Undergraduate / |Common App| Caltech Essay - Scientific exploration clearly excites you [4]

- I'm really not sure " for me" is formal or not
- Secondly, "exploration is something that I want to dedicate my life", should add "to" ?
- Thirdly, before " so that" you shouldn't you comma,
- "even beyond Earth say one day when SpaceX or NASA's SLS will take us to far beyond Earth", this sentence is repetitive and ambiguous.

Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 Discuss both point of view: should children learn mathematic in school [3]


ST you need to fix is:
- learning basic => basics or basis
- Your conclusion is not suitable in writing task 2 structure.

Writing Feedback / Should we allow children to make their own decisions on a common matters (such as food or clothes) [6]

I think you put so much effort in your essay, 382 words seem to be overwhelming.