.

However, two other languages and other languages gradually increased from 10% and 15% to 15% and 20% respectively, in 10 years.

It is also noticeable that the choice of students of not speaking any other languages slightly increased by 5 % too, as in 2000 counted 30% but in 2010 reached 35%. Despite passing times it is very significant that the generations and times change very fast.

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Writing Feedback / Investing more on railways means investing in a safer future for us and our children [3]

IELTS Task 2. Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Roads vs railways investment

Write at least 250 words.

We live in an age where many of us want a driving licence or already have one and coming with that we also want a private vehicle for commuting and pleasure. But looking at the human population is significantly raising, peoples requirements are increasing too. I will rather agree that the governments should invest more on railways and below I will give reasons to support my position.

First of all it is safer to commute by train than on road or highways. As we can see in TV and magazines, so many accidents happens day by day, yet on railway it is not often to happen. Second of all, avoiding congestion and traffic jam which causes stress and tiredness which does not contributes to our well being, therefore the roads remain clear for any emergencies and also saving land and prevent deforestation which contribute to our heath.

Another point worth noting is that we have more time for ourselves. When I travel to work and way back home, I see students reading and revising their homework. But not only them, also people relax themselves by reading a magazine or just listening to music after a long day working. I agree that we can listen to music while driving but also you have to pay attention on road and any hazards that may occur.

To summarise if governments should spend more money on railways rather then roads divides opinion but my point of view is that by investing more on railways means investing in a safer future for us and our children.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1. Six pie charts about water usage worldwide [4]

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

agricultural, industrial and domestic water usage

The charts provides information about water usage for three different purposes in six areas of the world.

Firstly , let us take a look at the areas where over four fifth of water is used for agricultural purpose and that leads us to the developing areas, Central Asia, Africa, South America and South East Asia.

Furthermore, turning to the industrial use of water, which under half of the percentage are the developed areas, Europe and North America, the opposite of Central Asia, Africa, South America and South East Asia in where the industry is ongoing for development.

When it comes to the domestic usage of water , where is tenfold less than the other two purposes shown in the charts, only South America has the biggest usage.

In conclusion, is a big difference between developing areas and already developed areas. The water usage for different purposes in six area of the world show a main example.

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