Writing Feedback / Japan travellers outside their homeland [2]

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

Japanese tourism growth

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Japanese visitors to foreign countries within a 10 year period, 1985 to 1995, while the line graph gives information on Australia's market share of Japan's tourism. Units are measured in millions of people.

Overall, the number of Japanese travelers showed a steady increase over the period given, besides 1991, becoming almost four times higher in 1995. Similarly, Australia's share of Japan's tourist market rose marginally and skyrocketed in 1994, even though there was a slight fall in 1989 and 1995.

Regarding tourists coming from Japan, those began at just over 4 million in 1985 and grew gradually until 1990, when they surpassed 10 million. However, a minor decrease can be seen in 1991, as Japanese tourists were just above 10 million. Despite this, their percentage started rising again in 1992 at approximately 12 million, before reaching its peak of nearly 16 million in 1995.

Additionally, although Australia's portion on Japanese tourism started at just 2% in 1985, it increased steadily throughout the years and doubled in 1989. It also experienced a downward tendency at only above 4% in 1990, but a ceaseless growth is observed afterwards, hitting the highest point of just over 6% in 1994. Nevertheless, a mild deduction at exactly 6% is noticed in 1995.

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Writing Feedback / The proportion of attendance in fast food chains in the U.S.A. within a 10 year period [2]

The chart below shows how frequently people in the U.S.A. ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

monthly visitors of fast food eateries

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of attendance in fast food chains in the U.S.A. within a 10 year period (2003 to 2013).
Overall, it is observed that people mainly preferred to eat at junk food restaurants either weekly or one to two times a month, whereas only a few paid a visit daily, or did not at all.

In detail, weekly fast food consumers corresponded to roughly 30% in 2003 and slightly increased to nearly a third three years later, before notably declining below 30% in 2013. Additionally, monthly visitors of fast food eateries reached exactly 30% in 2003 and, despite falling by 5% in 2006, they rose up to almost a third in 2013.

Moreover, those who went to such restaurants enough times per week were approximately a fifth in 2003, reaching 25% in 2006, but then decreased to just over 15% in 2013. Regarding people who attended fast food chains a couple of times a year, it is noticed that they accounted for almost 15% in 2003, before downfalling in 2006 and 2013.

Finally, daily and zero attendance were much less, namely just under 5% in 2003, whilst deducting below that in 2006 and 2013.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: not enough of courtesy is demonstrated toward elderly people (reasons, problems in society) [3]

respect to older people

Hi, everyone! I'm preparing on my own for IELTS academic and I have trouble regarding writing, as there is no one to provide me with feedback. I would appreciate it if you gave a look to my essay and make some comments on it :)

At present, numerous nations do not treat the elderly with the required respect. In my opinion, there are certain factors which have contributed to this situation, as well as significant consequences for society as a whole.

A main cause of disrespect towards seniors is that they are incapable of coping with the rapid changes which occur throughout the world. In other words, older people think in a more conservative way than the youth and unable to understand the meaning of progress and modernisation. For instance, the elderly have trouble handling technological devices, such as computers and mobile phones, as they have not been taught how to do so. Consequently, young people have neither the patience nor the willingness to introduce them to their own value system, thus older people are not respected enough.

For this reason, a major effect would be the isolation and marginalisation of the elderly. Namely, in spite of the fact that they are typically members of this society, they do not get the chance to provide the rest of its members with precious knowledge and advice. For example, older people are considered outdated by the youth for highly valuing the simple things in life, such as food, and they do not try to find the meaning behind their words. Therefore, seniors end up in nursing homes, as they cannot be taken care of, demonstrating that the older ones do not fit in a modern society.

In conclusion, older people are disrespected due to lack of understanding by the younger ones, for they act based on different values, resulting in the elderly being on the sidelines.