Writing Feedback / Our Trip Our Adventure in Jambi - Narrative Essay [2]

My essay writing assignments this week is writing a narrative essay which is need 1000 words. i never try to write narrative essay before. so, I would like you all to correct me if i made mistakes and tell me whether i was right or not. Thank you...

Our Trip Our Adventure in Jambi

In the summer of 2016, after 2 years living and studying in Australia, I decided to go on a birding trip. I chose my home town for the destination. Yet I was not alone, I invited three of my friends to come with me to Jambi. They were very excited and eager to see the beautiful places in Jambi.

After made some plans we decided to go to Jambi by Plane. We used Garuda Airline and it took 7 hours for us arrived in Jambi. We decided to go by plane because we thought that it was so efficient than we took other transportation such as ship or car.

Then, we were looking for accommodation after arrived in Jambi. Because of this is my home town so we were be able to stay in my parents' house in Jambi City and having our lunch there. We slept in my parents' house for 3 days.

On the first day of our trip in Jambi, we went to Muaro Jambi and visited Muaro Jambi Temple. Archaeological Site Muaro Jambi Temple Complex is the largest Hindu-Buddhist temple complex in Indonesia. We took an hour by car to go to that place. After arrived and entering to this place there was some temples that looked very historic. Among the temples, High temple was a temple that encountered first by us. We climbed up to the top through the stairs. In addition there was Gumpung temple which also very pretty, because of its location on a wide field. In addition to witnessing the splendor of the temple, in the temple complex Gumpung there was also a lake, based on information the lake was a bathing place of the ancient kings. It was very interesting.

Second place that we visited was Gentala Arasy Bridge. It is one of the icons in Jambi. This bridge was built in 2012 and was inaugurated by Mr. Jusuf Kalla as Vice President at that time. There were two objects in this location, the tower of Gentala Arasy and Pedestrian Bridge. The shape of Gentala Arasy Bridge that resembles the letter "S" is a stretch of winding over Batang Hari River that roughly about 530 meters long. We would not encounter vehicles that cross on the pedestrian bridge. Gentala Arasy Bridge at night was more beautiful, with colorful lights that highlight the bridge pillars. At the end of the bridge, clearly marked "Jambi Kota Seberang" and on the other side is the words "Gentala Arasy". Spent the night on the Gentala Arasy Bridge was really an exciting thing ever.

On the next day my friend and I went to Kerinci. We wanted to have some nature adventures. It took 12 hours to go to Kerinci by car, even though it would be a very long trip we still excited to visit beautiful places in Kerinci. Me and my friends were accompanied by my college friend who lives in kerinci. He showed us the way some great places to visit in the kerinci. We called him Randa.

The first place that we visited in Kerinci was the Mount Kerinci (also known as Gunung Kerinci), standing at 3805m, is the highest volcano in Indonesia and the highest peak in Sumatra. After saw the splendor of the Mount Kerinci, we continued our trip to Danau Gunung Tujuh. We went up the hill to about 2100 m and then down to the Lake. It took us about 3 hours of relaxed walking to reach the Lake where we had a lunch arranged by Randa and swam in the fresh water. We were using our aqua shoes as there was no good way to enter the water with bare foot, because we might step on a sharp rock or a slippery tree trunk. On the way to the Lake, Randa shared with us his deep knowledge, love and respect for jungle. He did a great job finding, showing and explaining us about flora and fauna of the jungle. We saw a Siamang monkey, many birds and interesting plants (wild orchids, ginger flowers, pitcher plants, ratan tree, iron tree, cinnamon tree etc.).

The second place in Kerinci that made us so excited to see was Hot Spring Gao Semurup. There was available a safe pool for tourists to soak. In this pool, we enjoyed the warmth of sulfur-flavored water to relax. In addition, natural hot springs can also cure some diseases. After bathing, we also tried to boil eggs and bananas in hot water springs. We asked the guard of the pool to do this. No need to wait for so long, the eggs were ready for us to eat. Accompanied by a rustic atmosphere in this place made the food more delicious.

After all of our trip finished, my friend and I went back to my parents' house in Jambi city. We still had a few days more in Jambi. We just stayed home and do nothing because the previous days we had spent a lot of energy. So we used the rest of the time to rest before returning to Australia.

While in Jambi and Kerinci we tried many typical foods. One of them was Tempoyak. This is the most famous food which is comes from Jambi. Tempoyak made from fermented durian fruit. So when I ate it, it was so sour and had a strong smell. Other foods that we eat were Nasi Gemuk and Dodol Kentang Kerinci. We ate Nasi Gemuk for breakfast meanwhile we can eat Dodol Kentang Kerinci anytime. The other typical food in Jambi is Padamaran cake. Padamaran cake is a traditional cake originated from Jambi with the main ingredient of rice flour and coconut milk. This cake is very soft, with a savory taste. It is very delicious to eat.

We also buy souvenirs to take home. The most special souvenir that we bought is Batik Jambi. Batik Jambi is one of the culture of Jambi. Batik Jambi is a fabric that has a very beautiful motif which is made by hand. Although it was quite expensive but it was worth to buy.

After spent more than a week in Jambi my friends and I back home to Australia. While in Jambi I felt very happy. Besides I can meet my parents, I also felt proud to be able to show the beautiful places that are in Jambi to my friends which came from overseas. Saw them who loved to eat Jambi's food also made me happy. Furthermore, introducing Jambi culture to them will also be an unforgettable story for me.

Writing Feedback / Easiest way getting good grades: organizing ourselves and our time, being active in the class [4]

this is my draft for academic essay writing, yet i'm not quite sure how to close my essay i mean i can't manage what should i say in the end of essay so i just made a rough conclusion. i wish you can help me and show me how to make a good conclusion of my essay. thank you so much...

Easiest way getting good grades

Getting good grades is a desire for all of the students. It can be a measured of our success on understanding the subjects. Good grades also encourages students to learn more. Yet, how if we are as students got bad grades? It will influence our motivation to continue our study since we always compare ourselves with other peers through our grades. Because of that, we need to do something to fix it. In this essay, I'd like to discuss several ways about how to get better grades on the next semester in college.

First and foremost, we have to organize all of our studying activities. Many people overlook about organizing their activities and try to jump straight to learn and do without planning and arranging everything appropriately. As a student, we can make our own student planner to write down everything about our study. It can be an assignment list from all of the subject that we have taken this semester. Due to the list it will remind us everything about the assignment and remove any doubt about how the assignment should done, as long as we write down every single detail of the assignment, such as time to submit or deadline, what to do, etc. For example, when we hesitate to do the task on the book or computer we can see the assignment list we have created to make sure. Moreover, we should include the assignment priority on our assignment list in order to control which assignment we have to do first. It will help us easier to organize our activities and assignments as well.

Secondly, time management also has an important role to support ourselves getting good grades. Make a 'to do' list is one way to manage our time so that what we do according to what we have planned. Although the main function of to do list is not to get everything done but at least we know what our responsibilities are. In addition to schedule 50 minutes a day learning sessions outside the classroom also helps us to better understand the lesson that has been taught in the classroom. We can study either at home or at the library as long as we focus on what we learn. Looking for and read other books or references also good to improve our understanding about the lesson and adding insight about what we have learned before.

Third, being active in the class will help us to improve our grades. In many cases, participating in class is an important criterion that lecturers use to consider on our final grades. Due to the fear of being judged and criticized make some student do not participate in the class. Yet, if we want to get good grades we should not think about that. Do not shy or anxious about speaking up during lecture. We are be able to participating in the class by giving opinion or asking and answering a question that given by the lecturer or other students. If we always push ourselves to not participating and speaking up in the class, it will bite us later in life when we cope with meetings, interviews, and other situations that involve public speaking. So the only way is gather our courage to speak and participate in the classroom. Other than that discussing about the lesson with our classmate also become a good thing to do because perhaps we have a different understanding with our friend then the only way is have a conversation with our friends to find the right understanding and correctness.

As can be seen, if we want to push our grades become better than before, the stuff that we should do are organizing ourselves as well, managing our time, and being active in the class. Not only getting a good grades but also we have other advantages if we follow the steps that I have mentioned before. One of the benefit is we will become more organized person like we will always make a list of anything we have to do and make a priority task of it so, we can do everything as good as always. Other benefit is we can manage our time as well because we have a 'to do' it's always remind us to do what we should do. The last thing is we will have an effectively time on our study because we have to study hard and learn more about what we have learned in the class anytime. Furthermore, as long as we have motivation to increase our grades and we always do the best of what we can do, we could get what we want.