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Topic: The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
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owning peronal computer - in numbers

The given diagrams indicate information about ownership of computer as a percentage of the people between 2002 and 2010, and by different levels of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

It seems that the people having computer had been increasing stablely since 2002. Then, it reached approximately 75% in 2010.

Moreover, it is worthy of attention that the people who have the higher level of education (postgraduate qualification) were more likely to have the computer, while the people who have the lower level of that (no high school diploma) probably less.

What's more, it shows that there were more people having the computer in 2010 comparing to 2002. For example, although those people with no high school diploma were only around 10% in 2002, the percentage of those with that was 4 times to 2002 in 2010.

In conclusion, there was a steady rise in computer ownership between 2002 and 2010. Having the higher education level, the people were more likely to get a computer in any year.

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